|Reviews for Revolution In The Ranks|
| daisycb chapter 21 . 2/2
Excellent story, nice character interactions. Will watch for updates.
| nintschibintschi chapter 14 . 1/13
i just love your goblins
thanks a lot
| nintschibintschi chapter 12 . 1/13
thank you for the chapter
the plot is getting better and better on which side is mooney :)
| nintschibintschi chapter 11 . 1/13
amazing story I am so happy that i found this little gem thank for updating and sharing it nintschi
| Alie-yaoi chapter 21 . 1/6
I like your story good luck for the next chapter
| ginixxx chapter 12 . 1/2
| Zyenna chapter 21 . 12/18/2015
This is very good. A bit slow going sometimes but good. I can't wait to see what happens next! When will Dumbledore get clued in that everything has gone down the rabbit hole? Please update soon!
| tag.0 chapter 16 . 12/10/2015
I definitely have to agree with a few of the other reviewers, who pointed out that Sirius's testimony during the trial here under Veritaserum is different from the answers he gave in Gringotts, also under the Veritaserum. This is a *serious* continuity error within the story, and really needs to be fixed. I was reading this bit of the trial, and going, "Hey, wait a minute, that's *not* what Sirius said happened before!" Unfortunately, unless it is fixed, you're likely to lose a number of readers once they get to this chapter. It's one thing to have a couple of minor plotholes, but this is a very major plot screw-up, especially given the fact that Sirius's trial is important to the plot. It really needs to be fixed.
Edit: Okay, I see on Chp. 18 that you plan to fix it. That's good. Though, I would suggest regular re-reads of the story before posting chapters to prevent that sort of inconsistency from happening - at least, that's what I do. *shrugs*
Other than that... the story's looking reasonably good so far.
| tag.0 chapter 9 . 12/10/2015
Um... For the most part I like this story, but this chapter presents some real difficulties with believability. Not really with Draco, although if that's what he was doing, he went rather overboard, but with the "revision" bit.
I'm sorry, but revising *three years* worth of essays and classes in the hours between breakfast and lunch? NOT going to happen. It is physically impossible, even with magic as per canon. I could see them revising one or two essays, maybe, but sure as hell not all of them. Consider how long it takes to look up information for an essay, and then do the actual writing thereof. Writing a good essay - one that's legible and easily understandable - can take a few hours in and of itself, and that doesn't count the time it takes to do the research. Something like what you have them doing here would likely take at least a few months during the school year. I could see Harry doing something like that over the course of a summer, as long as it was one where the Dursleys were ignoring him (or he was no longer with the Dursleys) - but it would take the *whole* summer. And during the school year, they also have current assignments to deal with, so it would take even longer.
Not to mention that I seriously suspect it would take George a great deal longer to read and understand that book on genetics than just a few hours! Any book on the study of genetics for students would likely take several hours to read through, and longer to understand and absorb the details. Especially as George has no scientific understanding whatsoever, and so would have to start by learning the terms used, before he could even begin to understand the actual information.
| azulkan2 chapter 21 . 11/25/2015
Great story. Looking forward to more.
| DracoAngelOfLight chapter 21 . 11/1/2015
i lvoe this story i hope you update it soon... love the friendship between the three older ones ... and glad you don't have him forgiving RON
| Grey chapter 6 . 10/29/2015
I tried but I can't continue. I hate how OOC everyone is
| Kazbaby chapter 21 . 10/18/2015
I'm loving the hell out of this story. I pretty much mainlined it after discovering it last night, and I can't wait for more.
| Eremija chapter 21 . 10/18/2015
Ahhh, so glad I stumbled upon this! Really like how you are doing the friendships, not only for Harry, but for Snape as well. I hope people find out all about Dumbles soon. Can't wait to see what you have planned next :D! Also, I know it may not happen..but...*crosses fingers for future Neville/Harry*
| Martionmanswife chapter 21 . 10/14/2015
I am really interested to see where you go with the rest of this. The story is great.