|Reviews for Lyrium Dreams|
| Dani chapter 4 . 8/7/2014
This was beautiful :)
| leaky.oven chapter 4 . 1/15/2014
AGH, ME HEART.
That was a good, unexpected tragedy there with the lyrium explanation. And then I'm hit double with the reminder that Anders is a Warden. JUST... UGH. Masterful. ;_;
I suppose the romance seemed a bit rushed and 'just because', but I suppose that's more the summary-nature of the narration.
| JaneBeyre chapter 1 . 9/29/2013
I think you have an excellent 'voice' for Fenris, practical and gloomy. Lovely writing.
| Magister of Asariel chapter 3 . 9/23/2013
I thought the first chapter of this was pretty good, but in the second chapter I had a hard time following what was going on and who was who. You use a lot of repetitive pronouns, he, she, him, her. Sometimes there's two hims and two hers in a single paragraph. I especially have trouble telling which woman you're referring to at any given time. This could be easily avoided if you used names more often, or at least races. Since there is a female human and female elf, and a male human and male elf, using races in addition to names once in a while would work real well.
Also, I had trouble following the events in the second and third chapters, they skipped around so much, and several of the scenes weren't made clear enough to tell for sure what was going on. I don't know if that was intentional or not, but it left me scratching my head a few times, and even going back to see if I had just missed something.
Still though, it's an intriguing idea and way to tell a story, and it's interesting enough to make me want to read the whole thing. You're writing is good and your descriptions are vivid but not too wordy.
| DanieRF chapter 4 . 9/22/2013
Ah so this one is complete. I didn't mind the romance as much as I thought. It was a sweet, if short, fic.
| DanieRF chapter 3 . 9/22/2013
Oh my. Quite romantic from Fenris. I had been wondering what language Tevinter was.
| DanieRF chapter 2 . 9/22/2013
Hmm. Honestly I have never read an Anders X Fenris fic. I hope I am going to like it. Your writing is still excellent.
| DanieRF chapter 1 . 9/22/2013
Excellent beginning. Quite a teaser. It's kinda hard to tell if it is Anders who is really sick or Fenris when you get to the end.
| profoundlyfadedprincess chapter 2 . 9/20/2013
There is a great element of detachment in the this chapter and if I'm honest, for my tastes, it feels a little over detached. Also, the constant use of 'he' 'him' gets a little repetive and difficult to read after a while. Personally, I'd have liked to have seen some storyline here as well, I don't think I could really feel a plot or a direction over the course of the first two chapters.
However, that said, you have some lovely descriptions and a lot of it does feel like I'm stuck in some sort of werid dream, which if that was the intention then well done, you do it well.
| XxReiGxX chapter 4 . 9/19/2013
Aghh...My feels. Are dead. ;n;
Wonderful story. Wonderful. Great work! :')
Now. Please excuse me while I go huddle in a corner and cry some more...
| Magister of Asariel chapter 1 . 9/18/2013
I thought this was really good. Simple in the telling, yet powerful enough to be gripping. You paint a good picture that I can imagine easily in my head. I really can't think of anything critical to say about it! :-)
| The Scribbly Knave chapter 4 . 9/18/2013
Oh gods the angst! I nearly cried damn you! xxx
| SnowHelm chapter 4 . 9/18/2013
This was so sad, but beautifully written. I was close to tears at the end.
| The Scribbly Knave chapter 3 . 9/9/2013
The latin was quite good actually, and I ached from the fluffy angst of it all. Gods I love Fenders.
| Angelic-Demon96 chapter 2 . 9/7/2013
I love it I love it I love it I love it I love it! I like the mystery feel to it. Please don't change that