|Reviews for His Daughter|
| Genesis Vakarian chapter 1 . 3/15
| WastelandScribe chapter 1 . 10/15/2013
I thought that was charming. I enjoyed reading it. The unusual relationship and actions had me wondering where this was all going. That is a goal of creative writing. Good job. Do look at your sentence length though. Around 20 words is what can be said in a breath. Sentences longer than that can be run-on sentences or start to require special grammar or syntax. Keep em short and it will read better. Your story also had a good message. To paraphrase a great man, "I dream of a day when a man will not be judged by the condition of his skin, but by the content of his character." Keep writing.
| Reviwer chapter 1 . 9/30/2013
Oh my gosh this is really good! I loved the ending, you seem to have captured James' personality very well. Shame this is only a one shot, but to be honest, I think that's part of the charm: you get the same insight into Claire and Charon's relationship as James would after leaving the simulation pod. I loved this so much, keep up the good work!
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/30/2013
Sweet :D Loved it, every part of it. Keep 'em coming!