|Reviews for The Human Phoenix|
| Guest chapter 17 . 2/21
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| Guest chapter 17 . 2/5
Please please update this is amazing and I love it! :-)
| cherry blossoms chapter 17 . 1/26
dude, it's a fan fiction story! here on , is a place where people type out their creativity. whether it's from their favorite movies/books etc.. the human phoenix is a great story! if the author wants it to go beyond the potterverse, then let them! i love that the author put in elementals in the story.
I've read your criticism and I've got to say: YOU HAVE NO IMAGINATION WHATSOEVER!
| cherry blossoms chapter 17 . 1/26
love it. it's really awesome that she is a fire elementalist. can't wait to read the reaction of the students when they find out what she is. who is her soul mate? Charlie, Fred, or George? or is it someone completely different?
| TheGoldenWritersApprentice chapter 17 . 1/3
Oh god haha, I have read this story before, way before I saw your review on my story (Bella the Dragon Keeper) sorry it has taken me so long ( October :/ ), school's been rough and then there is family. It's fantastic; keep up I'm really enjoying the story line. xxx
| Ketsueko chapter 17 . 1/1
Haha, awesome chap as always ;D
And randome answer, yeah, I saw both _ They were awesome **
| Glacio Fajro chapter 17 . 12/31/2013
| Iron Mikan Frost-Elric-Uzumaki chapter 17 . 12/30/2013
This chapter was amazing. I loved it. I watched hobbit 2 and was in love and the songs from frozen are amazing. I hope you update soon. I want to see what will happen next.
| desdendelle chapter 1 . 12/30/2013
I've only read the very first chapter, so I will focus my criticism on it, and refrain from commenting on the story as a whole. As ManaTheWeirdOne said... Pele is a Mary Sue, or at least, dangerously close to being one. Why, you may ask. Well, I spot the following problems:
1. She is half Fire Elemental. First of all and most jarring, there are no elementals of any sort in the Potterverse. Second, most Fire Elementals are a) ever-burning, and b) lack the required bits and pieces, so it's very implausible that one of them had a daughter with a human.
2. She is the last of her kind. Never mind the fact that if the Fire Elementals were all killed long ago, it is paradoxial that her mother is one; unless Pele being the last (uncanonical) Fire Elemental is a major part of the plot (see: Doctor Who, were the fact that the Doctor is the last of the Time Lords is an important part of the plot... until the 50th anniversary special, anyway. Thanks, Moffat) it's just kibble - a waste of words that only serves to make Pele seem special.
3. Her backstory is copy-pasted from Harry's. That's not only a sign of Sue-ness, it's also a sign of lazy writing (because it means the author can't be bothered to think of her own backstory).
4. She has ultra-special, highly unrealistic eyes. Also a Mary Sue's sign.
5. She has a special Necklace of Protection(tm).
6. The description insinuates that Pele is stronger than the Deathly Hallows, which is also worrying (since, if it's true, she's OP as fuck and breaking the power-levels of the Potterverse).
That said, the chapter has a few problems that aren't connected to Pele's character.
1. There're a few grammatical errors (missing capitals, punctuation errors, and the like).
2. It's Avada Kedavra, not Kedava.
3. There are author's notes in-story, which is bad form.
4. You got Remus' swearing wrong. Merlin is not God.
Anyway, I hope to have helped, and if you have any questions, feel free to PM me.
| Alexpuppy789 chapter 16 . 12/19/2013
I think that one of the twins should be her treasure that she has to get. I really like your story! It is very good!
| Iron Mikan Frost-Elric-Uzumaki chapter 16 . 12/19/2013
I loved this chapter. It was great. Please post another one soon.
| Guest chapter 16 . 12/19/2013
Oh my goddesses! I love the description of the dragon it sounds beautiful!
I feel so bad for Pele...Hope she gets better!
| ManaTheWeirdOne chapter 1 . 12/19/2013
I'm sorry but I just can't read any further. From the very first words describing Pele's hair, I knew she was a Mary Sue.
As I can't bring myself to read the rest of the chapter, it would be unfair of me to criticise your story as I haven't read it. Please note, however, that I am not flaming, merely offering criticism.
However, there is a website that can provide criticism far better than I can. Your story was featured there:
pottersues . livejournal 873939 . html
Just remove the spaces. Good luck!
| Iron Mikan Frost-Elric-Uzumaki chapter 15 . 12/15/2013
I really love this story. I hope you update soon. Good colors for fire would be purple, blue, and black. I hope to read a new chapter soon.
| lilgenious chapter 15 . 11/8/2013
This should be your story, not your readers. As a matter of fact, you should have these things outlined before you publish online. These ANs are getting rather annoying.