Reviews for Fifty Shades of Darkness
Guest chapter 21 . 4/17
It was really good I enjoyed every chapter
Roydale chapter 6 . 3/11
"She 'ignorantly' stares at Ana's fragile state. Ignorantly should NOT be used at all in this sentence. His mother Grace is a doctor, very compassionate and understanding. She's going to totally understand trauma and what it does to a girl who's been raped. Dr. Grace Trevelyn- Grey is not ignorant in any way.
Roydale chapter 5 . 3/11
Oh honey. Goosebumps cannot protrude through clothing! They can tingle or shiver or dance on her skin under her clothing. It's one thirty in the morning and I can't stop binging your story.
Roydale chapter 4 . 3/11
Very tender, very sweet. You've given Mr Grey hidden depth in his character. An unselfish surprise of tenderness. As to your question, I'm with team Ana's POV.
Roydale chapter 3 . 3/11
Love it! Yes very dramatic! Oh man, I can see Taylor will be disposing of a dead body soon! Christian is wracked with guilt and you are spot on with his character reacting that way.
Roydale chapter 2 . 3/11
Do you really want constructive criticism? I would never want to offend you. I'm enjoying the story too much! It should be my attention is drawn to the glass window on the left. Escala should be capitalized. It is not in the 10th paragraph. - It doesn't seem right calling it our bedroom not don't. - Tears began to frequently fall from my cheeks as I enter Christian's bedroom. Frequently is an unnecessary description as you have already established tears as plural many years. Rapidly spill down my cheeks? Crawl is used too much in two sentences. My editor wouldn't even let me use the same word in the same paragraph.( Yes, I was published once. In 2005 - a time travel. ) Done nothing since. How about "until I can make my way to the bed? Produced when I scrub hard. Not produce. Love love love the story so far. Please tell me you don't mind my suggestions. Not comfortable going any further until you're ok with it. Roydale
Roydale chapter 1 . 3/11
Hi so you're only 17? Wow, what you've written has really grabbed my attention and held it! I plan to read on. I did find a couple of grammar mistakes but it's an easy fix. What I would think about is posting a "rape trigger"warning. Some victims cannot read things that wiLloyd trigger their ptsd. You have the makings of a real wordsmith.
Paula White chapter 21 . 3/2
Super good story even with the ups and downs of Christian and Ana. I hope there will be updates. Please!
Paula White chapter 4 . 2/28
I am having mixed emotions by that I mean I love this yet I had to stop to get tissues. So sorry I did not review earlier I couldn't stop reading.
TVHollywoodDiva chapter 21 . 2/28
this is really good please update
xxxnady chapter 21 . 1/18
Are going to continue with this story or not
AndTheSaintsAreAllMadeOfGold chapter 21 . 1/4
I'm not sure how I feel about your story. I know that each victim of assault has a different way of dealing with it, but this seems rather unrealistic.
You need to incorporate your ideas in a more realistic plot and also put in more details if possible. It makes reading more intense.
Another things that's weird that there hasn't been any info on the Jack Hyde front. How is that even possible especially in Christian's case?
cheshire15 chapter 21 . 12/29/2016
More...Oh wow.. want more info, explanations and both sides of this
Christian618 chapter 21 . 12/29/2016
Thank you Elena!
BestGuest chapter 3 . 12/27/2016
I hate this story. I know you think your story needs this kind of violence to get people
to read this but you are so wrong.
Read Open Mind or Listen to your
Heart or Claiming Anastasia. Fifty Shades Later. All great fanfic
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