Reviews for Double Trouble
procon chapter 10 . 9/19/2014
Haha aww so cute! I think it's cute how she gets fuzzy feelings with Thane but it's good it won't go beyond that. And how she is with Kolyat! It's so cute and he's like the little brother she never had! I'm looking forward to your next update!
Musicalrain chapter 10 . 9/13/2014
Yaaayyyy! It's up! _ Super excited we've picked this up again!
Apollo Wings chapter 9 . 9/13/2014
Solana! What a twist! I loved that! xxx
Dreamer Rose chapter 8 . 7/15/2014
This is very entertaining! I love how she knocked out Kolyat! Though I am a little worried about how she'll react to the aftermath of Garrus' mission. Depending on what happens, I can just see her punching him in the damaged mandible. Keep up the good work!
FalconHawk chapter 8 . 4/8/2014
My main problem with this story is that there's not nearly enough time spent just developing the characters. I do wonder if that will come later and you're just trying to get the team together, but there's so little development that it's really hard for me to care them. It's alright to have a filler chapter here and there.

Having said that, the AU bits of this chapter were the most entertaining part, and as always Averil's personality is highly amusing to me. As is the interaction with her and Audrey.
FalconHawk chapter 7 . 4/8/2014
As happy as I am to see this story finally updated again (and I'm very happy for that), I've really gotta say that I was not impressed by this chapter, and if I didn't know better, I'd say it was rushed. There was really no detail on much of anything, no depth of character, no insight into anything, and it seemed like most of the dialogue just came straight from the game. I know that you can do better than this.
Apollo Wings chapter 8 . 4/7/2014
I quite enjoy Audrey and Averil, well done girls and keep up the good work xxx
draupadi chapter 6 . 9/9/2013
Hey, This is good. are you going to update it? Do you have the 1 ME as well?
FalconHawk chapter 6 . 9/8/2013
'And there wasn't a batarian or vorcha in sight! Hallelujah!' That line got me laughing pretty good. I do agree that your actions scenes leave something to be desired, but I wouldn't go so far as to say they suck. I might able to help with that if you'd like. As with every other chapter so far, I say 'well done', and it leaves me wanting more.
FalconHawk chapter 5 . 9/7/2013
I agree with Averil, Audrey does think too much, haha!

I do find it hard to believe that Averil gave in to the makeover idea so easily. Especially with her renegade/defiant personality. People like that don't tend to run from their problems very easily... just saying.
Apollo Wings chapter 6 . 9/7/2013
AUing the story order is cool. It makes for interesting reads.
Brilliant chapters the both of you, your 3rd person has improved to no end Musicalrain and it's heartwarming to see the relationship between sisters from two POVs xxx
Apollo Wings chapter 4 . 8/17/2013
I'm loving it all so far! Glad to see Musicalrain working with another talented author (even if you're nicking her away from our DA fic! I can stand it as long as you have such good updates!)
Looking forward to more xxx
FalconHawk chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
Oh yes, I definitely love Averil. Her thoughts on Mordin seem to mirror my own. Normally I complain a lot about in-game dialogue being used, but I suppose in this case I can swallow my bile and accept it, there's not too much in-game dialogue used and it is well placed. Looking forward to more from both of you.
FalconHawk chapter 3 . 8/16/2013
I've always liked Garrus, and I'd say that you did an excellent job so far of portraying him as he is in-game. It did feel like the interactions between him and Audrey seemed a bit rushed however. Audrey's private thoughts gave me a good chuckle, especially the ones regarding Miranda.
FalconHawk chapter 2 . 8/13/2013
I look forward to seeing how Audrey reacts when stuff starts to go wrong. I did think that the first chapter was a bit short, and pretty dry, didn't really reveal much of anything about Audrey as a character... but I'll try to be patient.

As for chapter 2, I LOVE it when the there's a real spit-fire in the group, and having one as a main character should be interesting. Her internal dialogue had me chuckling pretty good. I would say that there's a fine line between renegade and psycho however... oh well, time will tell. A bit more detail on what went down on Freedom's Progress would have been nice, especially considering that you only briefly mentioned Tali in there.
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