Reviews for The Human Phoenix (On Hold)
Guest chapter 19 . 5/9/2015
Love it, can't wait for more! .
acompletenerd chapter 18 . 11/13/2014
The primus for your story is really interesting. Don't drop it.
BronGurl chapter 17 . 8/6/2014
I luv the songz that you put in thiz chap!
Upd Te!
Pyschochica1996 chapter 20 . 8/4/2014
The ending made me cry so much that I had to put my phone down and actually calm myself before writing this review. When are you updating I love this story so much?!
LivingFury chapter 19 . 7/31/2014
I love the way you incorporated her flames into her dress.
Iveya Jade's psycho mind 08 chapter 17 . 5/5/2014
ok I have finally finished the story and hope you keep it going
Guest chapter 17 . 2/21/2014
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Guest chapter 17 . 2/5/2014
Please please update this is amazing and I love it! :-)
cherry blossoms chapter 17 . 1/26/2014
to desdendelle:
dude, it's a fan fiction story! here on , is a place where people type out their creativity. whether it's from their favorite movies/books etc.. the human phoenix is a great story! if the author wants it to go beyond the potterverse, then let them! i love that the author put in elementals in the story.
I've read your criticism and I've got to say: YOU HAVE NO IMAGINATION WHATSOEVER!
cherry blossoms chapter 17 . 1/26/2014
love it. it's really awesome that she is a fire elementalist. can't wait to read the reaction of the students when they find out what she is. who is her soul mate? Charlie, Fred, or George? or is it someone completely different?
TheGoldenWritersApprentice chapter 17 . 1/3/2014
Oh god haha, I have read this story before, way before I saw your review on my story (Bella the Dragon Keeper) sorry it has taken me so long ( October :/ ), school's been rough and then there is family. It's fantastic; keep up I'm really enjoying the story line. xxx
Ketsueko chapter 17 . 1/1/2014
Haha, awesome chap as always ;D
And randome answer, yeah, I saw both _ They were awesome **
Glacio Fajro chapter 17 . 12/31/2013
Awwwwwww yeeeeeeaaaah
Iron Mikan Frost-Elric-Uzumaki chapter 17 . 12/30/2013
This chapter was amazing. I loved it. I watched hobbit 2 and was in love and the songs from frozen are amazing. I hope you update soon. I want to see what will happen next.
desdendelle chapter 1 . 12/30/2013
I've only read the very first chapter, so I will focus my criticism on it, and refrain from commenting on the story as a whole. As ManaTheWeirdOne said... Pele is a Mary Sue, or at least, dangerously close to being one. Why, you may ask. Well, I spot the following problems:
1. She is half Fire Elemental. First of all and most jarring, there are no elementals of any sort in the Potterverse. Second, most Fire Elementals are a) ever-burning, and b) lack the required bits and pieces, so it's very implausible that one of them had a daughter with a human.
2. She is the last of her kind. Never mind the fact that if the Fire Elementals were all killed long ago, it is paradoxial that her mother is one; unless Pele being the last (uncanonical) Fire Elemental is a major part of the plot (see: Doctor Who, were the fact that the Doctor is the last of the Time Lords is an important part of the plot... until the 50th anniversary special, anyway. Thanks, Moffat) it's just kibble - a waste of words that only serves to make Pele seem special.
3. Her backstory is copy-pasted from Harry's. That's not only a sign of Sue-ness, it's also a sign of lazy writing (because it means the author can't be bothered to think of her own backstory).
4. She has ultra-special, highly unrealistic eyes. Also a Mary Sue's sign.
5. She has a special Necklace of Protection(tm).
6. The description insinuates that Pele is stronger than the Deathly Hallows, which is also worrying (since, if it's true, she's OP as fuck and breaking the power-levels of the Potterverse).

That said, the chapter has a few problems that aren't connected to Pele's character.
1. There're a few grammatical errors (missing capitals, punctuation errors, and the like).
2. It's Avada Kedavra, not Kedava.
3. There are author's notes in-story, which is bad form.
4. You got Remus' swearing wrong. Merlin is not God.

Anyway, I hope to have helped, and if you have any questions, feel free to PM me.
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