Reviews for Naruto the Vampire Jinchuriki
matthewdeal25 chapter 14 . 6/30
please update this story
Guest chapter 14 . 6/25
I vote on using zetsu (white and black form as separate brothers maybe) powers like hashirama and high A class species maybe
Species name- cannaballistic plant men
Individual name \names -zetsu b and nice zetsu
reptoholic chapter 8 . 5/23
... WHO is taking her rosarie off? I thought it was to represent a close connection..
reptoholic chapter 7 . 5/23
little Yukari doesn't seem so innocent...lol.. great job so far. hope to see some development between the different characters soon.
reptoholic chapter 6 . 5/23
Like it, but you gave some mixed signals, it seems very sensual which is good yet your previous statement makes him seem like he is going to be monk. Great job looking forward to the next chapter and hope to see him have a bit more of a possessive personality
reptoholic chapter 5 . 5/23
... If you are going to wait untill he is in his 20's to have sex, than you will have to slow down the interactions between characters to suit it. Ninja die young and monsters mentally progress at a faster rate so there will have to be a reason if you are going to wait such a long period.
reptoholic chapter 4 . 5/23
I hope he gains more traits from his innner. It seems like a better personality than outer.
reptoholic chapter 3 . 5/23
I hope it is not going to be a love triangle between him and the human... that would be bad. may be she can find someone else to drink from?
Guest chapter 1 . 5/9
Um fan fiction is cutting off your words blood -bloodlust and distorting the chapter one min the fox hates him the next he is thankful i just don't know how that transitioned that's like saying one apone a time,the end dont get it sorry I just think you have a potentially great story and it get screwed up because the site decides that they cant cheek to fanfiction is checked to checked to prevent anomalies in your story
christopherjordan.castillozamora chapter 3 . 4/25
continua esta historia?
myulander chapter 1 . 4/16
cool job
jwaters822 chapter 14 . 4/1
Pretty cool story dude keep. It up
Master118 chapter 14 . 3/23
Nice
Element-OverLord chapter 14 . 3/10
OK, For OC I Suggest:
Name: Ranmakyu Konton (Prefers to be called Ranma. Also nod to Ranma 1/2)
Sex: Male (Can shape-shift into female through transformation for pranking. Nod to Naruto himself)
Age: 12-13
Height: 5'0
Weight: 65
Hair: White, with black streaks
Skin: Regular, with some tan
Eyes: Yellow, with red pupils
Clothes: He wears a white long-sleeved shirt with a black vest on top, brown pants with a red belt, and gray boots.
Likes: Chaos, Bizarre things, Video games, Pranks, Pizza
Dislikes: Annoying things, Party whoopers, Arrogant people, Hypocrites
Hobbies: Pranking, Reading books, Eating pizza, Playing video games
Expy: From Discord Of My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic.
Personality: Prankster at heart, loves to cause pranks and chaos whenever he can, mostly to avoid monotoness. Cares for those whom he considers friends...even if he doesn't show it and/or pranks them. Respects/admires people like Naruto.
Dreams: Becoming a full powered S-Rank monster, Travel around the world, Publish a book about pranking.
Monster: Chimera (Draconequus Variation, nod to MLP Discord)
-Story: The Chimera (/kɨˈmɪərə/ or /kaɪˈmɪərə/, also Chimaera, Chimæra; Greek: Χίμαιρα, Chímaira) was, according to Greek mythology, a monstrous fire-breathing hybrid creature of Lycia in Asia Minor, composed of the parts of more than one animal. Usually depicted as a lion, with the head of a goat arising from its back, and a tail that might end with a snake's head,[1] the Chimera was one of the offspring of Typhon and Echidna and a sibling of such monsters as Cerberus and the Lernaean Hydra.

The term chimera has come to describe any mythical or fictional animal with parts taken from various animals, or to describe anything composed of very disparate parts, or perceived as wildly imaginative, implausible, or dazzling.

The word "draconequus" is composed of the Latin "draco" or Greek "drakon", meaning "dragon", and the Latin "equus", meaning "horse".
-Form Appearance: On this form, Ranma looks like a brown chinese dragon with head is horse-like, much different from other horses' head styles. He has a deer antler on the right, a blue goat horn on the left, one long fang, different-sized pupils, a snake tongue, a goat beard, and white bushy eyebrows. He has the right arm of a lion, the left claw of an eagle, the right leg of a lizard, and the left leg of a goat. In addition, he has a bat's right wing, a Pegasus' left wing, a horse's mane, and a dragon-like snake's tail with a white tail tuft. The shape of his body resembles that of a snake.
Powers:
-Superhuman Strength: C Rank
-Superhuman Speed: B Rank
-Superhuman Agility: A Rank
-Superhuman Reflexes: B Rank
-Superhuman Resistance: D Rank
-Magic: A Rank
-Ranma can warp reality to a seemingly indeterminable degree, such as changing the physical properties of the world around him and bending the laws of nature and physics, or at least a few miles around him. He is skilled at performing magic and manipulating the minds of other creatures with the exception of those stronger than him. He can also change his physical appearance and size with relative ease.
-Fire Breath: B Rank.

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otsoawulf chapter 14 . 2/26
i love reading about half your stories and the others i just havent rwad yet or dont interest me as much. you are easily top 3 favoite authors along with VFSNAKE and Delfim the Black kitsune. would love to see several stories updated but life is full of problems and you have to write about whatever inspires you. i look forward to readin any story that you update. i check daily to read hours after you update. may your muse keep inspiring you and you keep your hilarious writing style.
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