|Reviews for Italian mafia|
| Tayuke chapter 1 . 1/18
to fix: go to your profile - publish - doc manager. upload the fixed chapter.
then go to publish - manage stories - this story hyperlink. then click 'content/chapters'
there will be a 'replace/update chapter' button. click that and select the replacement from the doc manager. viola.
this... was rather difficult to read. i think many people would appreciate it if you use you enter key more. grammar is bearable but can be improved, along with your punctuation. but the main problem here is that it's difficult on the eyes.
people talking between quotation marks are it's own paragraph. descriptions should be paragraphed according to relevance, like if you're talking about his personality, that's one paragraph; if you're talking about what other people think of italy, that's another paragraph.
it really is a good idea insofar. i'm looking forward to an update, though please make use of the enter key. no one minds if you overuse it (apart from grammar nazis, but i don't think many of them will read something like this - no offence)
| TheHetaliaObsessionist chapter 1 . 1/9
PLEASE CONTINUE! MAFIA ITALY IS AWSOME!
| Fashionnerd4466 chapter 1 . 12/30/2013
i don't know when i will be able to post the next chapter (or wright it for that mater) but will someone please explain to me how to fix a chapter you already posted. keep i'm mind i'm tech illeritate
| ChildOfHades26 chapter 1 . 12/7/2013
| carliecats chapter 1 . 12/6/2013
OMG this is sooooooooooooooooooo epic I cant wait for the next chapter
| natatron chapter 1 . 11/21/2013
I need to see more of this! I love it!
| cant decide chapter 1 . 10/17/2013
continue or die XD
| The secret trio chapter 1 . 10/5/2013
I love mafia italy (so hot)
| Well chapter 1 . 9/1/2013
It would be a lot better if you had capitalization. Remember to separate the paragraphs. End your sentences with a period. Or get a beta. I urge you to redo this chapter. How ever despite the mistakes I really liked this!