|Reviews for When Ends Meet|
| T. Alana M chapter 1 . 1/24
I loved it. It was all very realistic, and this could have happened in canon if Akira had decided to add more romantic drama. It was completely in character for Videl to dislike a future suitor (although she probably would have punched him first.. or will be punching him sometime in the near future). And it was a great way to get Videl/Gohan together. Please update soon! I'd like to know how the rest goes!
| IxiaLiliana chapter 1 . 12/4/2013
Would love to see more soon!
| UltimateGohan42 chapter 1 . 9/17/2013
I don't know what the other people that commented are talking about...I don't think this was rushed in the slightest. The detail was spot on and of course they've known each other. Unless its been said that the story is an AU then the author shouldn't need to state anything. I would love for this to be continued tho
| Son Goshen chapter 1 . 9/5/2013
... I just like pointing out to Videl that money is only overrated when you have so much... when you don't... it's heavily underrated... and I'm blanching at the use of lipstick... it's horrible, disgusting gooey sticky layer of stuff on your lips that you really want to rub off... Random comments aside, I'm... very... uh... well I feel like things progressed a little tooo fast, at least the romantic aspect. Videl shows up all pretty and then she and Gohan kiss. Gohan is pretty damn confident about kissing a girl, unless here he's more of a player than a shy blushing guy? ... Or maybe I'm just missing something because I have qualms about kissing a person even if I'm crushing on them and have gone through a lot of shit together. They're just.. awfully bold. xD
You know what, I don't know what I'm saying. Too much maths. Write more!
| DarkVoid116 chapter 1 . 9/3/2013
In my opinion that was almost *too* much build up for one chapter. You seemed to drag out the drum roll moment for Gohan and Videl's kiss and now I'm left feeling somewhat disappointed in the actual kiss and not sure why. Sure, I already don't like this Azel character and the description of Gohan and Videl's kiss was hot and steamy, but something was just missing with their kiss and I can't pinpoint it.
I can't tell if this story exists in a canon universe or not because of the existence of Azel's company.
Erasa seemed quite in character which I give you props for- you seem to always write an excellent Erasa...
Have Gohan and Videl met before? How long has Saiyaman been a helper? I assume Mr. Satan beat Cell but did Buu happen? Hell, how old are Gohan, Videl, Erasa and Azel?
Good introductory chapter Kaka in that it intrigued me, but I'm left feeling a little empty and expecting I guess less description in subsequent chapters... I just feel that warehouse scene dragged boringly at points...
| NiceNipps chapter 1 . 9/2/2013
Oh you can not stop there; it was getting soooooooo good ;)
| Just a fan chapter 1 . 9/2/2013
Please, continue writting this. At first the plot didn't seem like much but I gotta say you write incredibly and all of the sudden things turned interesting and kind of funny, he he.
I would enjoy reading more of this very much...thanks for your work so far
| dcp1992 chapter 1 . 9/2/2013
Interesting story. I really like it and cannot wait to see what it turns out like. Update soon!
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/2/2013
Can you make the next chapter be the same events but from Gohan's pov? Like maybe he's distraught thinking that videl is actually taken and rushes to rescue her but then obviously reacts otherwise.
| Vic The Super Saiyan chapter 1 . 9/2/2013
Cool stuff so far. It's an alternate way of Videl getting together with Gohan.
| boboleta chapter 1 . 9/2/2013
Amazing start to another promising story, Mr. Son. Congrats!
At first, I did think that that kiss came really easily, like why didn't he ask her why she was there alone, why there was a police call, etc. But then I readjusted the time placement of the story I'm my head. They already know each other for a while, so those sparks and that electricity are obviously already there and those deep feelings too. At the sight of a videl all dressed up and beautiful, he just simply forgot how or why he went there! XD that's how I see it and I think it fits perfectly. Good job!
I can't wait to see what happens next! I assume that neither Hercule nor the Castrols will be to happy about it. Will they be causing trouble? And I can't wait to see what kind of relationship you're going to come up with for videl and gohan. Meaning that, since she's supposed to be dating the saiyaman, how long until either of them wants to remove the helmet and show the person behind it. And of course... What will happen when gohan finds out why she wanted him for a boyfriend... :/
Oh, my I'm jumping ahead of myself. Maybe he doesn't want to be her boyfriend, just like that... Maybe he won't go for it right from the get go... Hmm... Not sure how he'd resist her, though. XD
Can't wait! Can't wait! xD