I really HATE Ron Weasley. He is a disgrace as a Pureblood, expecting others to do his
work for him.

This was a very interesting story. Cliffhanger can't wait to find out what is next

Hey! Another solo pagan who was so so so happy to see irl rituals in FF work! I loved your depiction of your Samhain ritual and the trouble you went thru to explain it. Pagan inspired ffs are my favourites so thank you for a great read. You're a great author and your effort is appreciateda reading author

AaaaaaMAZING

Dumbledore remains the educated idiot. Quiet Light Lord.

Harry is Grey. Tom is Dark, possibly duplicitous. Neutral?

No one else communicating? Dumbledore would seem to be wanting to put in a couple knuts.

harry being shitloaded rich and heir to 100000 houses is my favorite trope

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Still loving the story.

It always disturbs me when people use “males” and “females” to refer to people. When used as nouns, they typically refer to animals, and the ones who tend to use them to refer to people tend to be misogynists. In this chapter, you used “girls” and “males” which are not equivalent. If there are a mixture of adults and children, “guys” works. “Girls” and “boys” work for children. “Men” and “women” work for adults.

Sorry for the rant… those words have baggage that intruded into your story.

Swift trial, once Sirius finally got it!

Note: Harry would not know to call Sirius Padfoot yet, or if he read it in a journal, would not use it automatically. If you meant that he deliberately used it to build rapport with his godfather, we either need to see where he learned of the name, or need to have a comment at the time of him using the name like: ‘“Hey Padfoot,” Harry said, using the name he read in his mother’s journal, hoping the nickname would help awaken the man from his daze.’

By the way, does shifting grey imply a dappled grey where the various shades of grey are moving like clouds? Or do you just mean a variegated grey?

Thanks for writing.

When you said the Malfoys want to hoist Harry’s birthday party, I had the mental image of everyone in the party hoisted up with pulleys. I think you meant host. The problem with word errors is that the wrong word adds it’s meaning, and that ends up being either distracting or hilarious.

Other than the fairly frequent (and distracting) word choice errors, the story just keeps getting more interesting! Thanks for writing!

This is a fun read.

A few word choice errors in each chapter make me stop and have to figure out what you meant. In recent chapters there were mixups between compliant (obedient) vs. complement (goes with, enhances) vs. compliment (flatter / flattering remark), for example.

Nevertheless, your story is enjoyable.

Enjoying it so far.

Word choice error: impending means about to happen. I think you meant that the bank was imposing, meaning impressive.

i love most parts of this story except Tom's relationship with a 15 year old. I feel like if you wanted to work, you would have to have aged Tom down and even that it would still be creepy because they're 15. idk good writing that just killed it for me

so sad i want the part two

What is the name of the story on that site? is there a link?