Reviews for To Your Mark
GnCdwll chapter 2 . 12/10/2020
The story is just a copy of the movie line by line, and is probably the reason why the fic is so looong. It made the story really boring to read, I just had to skim and scan a lot of times. Also, your OCs are downright Mary Sues, anyone could tell just from the first chapters. This is really sad since the summary was pretty amazing and definitely a good hook :( Don't get me wrong, I very much love long fics because I believe they give the story, context and characters much thought to reach hundred thousands of words.. but after reading the first 2 chapters, my guess is the whole 554k words are just gonna be a line by line script from the movie/book with the Mary Sue OCs wedged in every now and then. So disappointing..
Eliaer chapter 57 . 7/13/2020
Blue! Where have you gone?!

I love your story so much and have just re-read it for the millionth time! Please come back and finish the story! 3
skipandshout chapter 57 . 4/2/2020
I'll be quite honest with you, I don't typically review stories, but it seems I've made an exception for this one. I realize it's been a while since you've last updated for this story, so I can only hope that you're still around here somewhere, even if you aren't writing. All I can say is that I've cried and laughed while reading this, which to me signifies when I've found an exceptional story. I'm going to try and keep this short, but if you're still out there, I want you to know that despite what people say, writing isn't meant to be perfect; the faults are what help it to come alive. That said, I truly believe your work is amazing, it's just a shame that not everyone is able to see that.
Ydream08 chapter 1 . 3/27/2020
I applaud you for the sheer patience to get this chapter written down! It must have been frustrating to get it done with how similar it is to the original beginning. The summary is certainly a hook, so I'll be reading on to see what you've got! Thank you for sharing this :D
TRASHKIING chapter 4 . 2/7/2020
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DawnScarlet19610 chapter 6 . 1/2/2020
I feel like you're so focused on Ren that the story is basically just a background noise. I deeply dislike this new girl you introduced. Ren and her love story with Thorin is more than enough, now there's this whole Fili thing. And Kili and Fili were flirting with Ren, and now have moved onto the new girl. New competition, and of course this random girl they come across is also a gorgeous blonde girl on her own being all badass in the wild. Pretty lame. As well just happening to be the daughter of people she once knew. There's just so much drama after drama after drama and Ren is at the center of it all. She's not professional, her personality isn't steady and jumps back and forth between extremes without consistency. She's not attractive in personality in fact. Even at Bag End, she was all false bravado and arrogance, which hasn't changed. Bringing up personal family matters in a room full of strangers... What was that even about? Nbody will miss me, my family hates me... Cry me a river, the amount of bitterness in that alone. I also dislike her name. It's too short and blunt, and not Middle Earth sounding at all. You also jump POVs like crazy without warning or sense. You even gave a brief POV of the horse. What the hell was the point of that? You spend too often from Bilbo's POV, and he's not even the focus of your story. This needs a lot of work. And seriously, get rid of the other girl. Focus on one thing and stick to it instead of coming across as trying way too hard.
Guest chapter 2 . 11/18/2019
Again, more script plagiarism with your OC awkwardly wedged into the scenes here and there. Bravo.
Guest chapter 1 . 11/18/2019
This entire chapter was a waste of time for anyone who has read the book or watched the movie (likely 99.9% of anyone clicking on this). So, why not go ahead and call it what it is?

Regurgitating entire scenes word for word, line by line is plagiarism, plain and simple. Are you typing while reading from a copy of the script? It certainly seems like it.

And then you ask for reviews at the end of the page, as if you've accomplished something?

I hope you managed to get something original down in the next chapter.
treesliketorches chapter 1 . 4/19/2019
You. You are. Gah. I can't even formulate into words how much I absolutely adore you, even without meeting you. Time and time again I come back to this ficit's beautifully written, and has made me both laugh aloud and cry. It is a work of genius. There is no better spin even out on The HobbitI daresay this is better than Tolkien's work. There's a depth of romance and humanity to it, which'll explain why this is my 4/5th re-through.

This is such, ignoring the cliché, an epic read. You are fantastic.

Here's to finally (almost) reaching the end. It will be worth the waitSending hugs and comfort
Shetan20 chapter 1 . 2/6/2019
Thank you for a very enjoyable chapter.
A5mia chapter 57 . 1/11/2019
I really enjoyed your story. I hope you'll find the time to finish it eventually.
A5mia chapter 29 . 1/10/2019
I'm enjoying this story very much. However, I'm affraid your writing style and vocabulary aren't very good. For example, you use the word "slightly" way too often. It's slightly annoying.
Banana Flavored Eskimo chapter 57 . 1/8/2018
oh please update this. I know it's been awhile, but I am hoping that you will come back to this story and finish it up. I love rereading it every now and then because it's so well written and everything I LOVE in a fan fiction!
Guest chapter 57 . 11/10/2017
Grr. I love this so much, it’s like I always read through some long ones then don’t can’t find anymore for a while and just read unsatisfying one-shots, then find an amazing one like this and binge read it in a few hours before discovering its unfinished and I will be like - noooo! I need to finish it! Which is exactly what happened when I discovered this one, I am in love with thorin/oc and I think that you have definitely done the pairing justice.
JelloJedi chapter 1 . 10/12/2017
This is so good, I kept reading all night and I can't wait to see what happens next.
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