Reviews for And In The Darkness Bind Them
seldombites chapter 10 . 2/19/2020
This story appears to have been abandoned, but I love what has been written so I'm adding it to my faves anyway. Depression is an awful thing to suffer from, but you look after yourself and keep on fighting.
Simianpower chapter 1 . 2/9/2020
"Honestly, couldn't he get a day of rest?"

Seriously? He's just spent paragraphs bitching about how long and boring his life is, and then spews out this?

Strider is WILDLY out of character here, huffing and sneering and crying out and glaring and sniffing in peoples' general direction like some soap opera diva. What the hell is this?

Also, work on your verb tenses. Switching back and forth at random from past tense to present tense is just bad. Especially in the SAME SENTENCE, as in: "The rest of the sleeping hobbits, awakened by the Riders' cries—which still echoes through the night..." Pick one and stick with it. That's just basic grammar. Same with run-on sentences like this: "They traveled for a ways, one day passed, then another, Sam tended to the pony carrying their belongings—when Viper had shook his head and told them he carried nothing but the clothes on his back, even Strider looked wide-eyes—and Pippin and Merry kept their spirits high." That's at least five sentences glommed into one with bad punctuation and incorrect word usage ("had shook" isn't correct, nor is "looked wide-eyes"). If you can't handle basic grammar, use an automated checker, because this reads like it was written by a child.

Worse yet, this has NOTHING to do with Harry Potter. It's not even a Harry-in-name-only since he doesn't even use the name. It's just some random immortal OC with lots of power. You can say it's a Potterverse crossover, but a Harry who's thousands of years old and doesn't even use that name bears so little resemblance to Harry Potter that it makes no difference if you call him Harry Dresden, Merlin, or Wonder Woman.

And finally, your OC doesn't actually DO anything! This is just canon movieverse LotR with "Viper" taking some of Strider's lines. He doesn't materially change a single thing. So what's the point?

In a nutshell, this chapter is badly written, deceptively advertised as an HP cross, and essentially just an OC video-camera showing canon plot without any changes. It's a pointless waste of time and I won't be continuing further. It's possible it gets better in future chapters, but if that's the case you might want to consider rewriting this chapter. With a first chapter this bad, I see no reason to continue spending time on this story.
StephiexAnn chapter 10 . 2/5/2020
That's a really good story, I want to see Viper's adventures in the future, no matter when. But first take care of yourself
Guest chapter 10 . 1/8/2020
I love your story! It’s really well written and totally sucked me in! I hope you will continue.
DrEastwood chapter 1 . 10/21/2019
This is so bad. Harry isn’t actually Harry Potter. You just used the name to get readers and made a useless an bipolar main character that has no effect on the story. He does literally nothing to change anything and goes from being smart to an angsty teen out of nowhere.
Jestersky98 chapter 1 . 10/12/2019
I wished there was a story like this where the mc isn’t a a few trillion year old emo
If you ever decide to rewrite into an actual decent story gimmie a heads up and I’ll read but this was simply bad
Dingirverse chapter 10 . 10/11/2019
Looking forward to the next chapter, but take your own pace. Oddly I find writing a tool against depression.
mayawene chapter 10 . 9/24/2019
Thank you for this story ! ! !
I can't wait the next chapter !
Lady Logos chapter 10 . 8/23/2019
This is an amazing story. I'm going to wonder how the others will race to Vipers injuries and if Boromir will talk to Gandalfif the secret will be let out. Also if the others will ask about the stone and of course of the Valar could do Something for Viper or did. he seems more content in this chapter. I mean sure while they can't take the gifts away could they maybe alter him? You mentioned before that he could even become a werewolf.. So why not a vampire or some other ancient creature capable of lasting with the immortality? anyways, amazing so farmust've been my 10th time easily reading this through
Guest chapter 3 . 8/22/2019
Yes, yes, a fucking immortal 6 trillion year old being acting like a fucking emo 17 year old. Smart.
Jordan2356 chapter 1 . 8/4/2019
you say that viper has already been stabed with one of the nazgouhl blades but when frodo is stabed he wonders what would happen if he was stabbed implying that he hasn't been before you might want to fix that
Schnitter chapter 10 . 7/24/2019
I found your story really good and I hope so much that you will finish it.
What I really like about it is, that even though your main character is a little bit to powerful, you gave him some limitations and kept him level headed.
What I didn't liked was that everyone liked him. Come on ther is just nobody that every single person likes. That's somewhat unfair. But it's your story and your choice.
So I want to say thank you for writing such a great story. I really hope that you are doing better and that maybe your muse will come back.
[i hope you get what i mean, because english is not my mother tongue and I am still learning.]
Gregorvich chapter 1 . 7/16/2019
so, did harry just watch the nazguls attack the hobbits without doing anything? cause it seems like he just called them idiots, and then abandoned them until the fight was over.
Moleluv chapter 4 . 6/23/2019
Canonically, Faramir marries Eowyn, not Boromir. She is Eomer's sister and Theoden King's niece.
writegood chapter 3 . 5/30/2019
Oh, so Harry's on his period-happens to any immortal every thousand years. Plus, it's affecting the hormones of every human, dwarf, elf, and horse around him. lol

Interesting story. The drama tag is really showing in this chapter, though, I'm looking forward to when the adventure comes in.
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