Reviews for The Crimson Ranger
Gear001 chapter 1 . 9/26/2013
I like you're character quite well, though your form with describing dialogue needs a little work. Instead of stating the obvious, be more subtle and let the actions speak for themselves. For example, instead of:
["Uh… there's a funny story about that," Crise said sounding Happy yet nervous at the same time.]
Try something like:
["Uh… there's a funny story about that," Crise chuckled roughly. Her faltering smile did nothing to calm Mr. Veil's nerves.]

Let the actions breathe and tell their own story instead of interpreting them right away :P

But otherwise, I really liked it! _
I'm also flattered that I was partially the impetus for your writing this :/D
Now the only question is: can Crise and Silver Ranger keep up with Sven? _o
AxiomWorld chapter 1 . 9/24/2013
Great work! This is getting me even more excited to write this story with Crisa in it!