How do you make them the sister of naruto but not a mary sue character? Those things go hand in hand, no?

Oh. I absolutely love this chapter! Kurama's thoughts and feelings were so beautiful to read about and I had chills!

I don't ever want to give birth myself, but I understand how important it is to people. And how devastating it is to a women when they can't conceive. I think you portrayed those emotions wonderfully.

I'm proud of myself not crumble despite my circumstances. I did better, and I did well.

How can you do this to your own character?

I love this book and the message behind it! Thank you for sharing this and writing it! I honestly don't know how to explain my love for this book! I felt like I could go along with Miwako, thank you!

WOW, This was amazing. Thanks for all your hard work!

BTW racecar beds in Naruto? I find that scene really funny and fitting, but the beds probably shouldn't exist... oh well its been years anyway. :)

Oh, this is a sasuke pairing isn't it...

Huh, kinda anticlimactic. But sounds like orochimaru

Huh, so far it's good. I can feel the conflicts! The most important parts of character growth! I'm glad this isn't a high school romance like conflict! I hate that kind of thing.

Zabusa, stable life? This is one of the most confusing choice I've ever seen, Zabusa need money to overthrow Yagura.

I'm lost here, I don't see mizuki scene, so I take it Naruto don't have kage bunshin?

Isn't genjutsu harder than a mere bunshin?

Honestly, I like all the plot points in most of your stories, but the syntax leaves a lot to be desired. It's primarily is the habit of "reviews are love!" at the ends of... every single chapter - sounds fake and demeaning in a sense, like over-exaggerated saccharine behavior. It's not just you, by the way. People who add any sense of innocence or over-spiced faux-sweetness into their stories irk me greatly... and perhaps it's my trust issues, but reading stuff like that just gives a tone of WRONGNESS and it just throws off the entire plot when I scroll down to go to the next chapter and see that.

This chapter was lowkey the same because of the use of "dearly" - the only time it was used TECHNICALLY (still cringed me out because I hate the word, lmao) correctly was the part where Miwako wanted to prove Kurama "dearly" wrong about her being pathetic. The second "dearly" about her being hurt is misused (that's not how you use the word) and "I was so dearly wrong" is also misused. Of course people write in certain ways, but since language is a colloquial method of communication it's best not to misuse phrasing in a way that confuses or throws people off. I am familiar enough with people misusing words that it didn't detract too much from my reading, but a less experienced reader can - and will, in the case of younger folks who don't know how to distinguish - get lost when the phrasing is vague and easily misconstrued.

Anyway, that's my two cents. Your plots are obviously top tier, it's just the syntax/phrasing that skews everything to the left per se. Keep up the good work otherwise.

Cheers,
E

i ugly sobbed. the tears and hiccups just won't stop