|Reviews for Cinders|
| Avide reader chapter 1 . 8/16/2016
Hi. I know uts weird that im just reading this story in 2016 but i had to love it. I normally dont leave msgs or reviews but in this case i had to. You've somehow managed to describe vegeta in the way i've always seen him and to read you is just absolutely wonderful. I will definitely check out all your other stories as soon as im done with this one. You have a talent for writing and the emotions are so struly felt its incredible. I hope you're still writing in 2016.
| TheWonderfulShoe chapter 32 . 8/11/2016
I can't seem to find the words...so let me just say...thank you. You are great. You are just so great...! And, less urgently (but still important to say)...congratulations! It's clear that this story came a long way, and that you have, as well, while and through writing it. Thank you for sharing it with us, and doubly thank you for the bravery and trust in sharing your story with us. ...gosh, you're great!
| TheWonderfulShoe chapter 31 . 8/11/2016
...well, that's just terrifying. Good thing they moved early! Wow. And good that they are keeping moving forward!
| TheWonderfulShoe chapter 30 . 8/11/2016
;-; Bardock... *sob*
On the other hand...FRIEZA D Can't help but be glad he's dead. D
| sky d chapter 32 . 8/4/2016
| LVR4Trunks-n-Vegeta chapter 32 . 8/3/2016
This is one of the best stories that I've read. I'm glad that they all got their happy ending besides Bardock. Too bad there wasn't someone else for him.
| BlueScarlet465 chapter 32 . 8/3/2016
Wow, I'm going to do something that I haven't done in quite a while...which is to do a final comment on a finished story, yeah
First Off: Concept. I have to say the concept for this story is pretty original considering that I never came across a story with the characters being firefighters before. And to be honest (like I said in my very first comment) I thought this was going to be flop considering that I couldn't imagine DBZ's best villain being a firefighter. I'm very glad I was wrong because this turned out to be one of my favorite stories in the DBZ section here
Second Off: Characters. Even though the main characters were cast as firefighters (most of them originally being villains), you didn't fail to keep their personalities the same; even Chi Chi retained some of her annoying traits (at least at a tolerable level). I can't say the same for Nappa's original personality though, which I'm glad about. After having his parents die, the last thing Vegeta needed was a guy with brawn for brains, feeding him destructive advice, so good call on making him the voice of reason
Third: Realism. I like how you put some of your life experiences in this story. Even though it wasn't verbatim, it put a level of realism when it came to the characters experiencing grief and loss. Plus, the fact that you chose to share your experiences through stories with us is very cool of you; especially since there was good advice behind it
Fourth: Bardock killed Frieza? When? How? I thought Vegeta supposedly did that in the burning building
Final: Over all, I'm glad I came across this story and even though I'm sad to see it end, at least it ended with a happy ending that wasn't too sappy. I wish I could have seen Vegeta on that plane ride to the Bahamas though. I bet that was hilarious XD
| BlueScarlet465 chapter 31 . 8/3/2016
This chapter almost felt like the epilogue until it mentioned Bulma being pregnant and them surprising everyone with the news at a housewarming party
Hm, so this was how you were going to end it. Ok, I could settle with this ending despite how unsettling Kuriza was. As quickly as he came into the story, he just left. Oh well
| SereStarOfGaea chapter 32 . 8/3/2016
Congratulations on finishing this story! Bardock killing Frieza was a great surprise and it was really unexpected. I wished you would have elaborated a little with the wedding but it's ok I loved the finale and how you were able to do a full circle on the story and the relationship between Bulma and vegeta. I never saw frieza's soon coming but I was happy to see that we started everything with a fire and we are finishing it with a fire.. Resurrecting like the Fenix! Hearing bulla and trunks calling Nappa grandfather was so cute. Vegeta's monolog at the end was a good way to end everything. Thank you for sharing your own grief and how you are working with it. Seeing someone who is so openly sharing these stuff helps those of us that are not as good in talking about our issues. Take it easy to day and keep on doing what you love, you are lucky to know what you want and were you want to go
| elianni chapter 32 . 8/3/2016
All these years i've been reading ur stories i've learned to know u u been through a lot but ur strong never forget that i was with u all the way now that this story is over i would like to tell that i loved it and i am reading the others so far so good like i said before i some time don't review but does not mean i'm not reading so lets get this started with great love for all u have done to make me want to read more and i thank u from the bottem if my heart keep up the great writing with love and respect
| nancy103 chapter 32 . 8/3/2016
Congrats on finishing a really good story and congrats on surviving the last three years of life! My mother had a saying for me when things were really rough..."this too shall pass". Hoping for a smoother future and more stories!
| wistfulmuse chapter 31 . 8/3/2016
Awwwwww, this is so sweet, and I am ecstatic! Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
*side note: even from the grave, Frieza is still a total shit.
| nancy103 chapter 30 . 8/3/2016
Bardock cn be such an angsty type of character. At least he had his revenge. It was fitting that he got it and not technically Vegeta.
| BlueScarlet465 chapter 29 . 7/28/2016
"The worst is finally over"?
I would say not. Until that bastard is dead, I wouldn't give your hopes up. There are people that could survive being shot and since Vegeta shot him in the chest and not in the head (which would have been a more lethal kill). I think that Frieza has one more trick up his sleeve
I think that he is going to target either the ambulance that Vegeta is riding on and blow it up, or the car that Bulma is riding in. Or better yet, when everyone leaves the hospital room where Vegeta is staying in, he'll blow up the room when no one suspects, while they have a false sense of security that Frieza is gone
Plus, I bet that Frieza has more than one henchmen to help carry out his plans, even after his death (after all, they made sure to evaluate all of Frieza's employees before blowing up the place). Like Dodoria, for instance. We haven't seen him yet. Can you imagine Dodoria receiving his last orders from Frieza being, that, in case Frieza's plan backfire, Dodoria was to exact his revenge on Vegeta by choking the life out of Vegeta in his hospital room before blowing it up?
Not to be a downer or anything, but these are my thought until I see Frieza's dead body presented to me and all of his employees arrested for questioning
| TheWonderfulShoe chapter 29 . 7/27/2016
I almost had a heart attack in the middle, there! ;; Goodness! But now I'm really excited. I would probably call that things winding to a head! Now Inwant to see where the pieces fall. :D Thanks for sharing- always a treat to read your updates! _