Reviews for Pam, Pete, and Harley
Guest chapter 4 . 9/9
How does she k o who he meet jut cause she can track him? Does the planet piggy back his nervous system and transfer all the data to her?
Guest chapter 4 . 9/9
Do what is this incident and why hasn't the bat family or Jon discovered what's haop between him and the sirens? How is Peter making money and is he researching anything? Why didn't he just go by one if the name s he used when spiderman was wanted fir a crime? Your Peter seems more like a newbie than someone with at least a decade in the game
Guest chapter 3 . 9/9
Do why isnt barb caused of cheating and is he really scared if the bat family? Man Peter seems so srupus
Guest chapter 2 . 9/9
Surprised at how susceptible to her powers he is and that he doeant have some type of gas filter in his mask. Also from what was said she wouldn't know if he informed anyone of the seed. I'm surprised at how quick he almost died and he hadn't heard or found Wanda. This should teach him a lesson about trusting suspect people
chimera629 chapter 2 . 9/9
Do why was he complains about the cold with such a suit,and surprised at how easily he was caught and get powrr worked on him
Ianmac chapter 11 . 9/6
Very well written. You know what you're writing and I love the dynamics Peter has with everyone, especially with Ivy.
EYKFAN chapter 12 . 9/4
I've been wanting to leave a great review for this creative plot since I discovered the fanfiction. I was really immense in the plot that gave me creatively into searching more alike.

Thanks for creating this amazing.
drago chapter 1 . 8/21
Also that comment was from me just a sec agao lol forgot my name my baz
Guest chapter 1 . 8/21
Finally finished that last chapter and I hope you havent abandoned this because its great. I hope you update soon and I am ttuly enjoying every second of story. Pam declaring her love is interesting but I would love to see more of Harls in my own selfish thought. She is upfront and bubbly but I wonder like peter did does she feel more romantic towards him. If that is gonna be in the story or put into her own personal diary. Also dont know how to find the pole so Imma guess it is gone i hope you continue this amazing story and thank you for explaining what spider man version our peter is because as the fight went on I was wondering how two other cud exist with kane and peter but does get solved with just the full understanding that in his previous life he is connected to the other just in fused with the current. Also help explain why kane or ine of the spiderverse spiders dont appear to help or anything
drago chapter 10 . 8/21
And the plot gets dreeprr if any villain cud find spidey it wud ve morlun this is more fun than beforr i wnder how much more will come from yhis
Protagonist Jones chapter 12 . 8/20
Well, this took me about a week to get through all 12 chapters. I really enjoyed it, although I would suggest having someone proof-read your work. I was seeing a lot of grammatical and spelling errors (using the plural women instead of singular woman to address an individual, knowing the differences between their, they're and there, etc.). That makes reading easier, instead of the reader trying to decipher what is going on, regardless of how easy it may be to gloss over the mistakes. Unless I skimmed over something, I found a plot hole. If Ivy had a seed planted on Peter to keep him on a "leash" of some sort, and she could spy and listen in on things, and at a certain point Peter, wouldn't ske know the identities of the capes? Knowing Nightwing is Dick Grayson, Ivy could easily use some deductive skills and unmask Bats, which could potentially endanger the League, or the Bat family at the very least. Someone else's review mentioned the Inheritors being able to get the DC Universe by neans of a web. I'm not as well versed in the Spider-Man mythos but if what they said was true, then this story could go a whole different route in terms of Scarlet Witch and Spider-Man going back to the Marvel Universe. On a personal level, I like the slice of life parts of the story with Pam, Pete and Harley, and the fluffy, more romantic interactions between Pete and Harley, and those few Pam/Pete moments. But thats also a personal favorite thing of mine, so good job there. It didn't feel too forced to me, and Pam was very much a Tsundere here, and overall the humanization of the characters was executed well. I'll be honest, I kinda skimmed through the Klarion and Morlun fights, because this is where I noticed the most grammatical and spelling errors, along with some misplaced words. I can only assume the mind must have been processing faster than you could type, and that's something I understand, because that happens to me sometimes when I write. Because of the aforementiond issues, figuring out what was going on in the fight was hard to follow sometimes, and I had to do several double takes, just to understand what was happening. Morlun's story arc felt kinda forced, like you probably didn't know how to take the story further. It felt very much like "Spidey and Scarlet Witch are out on patrol, when suddenly Morlun!". Klarion felt more natural and built up to because it was tied to something that was established early on in the story, that something being Peter searching for Wanda, and Peter subesquently putting out the word to the League. Now I can only guess that Spidey and some members of the League are transported to Jonah Hex's time. In fact, that preview seemed like a written version of that Justice League episode where some core members are sent back in time and they work with Jonah Hex, so I'm looking forward to that. I'm definitely intrigued by Pam's declaration of her feelings, and I want to see that develop. This is a long review, but just a little more. I honestly wouldn't mind seeing Peter and Wanda staying in the DCU. Although in a sense, that makes me think: what's going on in the Marvel Universe? Are the brightest minds trying to figure out where Peter and Wanda are at? After all, the story has lapsed well over a year now. Is Aunt May worried? What's JJ Jameson up to? Sinister Six? Spidey's rogues? I wouldn't mind a "where are they now" for the MU, but perhaps I'm overthinking it. I really like this story and I have it favorited. I'd love more, Jones
drago chapter 5 . 8/19
I have fallen in love with this story amazing great just simply amazing
Guest chapter 12 . 8/11
You need to continue this story after that horrible morlun story-line.
Batman1998 chapter 12 . 8/2
I like this and how you do the character interactions. I hope you go the peter/harley/wanda/poison ivy route since thats how i feel the story is going but i hope you keep doing the character interactions like you have regardless since its awesome. Can peter use the mark of kaine since i honestly cant remember his other powers
Nick chapter 12 . 7/25
So is this abandoned ? I really hope not please update soon
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