This fic is amazing. More a series than just a single fic. So engaging in the plot arcs and world building.

C.R.Y.I.N.G
LITERALLY I HOLLERED WHY WOULD YOU STAB HUEI
GAH
FRIGGIN MAUL HES SO TRAGIC I CAN BARELY BE MAD SIDIOUS IS THE DEVIL HIMSELF G.A.H I AM SO EMOTIONALLY ATTACHED IVE READ LIKE TEN CHAPTERS TODAY AND IM NOT SLEEPING YET I AM EMOTIONALLY TRAUMATIZED IF HUEI DIES IM DYING TOO

My love for this knows no bounds, and I feel almost inadequate to comment on it, but you should know the inspiration it gives me for my own writing. Your own story is just as inspiring as the one you’ve woven with these characters, and I feel like a random fan rooting for a celebrity. This story is absolute magic, and how you weave your own beliefs in to give it such life makes it all the more potent. You’ve handled a lot, a LOT, of heavy topics with grace, and it makes a reader stop and think. This is really incredible. I wonder how it’s going to sound when the next time someone asks me what my favorite book is and I say a Star Wars fanfiction.

*incoherent bellows*
THIS CHAPTER
THIS WHOLE CHAPTER
I AM BEYOND DECEASED
I CRIED
I PUT MY PHONE DOWN AND CRIED
MY CAT CAME UP TO ME CONCERNED
XANATOS RIP THE TRAINWRECK I CRIED FOR YOU
SUCH A TENDER MOMENT I WAS ALREADY RAVING FOR THAT
AND THEN QUI GONNNNNN HIS LITTLE “Yes.” WHEN YODA ASKED IF HE WOULD GO WITHOUT PERMISSION AND THEN THE EXTENDING OF THE LIGHTSABER
OKAY
I GET IT
QUI GON IS A GREY JEDI WHOSE FIRST LOYALTY IS TO THE BOYS THAT ARE HIS FAMILY
I WEPT
AND THEN
A.N.D. T. H. E. N.
OBI WAN PLAYED HIS FLUTE FOR SHMI. HE HELPED SHMI DURING LABOR. ALL BECAUSE SOME BLOCKHEAD PADAWAN WANTED REVENGE HE WAS PLACED THERE TO EASE HER PAIN
THIS MAKES ROTS SO MUCH WORSE BECAUSE THEIR BOND WAS ALREADY BEGUN WHEN ANI WAS A FEW HOURS OLD
THEY SHARE A MCFRICKIN BIRTHDAY
MY G. O. S. H. I LOVE THIS FIC

I am in pieces. These are actual children. Huei is a child permanently scarred physically and mentally from a destiny he didn’t get to choose, and yet doesn’t complain about. Obi Wan doesn’t get the option for either. I am an emotional train wreck. Why does this hurt more to read than the ZAAGC arc? Literally, at least I had the assurance that Qui Gon was coming. Now, frickin people just won’t TALK to each other. Sigh. They are innocent children and they’re immature children but I love them. Huei doesn’t count in that generalization he’s just fantastic in general

The way you described Dooku’s approach and how Huei noticed has moved me to want to draw it, or the way Huei sees force signatures, rather. Literally, it’s so vivid and pretty. I adore triumphant tragedies and Huei is becoming my favorite. Also as someone who had never heard of Tahl before this fic, I literally melted, I ship them so hard. I l.o.v.e. this fanfiction. The JA novels better be half this good, or I will be very disappointed.

This whole chapter feels like a hug. All of the treachery of the several chapters before is tied off so elegantly, and it’s a hug. Ezhno, Huei, and Obi Wan all cooking together like a couple of cousins at a family reunion is a vibe. I feel like Ezhno is a sort of elastic that holds everything the together but still lets it breathe and stretch. He’s such a little chaos mongrel, I love him. The interaction between him and Huei is definitely on the top ten greatest moments for this fic! I wonder what the conversation between Yoda, Kit, and Feemor was like. Also, someone needs to tell Huei that he had two jedi knights that wanted him as their padawan, he needs to know that he’s in high demand. Gah, the ocs in this fic are just too good!

Everyone in this story needs a cup of tea and a hug I literally cried
I adore this with every part of my soul and I loathe it just as fervently my GOSH you know how to craft a story
I said I was intrigued to see how this would affect Huei, but now I’m confident that it will rip my heart out. I never thought that Qui Gon whispering “I’m so sorry” would just. Bust my heart right open but HERE WE ARE. I could almost hear the rise and fall of music as I read this, your writing style seems to go hand in hand with music. It’s so, SO good, I can’t

Wooh, this went to a dark place. From the moment I realized what they were doing to the disabled students, to the point Obi Wan broke out, I felt like I was slipping into the same despair as a jedi deprived of the force for the first time in his life. And then, when Obi had it all come surging back to him, as is reader it felt like I was right there next to him, feeling my head come up through the surface. And good grief, poor Huei! Imagining such a broken Dooku is almost unfathomable to me, but goodness, the poor boy. I’m curious to see where you take that, and the effect this whole ordeal is going to have on the boys and their masters. I mean, yes, Dooku, Jinn, and Kenobi all have plot armor, but Huei was already intriguing, and this is for sure going to twist him in a whole new direction. And the reunion between Obi and Qui Gon! GAH, I’m not ready!

“A quick foray into the mind of Obi-Wan Kenobi, as he collapses choking onto the plastiform refectory floor:“
This line killed me. This whole chapter killed me. Please bury me with it I should not like to be parted from it.
No but the way you threw in that line about Huei while they were all standing over the footage? . Literally art. The way you write is just so so so so finessed and I adore it

I ACTUALLY WHEEZED WHEN I REALIZED WHAT OBI WAS DOING AND THE FACT THAT HE TOASTED AT QUI BAHAHAHAHAHA
This is a wonderful arc, it’s so cool to see all of their different personalities and this new side of Obi Wan’s insecurities. Gah, I love this fanfic!

my hart. m e. This has killed me. I am dead. Bury me with this story. Literally I've never read any of the JA books but I'm going to after I finish read this purely because my heart belongs solely to Obi Wan and Qui Gon

I love plot armor, because without it I doubt I would still be breathing. I freaking love this story. And yes, Palpacreep creeped very well this chapter. Poor Xanatos. Anakin without the publicity or power, but still so sad.

This might be my favorite chapter.
The poetry that is the war drums and how padawan and master unknowingly face it together.
He meets a toddler Padme and kisses her hand.
The observation that as the Force breaks through the challenges it faces as a battleship breaks through waves, Obi Wan Kenobi will persevere so blatantly.

You've taken Star Wars and given it meaning. I know that you wrote this somewhere between 2013-2015, and went to medical school apparently, but good god, if you don't continue writing in some form, a true skillmaster will have been lost.

'Do not mock those who Turn, but grieve for them and their loved ones'
That’s it you’ve done it you’ve completely summed up Obi Wan Kenobi in one sentence I’m weeping

Okay but actually. I was literally on chapter seven and I went and sent like fifty texts to one of my friends about how much I loved Qui Gon and Obi Wan and now I’m just clapping like a happy little sea lion. God I love this. Bury me with a copy of this fic.