Reviews for General's Little Girl
patrick.dejong94 chapter 2 . 5/13/2015
why'd you stop? this is the best!
devraj.gogoi2 chapter 2 . 7/8/2014
Weell it was great chapter hope we cam get updates.
XXXIchiRukiXXXNatZaXXXKiMaXXX chapter 2 . 6/21/2014
Wow, I actually really enjoy this story so far! You are a very talented writer, And I'm sure if there is a few minor grammatical errors, nobody will care, as long as people can actually decipher and understand what you've written. I like how you've kind of made Natsu scarier than Erza from what I've read, but I'd really enjoy if Natsu got kinda threatened or scared of her at some point (Along with Hana laughing in the background). You know what would be cool to add in? If Erza and Natsu were both missing an eye, they could use their eyes to project a defensive dome around them and use it as a shield (Like how Erza's artificial eye is resistant to eye magic, like the Raiiinshuu have) I am going to follow and favourite this story, as long as you as a writer, as I really enjoy your style of writing!
XXXIchiRukiXXXNatZaXXXKiMaXXX
Guest chapter 1 . 4/22/2014
Loving this fanfic, I'm wanting to be in the U.S. Army myself.
ArtemisUser125 chapter 2 . 11/20/2013
UPDATE!
ArtemisUser125 chapter 1 . 11/10/2013
UPDATE!
Brute357 chapter 2 . 10/24/2013
This is awesome man. hope there is a update soon
Betapup chapter 1 . 9/14/2013
This is a cute story so far very original I hope you continue
Silent Reader 6100 chapter 2 . 8/30/2013
Great chapter. natsu and lucy's meeting was very similar to the manga except they were not mages in this on Can't wait for the next update
DraXXter chapter 2 . 8/30/2013
I find myself very interested in this. I thought that the story itself was and is going along very nicely, the problem with the rushed feeling was smaller but still there. This, however, didn't make it any less enjoyable. Good job so far and hopefully I get to read more.

-DraXXter-
Sigurd Slayer chapter 1 . 8/24/2013
Like it! Update soon!
AshNa 6 chapter 1 . 8/23/2013
kiss kiss kiss kiss kiss...
Loved it by the way...
Z chapter 1 . 8/21/2013
Well, Aside from the different setting, it seems a lot like, and I do mean A LOT like "His little one" – Forgot the Author's name though but It's very similar to this, I don't know if it's an original plot or not. If it is, then okay. If not, then best to credit him.

Anyway, there are a couple of grammatical errors and pacing seems a little too rushed and I guess the child's personality needs working since I was surprised by how quick she responds to things after a traumatic experience.

Good Luck!
DraXXter chapter 1 . 8/20/2013
Interesting take on the story, although I gotta say that this seems a bit rushed. But as an prologue it works fine Going to follow for now, just to see where this is going.
eze5555 chapter 1 . 8/20/2013
kiss kiss , a esperar el sigiente capitulo xP
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