|Reviews for First Year Back|
| juliet709 chapter 18 . 5/17
i would love to see more of this. to see them punished and to see sev and harry get to move on with their lives and have kids get married all that good stuff.
all of your stories that i have read so far are great and i love each and everyone of them the only thing is i wish they were a little longer or had a sequel cause they sort of leave you wanting more.
| Dagger-Seishin chapter 18 . 2/22
Very cute. Thanks!
| Dagger-Seishin chapter 6 . 2/22
A bit surprised the way Harry talked to the slytherins I got the impression he'd rather be taken then be the one to take.
| Azrael Jinsei chapter 18 . 9/22/2015
Thank you for writing this.
| Femalefan chapter 16 . 8/18/2015
*Blaise not Blaize/
| Femalefan chapter 14 . 8/18/2015
Please get a beta and rewrite this story. You have spelling/grammar errors, sloppy sentencing, and it's too confusing telling who is speaking because you aren't adding said/asked/exclaimed etc (character name) after the "" or in this case '' after a character speaks.
| Femalefan chapter 13 . 8/18/2015
A few things you might want to correct in this chapter:
- Voldemort's mom lived with her dad and brother, not uncle
- Voldemort's uncle was Morfin
- Woman singular, Women plural
- It's easier to tell who is talking if you put the name after the dialogue
| Inu-Neko2 chapter 18 . 8/12/2015
This is my type of story! I loved this from the beginning.
| Ashlin Raine chapter 13 . 6/29/2015
I wanted to inform you that you have the information about the Gaunt's a little wrong. Merope's Father was Marvolo which you got right, but Morfin was wrong. His was Merope's brother not uncle. The spelling was also a little off.
Besides that, I like the story.
| Mari Wollsch chapter 18 . 6/21/2015
| Anon chapter 4 . 5/23/2015
their - possessive form of 'they' used as an attributive adjective "That is their book."
they're - contraction of 'they are' "They're trying to repair the castle."
he's - contraction of 'he is' "I said he's sexy."
his - possessive form of 'he' "His name is Solomon."
Several times in this story so far I see these words constantly used in the wrong place, that can make the sentences confusing at times.
| Stasia Ravenclaw chapter 18 . 4/14/2015
Stasia R. Ravenclaw
| Guest chapter 2 . 3/21/2015
I got as far as Chapter 2, but cannot go on.
I think your story is very good, but it is very hard to follow, as the grammar and sentence structure is awful. You repeat parts of a sentence, within the same sentence, and (a lot of the time) the meaning of the words is lost. There are other problems too, but that is the one that jumps out.
I suggest a Beta-Reader, to improve and fine-tune things
| Veritas Sanctus chapter 18 . 3/20/2015
You are magnificent and I love your writing. Please do continue.
| Hainbuche chapter 18 . 1/2/2015
schöne geschichte. happy ends sind toll. lg hayne