Reviews for Surrender Your Heart, Capture My Soul
moi chapter 14 . 2/17
I cant deal with this story anymore. 420,865 words of bullshit, fluff, and filler
mishimo chapter 10 . 2/16
good story but...
1. to many typos
2. mostly fluff and filler
3. hurry up and get to the point
4. repeating the same damn things over and over again
5. again, are you typing this on your phone or something because your typos are insane
6. a lot of unnecessary stuff in the story
TomboyWriter chapter 19 . 2/15
I feel like a complete asshole. I've gone this far without reviewing.
Actually, no I don't. It makes a point!
Usually, when I read a story with multiple chapters, I review every last on of them. But I didn't want to stop reading with yours. I had to FORCE myself to review this chapter...
Anyways!
Awwwww... Poor England! I just wanna snuggle him! OAO (By the way, the kiss in the last chapter had me squealing. I swear to God, whenever there's a moment between these two in this story, I'm punching the air and chanting, 'Kiss! Kiss! Kiss!' and when they don't I groan in disappointment... But awww, when it finally happened it was perfect and SOOO SWEET! But-) America, you asshole! You broke the little tsundere's heart! You see this?! This is my middle finger! T_T Lol, I still love you 3 A little... YOU BETTER HOPE TO GOD YOU APOLOGIZE THOUH OR YOU'RE DEAD.
I'm insane. Suck it.
And also a USUK fangirl.
And NOOOO! WHY WHY WHY did you have to have ITALY of all people marked?! Bastard! (JK) The only way it could possibly be worse if it was England or Prussia! (Favorite character-England; second favorite-Prussia, third favorite-Italy)
... Sorry for the annoyingly long review... If you can even call it a review because it was mainly me fangirling! (I'm betting on America and England because I SHIP IT!)
Guest chapter 8 . 1/9
This is beautiful!
MeepMeep3030 chapter 17 . 11/28/2014
OMFG I HATE GERMANY FOR THIS I WOULD HATE PRUSSIA BUT HES TO AWESOME TO BE HATED I HATE ITALY FOR NOW I LOVE ANERICA AND ENGLAND THOUGH UGHHHH WHY CANT GERMANY UNDERSTAND THAT ENGLAND AINT NOW THURSTY PERVERTED OLD MAN?! GERMANY LOOKS LIKE MUCH MORE OF A THURSTY PERVERTED OLD MAN ENGLAND IS JUST TO DARN ADORABLE ITS SAD TO SEE HIN BEAT UP WHY CANT THEY BELIVE HIM AND AMERICA! GERMANS TAKE THE DARN RUSSIANS TO REAL GERMANY CALM YOUR JEALOSY AND FACE IT THAT ENGLAND IS A NICE GUY HELPING ITALY WHY BELIVE RUSSIA UGHHHH! Thus my rage was subbsided when I find UsUk in this story GREAT STORY I LOVE THISSSSSSSSSSSS 3
bittersweet02 chapter 20 . 10/18/2014
I lobe this story! The reason I'm a huge PruCan shipper is because 1) crack ships are awesome 2) they are both forgotten or ignored 3) you can do basically anything with them because they only interacted once in the show and talked on Prussia's blog about maple syrup and 4) you can imagine the FACE family and The Germanic family fueding
fanfictiondrivethrough chapter 28 . 8/27/2014
Well, looks like it's review time. Just to state a fact, you really did cover a lot of material in this story so this won't be easy for me to do, especially since I haven't read any of your other stories (and, sadly, my other obsessions currently won't allow me to do so).
In order to write Hetalia fanfiction that cuddles up with the original's style in plot, characterisation and writing as close as possible one needs to understand the humoristic ways in which the story was told, yet it should still be charming and be able to give the reader emotion as a whole, as complex as it is. Overall, it can be said that you are capable of this skill in a pleasing way that most of us might have never seen before. Layering porn on top of that without it seaming over-rated and drawn-on can turn out to be a difficulty but not in this case: Congratulations, you managed to write what could be just the perfect Hetalia fanfiction, one that has a sweet twist without beeing too sugar coated, where the most important characters are featured without it looking like a puzzle of one-shots and, of course, the kind of humour Hima-papa thought us that can still make everything seem realistic and gives deep insight into the characters minds.
The writing style in general is exclusive for a fanfiction, especially balanced on the smutty parts. You mastered to understand the idea of discribing what you have seen so that the reader can as well without having to figure much. No important parts have been left out causing the story to flow nice and evenly, without any jumps that force the reader to adjust everything before they can continue. Your grammatical mistakes have probably been mentioned plenty of times before, yet I personally think in the end this is by far not the most important thing in fanfiction. All that concerns me about it is when you have such a gift for using the structure of your sentences to express yourself and just use it to create so. Much. Drama. - It's. Just. Unnecessary. Don't get me wrong, your way of doing it isn't too bad, just make sure not to overdo it so the delicious texture of your writing isn't ruined by any sugary bumps.
Lastly, on characterisation: I never saw someone turning beeing a newby into a strenght like this, everyone is written without any prejudices, so I will conclude you only truly discovered them within the process of creation. That is something I'm quite envious of, to be completely honest.
Here's another thing that I wanted to say for myself: Italy's tragic love for HRE is quite a risky topic for all of us, yet everyone seems to have different feelings for it. This may be the reason why your solution didn't truly seem like the right ones to me, but these are your decisions and judging by the high number of reviews, favourites and follows you made them well.
LifeMeansNothingWithoutMusic chapter 3 . 7/30/2014
It seems like England is falling for Italy because of how he keeps comparing Italy with America. Also because of how much fun he is having with Italy. It's almost like this is going to be an [England x Italy] fan fiction haha. But it's good nonetheless!
MoonStarTwilit chapter 28 . 7/4/2014
Omg I spent 23 hours of my life reading this story. (Gosh, I really need a life) I regret nothing though. Thank you for writing this, because it is the best fanfic I have ever read. I'm not kidding. I feel sorry for my mom. She had to listen to all of the weird noises I made whilst reading this. Thanks again for writing this awesomeness like Prussia.
Guest chapter 28 . 6/20/2014
This was the best written fanfiction of hetalia I have ever read :) you did a PERFECT job!
mintbunny chapter 28 . 5/25/2014
Wow, just wow. Amazing story with an amazing ending.
Jill-O chapter 28 . 5/19/2014
This mutherfucker... This mutherfucker... AASDFGHJKJHGFDSDFGHJ THIS STORY WAS SO BEAUTIFUL OMG! I love, love, loved it!
pepsichick24 chapter 28 . 3/29/2014
The story was so good that I read the first 3.5 chapters when I skipped to chapter 28. The was the best Germany x Italy love scene (if you get what I mean). I didn't have time to read all the chapters too. I think you got Germany and Italy's characters pen-pointed. I'm sure people have already told you this but, there were some crazy grammar and misspelling problems and especially with present and past phrases. Anyway, keep up the GerIta! It's my favorite. lol
MaryJ.Fox chapter 28 . 3/23/2014
Sequal pn this pleassssseee
BeTheHero90-5 chapter 28 . 3/5/2014
I'm a bit embarrassed to say that I started to cry when France talked about Holy Rome and Joan of Arc. But that just means you did a great job on this story!
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