Reviews for Fate's Gamble
FateBurn chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
Good chapter, like always please continue soon cant wait to see how his days in the Clock Tower continue to develope, and its shame to see that it seems like my hopes for a pairing with the Gorgon sisters for Harry in the future, have gone up in flame but oh well its your fic in the end so youll do what you want and think is best for your plot.
Stonewolff chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
You are very good at writing and I definitely like the way you are working with your characters but there is one thing that detracted from the enjoyment. Sometimes you switch between first and third person point of view almost in the span of one or two sentences. I would watch that. Otherwise its great please keep writing.
Acolyte of the Blood Moon chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
Good chapter, but you kept switching between first and third person storytelling/POV. You are now officially one of my favourite writers due to story quality and update speed.
The trolling SnarkLord chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
It's a god development. Especially like combining the appearances after the ritual. Two rather glaring problems, though. First, you shift the POV between 1st and 3rd. It gets confusing. Second, each person gets a paragraph, that is dont gave multiple persons speaking in the same paragraph. Otherwise its harder to follow who says what. That's all I noticed, maybe there's something else. Anyway, I applaud you on the story, the concept is fresh and unused, and has massive potential, not only for this story, but also for many sequels, or even spin-offs thanks to the Kaleidoscope. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Ja Ne
No Fanfic No Life chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
His new appearance is a nice touch combining all five guardians' appearances but gravitating more towards his sisters. There are times in the chapter when the pov would switch between first and third at random times which got a bit distracting. The scene with waver explaining Lorelei to Harry kept on switching gender pronouns even though she's female.
Guest chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
Not bad.., you have a refreshing consept.
Celestrail chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
Get a beta reader or check it yourself more carefully. You keep switching between first person point of view and third person for Harry.
OLDONOM chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
Great Story and thanks for fast updates.
Xanaris chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
You keep switching between third person and first person views. Pick one and stick with it.

Not only that but you also have multiple people speaking in the same paragraph. You need to separate them otherwise it becomes hard to keep track of who's saying what.
Zaralann chapter 4 . 8/16/2013
Nice chapter!
reven228 chapter 3 . 8/15/2013
SWEET! Adding Waver is a great move and having harry learn magic from Zelretch is something that is sure to kick ass down the line. I can't wait to see how the meeting between Harry and Rin will go, keep goin and stay golden
OBSERVER01 chapter 3 . 8/14/2013
very interesting
templememple chapter 3 . 8/14/2013
What the hell is Primate Murder doing in POLL?
Nameless chapter 3 . 8/14/2013
I like this story. Always enjoyed seeing the Nasuverse crossed with HP. Can't wait to see how a Harry raised in the darker and grittier Nasuverse (even his new family shouldnt be able to fully shield him from its influence on him) will do to HPverse.

That said, there's a point to consider. Harry doesn't need to go to Hogwarts. With the Kaleidoscope and Zel's wealth, they could pop over for tomes n tutors galore that would likely give him a better education in HPverse magic than Hogwarts ever could. Consider also that between his training in the Kaleidoscope (as Zel's apptentice) and mundane school (Zel is sending him to local school), Harry attending a boarding school like Hogwarts which teaches only HPverse magic is a waste of his time, something that will disincline him n his family to sending him there.

For story purposes, he should still attend Hogwarts but a good reason should be thought up considering what I pointed out above. And even if he does attend, another thing to consider why he should continue attending after the first time he is in danger there or at best for more than a single year, as unlike canon this Harry has both other options readily available and has many disincentives to attending Hogwarts in the first place.
memesofproduction chapter 3 . 8/14/2013
Nice Chapter! Will Harry be meeting Arcueid anytime soon?
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