great story

Oh wow! That was so good!
An absolutely fantastic story!
(I read your fanfic101 version by the way..)
I loved it all... so well written.. poor Weiss... I love the dreams.. i laughed out load at quite a few of them.. especially the 'Tsunami'.. then the 'Where did that couch come from' BA HA HA HA HA ! OH, man, i laughed my arse of..
So bloody good work mate!
I hope to read more stories from you.. and my the looks of your archive in fanfic101.. theres quite a few...

I was a sneaky little Lara and went off and re-read the NC-17 version...because it is damned well-written smut.

But this story is so much more than smut, which is why it stands out. To me, what makes it most is the tone. You just absolutely nailed the characterization of Weiss. Just the delivery, the tone. This joking, wise-cracking Weiss, with the serious undertones. Perfect.

And your imagery, your details, were just great. Some of it was funny, some of it absurd, but you presented it all so well that I could still see it happening. Even the aftermath of the tsunami (hee!).

There's a great longing (and denial of said longing) and confusion that underlies this fic. That all really hits home with the way you ended it, with that great image of Weiss and Donovan sitting on the bed, wanting Vaughn to come back, not sure if he should have done things differently.

Much more than slash, much more than smut, this was just a wonderfully written story. Great job.

-Lara

I liked this fic and i will definitely check ou the NC-17 version.

I don't know if I should be excited or upset that you had to delete the NC-17 version and post the R. I'm excited because I get to review this absolutely fantastic story again. Upset because I think I worked hard on that other review. Mixed emotions . . .

But not about this fic. Perfection. It makes me laugh. It makes me want to cry. Everything works from the Porn Chicken crossing the road to a worried Weiss sitting with Donovan. Perfection I say. Simply perfection.

No, I don't generally read slash, but I'm so glad that I read this story. It is absolutely perfect. :)

Robin