not bad

Also, as they explained the procedure for destroying Voldemort's soul, after the potion and until they cast the final spell, Harry should not do magic or Voldemort would win, and by summoning his cloak and staff, he has already used magic, so he has lost. Again you forget what you've already left in writing before. xD

And they find the place where he locked up Voldemort and his best Death Eaters with no chance of escape and just walk in and out when the rest couldn't? Besides overcoming barriers at Hogwarts that they couldn't overcome before, that even Voldemort couldn't overcome? Why do they want to get him back if they are more powerful? Hahahaha

And they find the place where he locked up Voldemort and his best Death Eaters with no chance of escape and just walk in and out when the rest couldn't? Besides overcoming barriers at Hogwarts that they couldn't overcome before, that even Voldemort couldn't overcome? Why do they want to get him back if they are more powerful? Hahahahahaha

Please! A sleeping potion at dinner? Hahahahahahahaha Did they sneak into the castle for that without being seen? And did the house elves let them tamper with the food? And how did they guess the passwords to the common rooms, Remus and Sirius' rooms, and especially Dumbledore's Gargoyle? Is it that all wizards but those Death Eaters are useless? Just when I think I can't come up with anything more ridiculous than the above, you surprise me and give me something even more ridiculous.

Quite a protective antimagic barrier, which can be activated and deactivated as you wish. It protects you from everything, even healing, but not from a Shaw stunner or being tied up... As material to laugh at the number of errors, it's not bad.

Hahahahahahahaha But before he traveled to the past, his eyesight was healed! Harry doesn't need glasses anymore. To write the story so quickly and with such short chapters, you forget very soon what you've already written... You remembered in the middle and instead of correcting that badly written paragraph, you make an even worse excuse? What a mess! hahahahahahaha
Healing spells are not renewable every 24h, or no one would have been cured of anything in their life. Madame Pomfrey wouldn't have a second's rest... Ridiculous. xD
And Peter is with a brunette Hufflepuff girl and doesn't he think she might be Voldemort's daughter and as he recalled, Peter is keeping a close eye on her because of Voldemort's orders?

And neither the phoenix nor the snake bit Severus when he attacked Harry despite the fact that the snake made it clear it would bite anyone who tried to harm him and was clearly doing it to him? Also the staff is synchronized with Harry's magic, it shouldn't be able to be used by anyone else. It's not just any wand. Besides, he should be able to summon it, like he did at the Dursley's when Sirius didn't see it. How difficult is that if he would get the wand back?

How is it possible that Peter (because I'm sure it was him) hit Harry with a stupefy from behind when he has his antimagic shield around him, to the point where they couldn't heal him even in his sleep? And here he was wide awake and much more powerful! What a huge mistake within your own plot. Another one...

It was Ginny who deduced why Voldemort had been strengthened and Harry weakened, not Hermione.

How could they think of and be so foolish as to try the Imperius Curse on Harry knowing that Voldemort's spirit is lurking to take over as soon as Harry's falters? For Hogwarts professors, you've made them very foolish.

You wrote that Ginny, Ron and Hermione signed up to stay for the vacations at Hogwarts to be with Harry and now you write that Harry is going with Sirius? What's the point of that?

Push that didn't even scratch Ron. Had he been mean, he would have hurt him badly or worse.

Please, because of a magical nudge do Ron and Hermione already believe that Harry is absolutely evil? After what they were told had happened don't they imagine that Ron scared him off? Yes it is fragile their friendship then. It just keeps getting worse. A story that has a good central foundation as a story starter, marred by such huge flaws...

Harry was never given permission to leave the infirmary even when he was already well from his injuries in the Hogwarts infirmary as a precaution, and you say he is given permission to climb up the 7 floors to Gryffindor Tower and down every day several times with injuries still, and a broken leg and arm? More nonsense.