Capitalized Tough Mornin but not Capitol Hill. A fitch is a European skunk.

? She's battered and bruised, he didn't even bring her pain medication, but wine. And, then decides it's a good idea to fuck into oblivion. Unfeeling bastard.

Best chapter.

You had a beta for this? Seriously. This was rec'd by a couple of people but ... I'll keep reading.
The plot is a good one.

Bella really does come off as a whore...an EASY WHORE. Edward just looks at her and shes panting like a fucking dog. Its really unattractive. And it makes this hard to read. Because Edward is so clearly a nasty piece of shit ...so its REALLY hard to read when bella is falling all over herself for a man like him.

Tanya says" we both know you don't ASSISTANT him with his work" LOL

And when they first pulled up to the house Edward said " HERE WE" ...that's it, here we. LOL. Why do you keep making your characters sound like fucktards? Did you go over what you wrote AT ALL? Theres so many mistakes!

She keeps saying over and over that shes JUST his whore...all it sounds like to me is that shes fishing for him to deny it cause she loves him or something. Bella comes off REALLY desperate in the latter part of the first chapter.
Edward is TOO cocky. Why does he act like he has a golden penis? Hell even if he did have a golden penis it would have no use to anyone unless it was UNATTACHED from his body! I hate it when guys act like their the best lay you'll ever have, cause guess what? That's probably not true! Believe it or not Edward other guys have fingers, mouths, and cocks too!

I liked this fan fiction until [spoiler]... Edward fell into a coma while Bella ended up being pregnant. I tried to move passed it even though it was cliche. What killed me is the fact Bella didn't come back. It made no sense to me. Can't even use Tanya as an excuse as she was out of the picture eventually. Didn't come back even then.

AND THEN she goes all woe is me on Edward after he had been the one in the coma. WTF?!

Sorry. Hot story and I did enjoy it, but I can't stand protagonists that make themselves the victims.

I love Lizzie. Man, I remember those times. LOL

I would still would like to know what's on that UBS key! Also, please do a future take!

I've read this story so much but this is by far my favorite chapter.

Hi, your story has been posted on Instagram twilight fan fiction recommendation page ( twifanfictionrec). Full review as below:
Truthfully speaking, when I first came across this fiction, I skipped reading it for some reason and now that I’ve finally read it, turns out I was an idiot for skipping it the first time round. This is one of the well written fictions out there having the perfect amount of romance, drama, angst and a very good amount of lemons. I promise if you read this fiction, you will not be disappointed. All human.

Not sure why you are getting so many hates - I love this story! Stories with conflict & will they won't they are so much more interesting than stories where everyone behaves perfectly & everything is roses.

I love your writing, just one tip (I know you are busy and things like that) proofread a little more because there are a few little mistakes with easy solutions

Whats the deal with the letter? The hesitation in the letter is just weird... like really weird.