|Reviews for A Family Affair|
| chinadoll381282001 chapter 6 . 6/21
I hope you plan on updating this story... I want to find out what Dom does when he finds out that she's alive. Does he plan to fight for her or stay with the other woman?
| MsShashaD chapter 6 . 3/5/2014
I love it. love what I read so far
| tanya2byour21 chapter 6 . 3/1/2014
I liked the new chapter and I can't wait to find out what is going to happen next. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.
| Guest chapter 6 . 2/28/2014
Is Letty ever going to meet up with Dom?
| Guest chapter 4 . 2/28/2014
Still way too fast. Slow things down a bit. It share to believe that in only three months Dom found out Letty was "dead" the. Tracked down fenix and braga (it would have taken him time to get into the racing scene there), put them behind bars, get caught by the police , get broken out if jail by Mia and Brian, go down to rio and pull off a whole bunch more stuff, meet Elena, and then Get together with her. Things take time to be believable. You don't have to crush everything in at once! Let the reader savor how the characters are reacting to things...
And the while thing with Morgan is an added wrinkle that (right now) seems like a bit much. You should try to integrate it into the story more...
(Also why would her family have pictures of Dom and Elena in bed?!).
Can't wait for more!
| Guest chapter 2 . 2/28/2014
Love the story but the pace is too fast. Letty wakes up from being in a coma (for three months being taken care of at someone's house?!) and witching a few minutes her cousins tells her all this stuff and then says "freshen up and come downstairs?!" People don't wake up from comas in perfect health ready to understand things and ready to kick up their heels! Slow it down a bit. She'd be likely to be groggy and confused and her muscles might be weak from laying there. . .
I want to read more about Letty's memories of the DR and Dom leaning her! When Miriam says " How many times has he left you promising you that you guys would stay together the next time around? Better yet, how many times have you gone looking for him only to find him with a bunch of skanks rubbing and kissing on him? Wake up Letty, the reason Dom leaves you so easy is because he know that no matter what he'll have you to fall back on. " she's not wrong...
Dom did all that to Letty/repeatedly! She's bound to be hurt by it.
And I assume that Dom missed her funeral because he was busy looking to fenix to kill him for killing Letty. I guess we will find out!
| guest chapter 5 . 12/28/2013
update want to know whats going to happen
| guest chapter 5 . 12/21/2013
| tanya2byour21 chapter 5 . 11/21/2013
I like the chapters and I can't wait to find out what is going to happen next. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.
| MiaGirl chapter 5 . 11/17/2013
Great start! Hope you are working on the next chapter!
| guest chapter 5 . 11/13/2013
update soon. continue updating
| guest chapter 4 . 11/5/2013
keep on update great story
| tanya2byour21 chapter 2 . 10/25/2013
I like the start of this and I so can't wait to find out what is going to happen next. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.
| Samantha chapter 2 . 10/14/2013
| SereneCalamity chapter 2 . 9/27/2013
I liked it !
Can't wait for the next update !