|Reviews for The Firebird's Song: Book II of the Firebird Saga|
| Creature chapter 26 . 3/14
The wand that Luna made while in America? It's uncanny resemblance to, ehem, a Fallus? Anyway, I believe that was the foreshadowing you mentioned.
| DialACow chapter 27 . 18h ago
Well, I was expecting something bad to happen but not for Daphne to die. For those who think she was killed too soon, please remember the author is writing about teenagers. There are teenagers who are perfectly capable of patience and scheming, but in this case Daphne was on the verge of getting what she wanted the most and was having it taken away from her in an instant. Perhaps if the characters were older I could see her biding her time but as a 15-16 year old, I am not surprised the author had act so rashly.
| Hobbyfarmer chapter 27 . 18h ago
Brilliant especially the death of Daphne. I do not usually like an evil Daphne but yours is great.
| Rexnos chapter 27 . 23h ago
I don't review every chapter, but I figured I'd chime in once again and restate that I'm very much enjoying your story. It's dark, it's violent, and it's brutal, but I look forward to each week's chapter with anticipation. You've managed to display every possible Harry Potter cliche in the absolute worst possible light. Nevertheless, the world you've created is as fascinating as it is monstrous. Despite how everything seems so wrong, I'm never left to wonder how the world came to this point. There's a terrifying sort of logic behind your world design.
In any case, thank you so much for your tireless work.
| Meneldur chapter 27 . 3/16
Huh. A rather brutal opening to my Purim, but perhaps fitting given the bloody nature of the holiday... A Banishing Curse killed Daphne? Or was it the fall at the bottom? You'd think she'd have survived, given what everybody said about the bodies being strengthened with magic and all... So really, how did a Banishing Curse just do that? Was it just very powerful?
Anyway, one would think that it's good riddance to bad rubbish, but I'm rather sad she was disposed of so easily... she was an interesting character, as a model of the witch Wizarding Society breeds, and her psycho/sociopathy (and possibly both!) made a harsh accusation against it... ah well, I guess we'll just have to view her influence through Astoria and what happens to Harry and his coven now.
| Oilgarchy chapter 27 . 3/15
You're too quick to kill Daphne off. There's little incrementally higher literary value in killing her off versus leaving her shit out of luck, scorned, and left behind. She would have already been the laughingstock of her peers, and she and her mother would have already declared a blood feud against Harry's incipient coven as things stood had she remained alive. It's a shame to waste such an interesting character for no particularly powerful gain.
This gets back to one of my greater concerns and criticisms of the story. You're too quick to rely on shock value, as I've become inured and to it and stopped giving a damn. Your world is no longer even vaguely sympathetic, and Harry's gang is quickly becoming tiring, boring, and a bit disgusting. Your villains aren't even very interesting any more, as they aren't even a tiny little bit sympathetic. I could understand where the witch-hunters were coming from, and I honestly couldn't entirely hate them despite their methods, given what they were up against. Voldemort was even sympathetic for a long time in Part 1 before you outed him as an absolute psychopath. The Sabbat has always been the main antagonist, but before they could at least pretend to be a reasonably sane government. The situation now is insane, and not in a good way. There isn't a single main character left in the entire damn story that I can honestly say that I like. Your antagonists are boring, and are suffering from arc fatigue. The whole Harry-back-in-England-and-Hogwarts arc has been going on for too long, and has added little of value to the story. I'm seriously thinking of removing this story from my favorites list, it's no longer anywhere near as interesting as it was, and your characters all disgust me by this point.
Might I suggest deleting everything after chapter 11 and doing it over from there? Chapter 12 is the keystone chapter after which this story began collapsing, which I noticed another reviewer (Diablo Snowblind, ch. 12 and 13 reviews) rather vehemently pointed out at the time. I've been going over the story's review history, chapter by chapter, and negative reviews are quickly becoming more common ever since that chapter, especially in the responses to chapter 22. Lots of good criticisms propped up after that chapter, and I'm seeing no evidence that you're paying attention to the criticisms in any substantive way.
| PSay chapter 27 . 3/15
Your right. This is a brutal chapter. We knew that the "Black" side (pun intended) was up to no good. That was proved by the presentation of the Greengrass sisters. What a blatant way to prove their intentions. I'm glad Dame Branwenna dealt with Daphne's mother the way she did. There wasn't a good solution but this way Daphne won't be there to try to interfere anymore. I feel sorry for Astoria. I hope she comes to appreciate the people she is now joined with. I'm glad they will have time to heal Astoria before the final bonding with Harry. Thanks for writing. I look forward to more of this story. pms
| Bobboky chapter 27 . 3/15
Very good work
| RonRR chapter 27 . 3/15
I am actually surprised Astoria even made it to the choosing. Part way through when it became apparent that Luna would choose from amongst the Greengrass daughters, I expected Astoria to be dead before then. Did the contract specify that both must be present or was that an oversight of the Greengrasses not to kill Astoria first?
Thanks for writing,
| kffs chapter 27 . 3/15
Intense - didn't expect Daphne to just die like that. Overall, very emotion-packed scene
| AnAncientBard chapter 27 . 3/15
At it all turned out for the best! Well, mostly for the best.
Keep 'em coming!
| fofofofo chapter 27 . 3/15
What chapter is it that Daphne tries to cheat Harry on the train? Is it in this book or Firebird's Son?
Anyways, great chapter. Really look forward to noon on Saturday's strictly for your updates.
| adrian11 chapter 27 . 3/15
| WhiteElfElder chapter 27 . 3/15
There is going to be complete hell to pay for what happened to Daphne; I doubt it will end with Wergild. From what the one dame said, it looks like the Sabbat is searching for anything they can to pull Harry before them.
| amberpup chapter 27 . 3/15
Another good chapter, didn't see Daphne's possible death coming but not surprised since she wasn't the type to let bygones be bygones after the hustle. But it also proves Harry's visions aren't 100% etched in stone, since Hermione wasn't there to be killed as well. Likely she (Hermione) would had been sold to the goblins with Astoria after some abuse. I doubt Daphne would have wasted a chance to make some coins, even after her victory. Be interesting to see what happens next, since the Dark Covens won't take this lying down, but then it may cause Voldemort to re-open communicate with Harry after pulling such a fast one on the Sabbat. That is, if Harry gets the credit which is very questionable with First Wife Luna and Dame Branwenna there to take the blame. But lets hope, because if Voldemort brings his hounds to heel then things will be alot easier for Harry3 for a bit.