Reviews for The Boy Between Worlds
Ryuuohjin chapter 12 . 4/21
Quite an Intresting story
Kaiser Dragon chapter 12 . 4/19
I have a challenge for you. It is a Fate/Stay Night and Sailor Moon crossover.

The Silver Mage of Dreams, Souls, and Planets Crossover Challenge part 1: Emerys Ambrosius Emiya, the direct decedent of Merlin and his powers and abilities. Emerys should be able at the end of the story use these powers and develop them as he goes on his adventures with The Scouts. Emerys must learn to use the Runes, Demonic and Holy Magic's befitting his ancestor's nature as a Cambion, and how Arthurian lore blends Celtic paganism with Christian elements. He must have Tracing, Analysis and Reinforcement in one spell, EX ranked Magic Circuits and when he meets the Senshi he eventually haves the Crystals of Endymion's Four Generals and their powers added to his own and be able to fly. Emerys should also master The True Magic's of Heavens Feel, be able to see the future, manipulate the Five Elements, various Druidic spells and shamanism along with flight and shape shifting(for Druidic and Celtic powers see the Type Moon wiki on Druidism and Celtic Magic's, same with Shamans, and World of Warcraft's Druids and Shaman's)along with his ancestors cannon powers when Emerys comes to terms with his heritage he finds the long lost Magic Crests and perfectly preserved workshops of both Merlin and Morgan Ley Fay. Emerys also has to have the full powers of the Final Fantasy's Black, White, Red, and Blue Mages, and he has to have the powers of the Final Fantasy Summoner class along with mastering Alchemy, knowing the Unified Language, Fairy Magic's from Morgan Le Fay's side of the family, the Toshaka and Edelfelt styles of Jewel Craft and Magecraft, The Runes on the level of The Hound of Ulster as Caster at full power, with everything that Merlin is capable of doing at his full power as a Grand Order Servant and all the skills he has as a Human Incubus hybrid, with his own Crystal and Senshi powers which he gets after befriending and later falling in love with the Inner Scouts which is born of Emerys's own powers, heritage, The Four Generals powers and crystals, and his bond with the scouts along with anything else you can come up with for magic's(but no Sailor suit please!). Emery's can also hold his own in hand to hand combat as he masters Kung Fu with Bojutsu and sword fencing. Emerys should also be a master strategist and the brains of the group but is not afraid to step into the battlefield. Emerys has to resemble Fate/Grand Order Merlin in terms of appearance when he gets older and find Merlin's old familiar and take Cath Palug as his own familiar.

The Silver Mage of Dreams, Souls, and Planets Crossover Challenge Part 2 Plot: The World of the Story. It would be best if you merged the worlds of Sailor Moon and Type Moon into one universe. Now since both worlds have destiny and also conceptual beings driving them with the Sailor Moon world having beings such as Chaos, and for the Type Moon World their is Gaia, Alaya, and the Counter Force. Their are also aliens and monsters in both worlds so it would make sense for it to happen. And finally all the Sailor Scouts show up including the ones that are allies to earth's Senshi.

The Silver Mage of Dreams, Souls, and Planets Crossover Challenge part 3: Emerys's personality and his role in the story. Now Emerys has to be a meddler trying to make the Neo Silver Millennium happen as it gives the world hope and a chance for mankind to ascend to greatness by cleaning and revitalizing earth's ecosystems, colonizing and terraforming all the planets of the Solar System. Emerys is like Merlin in that he has to be mischievous at times by being something of a prankster but kind, compassionate, and grows to be wise and valuing all life, know when it is time to be serious, be a strong believer in freedom, and pursuing ones dreams. Emerys also must aspire to surpass his legendary ancestors, find a way to save Magecraft from dying out without wiping out mankind and the world in the process and building a world where science and magecraft exist together in harmony, prove that he is not in anyway like Morgan Le Fay to the Moonlit World and he must eventually succeed in doing all that he dreams of. Emerys must also have his fair share of insecurities and problems about his own character due to the actions of his ancestor Morgan Le Fay. Such flaws are Emerys having something of an inferiority complex due to being in Merlin's shadow when he finds out about his heritage(as he was adopted along side Shirou Emiya and they were raised as brothers by Kiritsugu)while also being afraid of not living up to Merlin's legacy and be afraid of failing to reach his full potential.

The Silver Mage of Dreams, Souls, and Planets Challenge Part 4: The Wizard and The Princesses of the Stars. When Emerys meets up with The Inner Scouts he goes through all the events and seasons of the original Sailor Moon anime with elements of the manga such as all the Celestial Beings and Sailor Scouts that are allies to the Earth's Solar System Scouts showing up and the Fate/Stay Night Fate route with elements of Unlimited Blade Works. These elements are Shirou facing EMIYA with Emerys and Saber facing down Gilgamesh when the Holy Grail War happens in Fuyuki City when Emerys and the Scouts get some experience under the belts. Emerys when the Scouts go into the Moonlit World of the Fate side of the crossover has to be a mentor figure to the scouts along with Aoko. When the Fourth Fuyuki Grail war comes around Emerys has to become an ally to Rin Toshaka in the Grail War in exchange for learning their style of Jewel Craft and Magecraft but also acts as Shirou's teacher in Magecraft but he is the one to summon Saber Arthuria in a sense of cosmic irony as the two work together and in another twist of irony Saber teaches Emerys how to be a fencer and swordsmen like how Merlin was Arthuria's sword instructor. When Saber destroys the Holy Grail it is purified and temporarily acts as a portal to Akasha and to obtain the True Magic of Heavens Feel which Emerys obtains fulfilling the Holy Grail's original purpose. Emerys then temporarily meets Merlin himself in the Garden of Avalon for a chat and for Emerys's character development into a true hero. Such examples of Emerys's heroism is putting himself in the fray to help others and the innocent to fulfil his dreams, to prove to the world that he is his own man and has overcome his fears, to protect his loved ones, and most importantly it is the right thing to do.

The Silver Mage of Dreams, Souls and Planets Challenge Part 5: Parings.
In true Fate Stay Night and Sailor Moon fashion their has to be love. Now Shirou Emiya has to hookup with Rin Toshaka, Sakura Matou, and Luvigetta. Tuxedo Mask get's with Sailor Moon and Emerys gets with all the Inner Scouts, Medusa after Emerys making a second contract after Sakura uses her Command seals to save Shinji(see the Fate/Stay Night Manga adaptation),Altera from Fate Extella, and for a time Artoria herself during the Fate/Stay Night arc before destroying the corrupted grail causing her to depart to Avalon. However at the end of the story in the Neo Silver Millennium, Artoria returns to rule Britain and turns it into a Neo Camelot and reunites with Emerys. Arthuria also has all the powers she had in life and the powers she has as a Grand Order Servant at the end of the story. Altera has all her powers as both Servant Attila at Grand Order levels of powers and as her titan persona in the Neo Silver Millennium in one body, and can change her size at will. Altera also has both personalities as Servant Attila and Altera assimilated into one personality.

The Silver Mage of Dreams, Souls, and Planets Challenge Part 6: The Inner Senshi's Fate abilities. It would be awesome if the Inner Senshi learned how to use their natural Magic Circuits and various Fate style spells that fits The Inner Senshi's cannon powers and personalities from "Miss Blue" Aoko herself so they can branch out and not just rely on their cannon Senshi powers and gain some variety from cannon. This could help in bridging the gaps between Type Moon's Magecraft and the Sailor Scouts Silver Millennium Magic. Also Medusa must eventually reach her full power in Fate Grand Order by Emerys in an attempt to bring her back to life while also training to master the Heavens Feel along with all the powers of all the classes she can be summoned under at their peak. The Earth's Senshi at the end of the story get all their cannon powers with a Fate/Stay Night bonus.

The Silver Mage of Dreams, Souls, and Planets Challenge Part 7: Fate/Silver Extra. Emerys when he finds out about the Moon Cell and how it operates and be able to bridge the gap between magecraft, science, and True Magic, after it starts acting funny just before another Grail War kicks off he and the scouts go to investigate with backing from Zelretch and Waver. What happens is that Emerys and the Scouts are dragged into another Holy Grail War. This arc has to be based on Fate/Extra, Fate/Extra CCC, and Fate/Extella.

The Silver Mage of Dreams, Souls, and Planets Challenge Part 8: The Silver Chaldea Agency. Emerys has to go through one last Fate based arc on Fate/Grand Order before the final Sailor Moon Season where Emerys and his friends have to gather the decedents of Legendary Heroes to form a organization made up of the descendants of the Heroes of Earth, Former Clock Tower Enforcers, and former dark celestial beings. From Dead Apostles, Renegade Mages, Extraterrestrial and Celestial threats, to even The Types you name the threat these guys can handle it! This group is more altruistic than the Clock Tower and the Burial Agency. When the Neo Silver Millennium comes to be they police the use of magic around the world.
God-King Ghidora chapter 12 . 4/19
I have a challenge for you. It is a Slayers and Harry Potter crossover, think you are up for it? Because I have yet to see anyone do this concept justice!

Harry Potter and the Slayers Part 1: Harry's powers and abilities and Harry's Adventure's. First off it would be best would take a look at the Harry Potter and The Cetra Heritage story series by Quartermass and use it as a template and inspiration without deliberately ripping off his work. Now Harry has to be 8 years old when he get's dragged into the Slayers world and for his adventures he has to go through the first 3 seasons of the Slayers Anime or the first 8 volumes of the Slayers Manga Novels until he turns eleven. During this time Harry has to develop all the skills of a mid tier sorcerer, with Black, White, and Shamanistic Magic under his belt so he is not as vulnerable or inexperienced and when he returns to Hogwarts for his Wizarding training and adventures when he gains his cannon skills but Harry has to develop his cannon personality or the personality in the RWBY Harry Potter crossover story called The Wizard and the Grimm and develop quite a bit of restraint. Also when Harry turns eleven he has to go through the events of Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone. Also no fourth wall breaking! When you get to the 4th and 5th Seasons of the Slayers Anime Harry has to develop all of the skills that Lina and Zelgadis Greywords have excluding the Giga Slave and Ragna Blade spells but learns Gourry and Zelgadis's swordsmanship just to give him a better chance without his wand along with learning Amelia's skill set. It would be beneficial for Harry to have that Horcrux in his scar exorcised after Lina finds away to milk all the information of Tom's Riddle's wizardry before he became Voldemort and the locations of the other Horcrux's so Harry does not have to martyr himself and to gain a bit of a jump on those who want his head. Because whew boy! Lina and the rest of the Slayers would go ape shit crazy and demolish Magical Britain after developing a big sibling and student/teacher relationships with Harry if he does martyr himself! After Harry completes his adventures in the Slayers World he goes through the events of the remaining Harry Potter Books after the Sorcerer's Stone. Now to make things easier do each story as a season take it one at a time by making each season a sequel to the so you do not burn yourself out.

Harry Potter and The Slayers Part 2: Magical Migration. The 3rd part of the challenge is that eventually the Wizarding Communities of Earth cannot stay in hiding forever along with many of those Magical Creatures so it would be beneficial for the Wizarding Communities and it various Magical Creatures to migrate to the Slayers World Lina lives in for everybody's benefit. It is somber truth but one that needs to be addressed but it would be for the betterment of everyone and many of those Fantastic Beasts have a place where they can roam free but still have the protection that they had when in the HP universe and maybe give a technological boost to the Slayers world as we have seen in Fantastic Beasts and where to find them along with the technology in Harry Potter's time period making an industrial boom but not a big enough one that it causes global warming or climate change and make a world were science and magic coexist. Also the Wizarding communities of Earth can assimilate exist in peace with the Sorcerers of the Slayers world without persecution and they can have their culture and lifestyle without needing to live in hiding.

Harry Potter and The Slayers Part 3: Harry's skills and Equipment: For Harry's Equipment it is almost all cannon. His cannon wand and eventually The Elder Wand, his Cloak of Invisibility, The Resurrection Stone and his second broom. It wouldn't be Harry Potter without those key items and equipment as Harry would not be himself otherwise. Also Harry makes his own sword that has the same powers as the sword he has in The Wizard and the Grimm but with a Slayers bonus by being able to channel Slayers magic and spells through it. Also speaking of Wand's Harry's wand in the Harry Potter Slayer crossover challenge Harry finds away to salvage the cores of both his original wand and The Elder Wand to make his Staff of the Magi that can aid in casting Slayer universe and Harry Potter spells so he can have two of his own signature mystic weapons. The Staff of the Magi has all the cannon powers of Harry's original wand, and the Elder Wand.

Harry Potter and The Slayers part 5. Harry's enemies: Harry's enemies should not be lightweights. The first few enemies that Harry encounters are the one's that the Slayers meet and face in the series. Now when Voldemort learns of Harry's new powers and of the world he learned those new skills he finds away to the world of the Slayers that Lina lives in and learns the skills of the best wizards and sorcerer's there and delves into making himself into a high-ranking Mazoku with all of Voldemort's cannon powers, The Magic's of the Slayers world and the powers of a high ranking Mazoku to make him into a true Dark Lord along with his most loyal lieutenants and allies just to make them a credible threat.

Harry Potter and The Slayers part 6. Parings: Harry/Hermione or Harry/Ginny. Zelgadis/Amelia and Lina/Gourry. If Harry does get with Hermione Ron has to get Fleur Delacour. Luna/Neville Longbottom. No harems or gender bending! Everyone is their cannon self or as possible with this crossover.

Harry Potter and the Slayers part 7: Character portrayals. As every one in the story is their cannon self they have to be represented in a believable way. That means no character bashing on the Harry Potter or Slayers sides of the crossover! I am sick and tired of character bashing as it has been done to death!
Thunder Dragon chapter 12 . 4/9
Do you accept challenges? If so I have a doozy of one for you. It is a Harry Potter and Sailor Moon crossover. Think your up for it? Here are the blue prints down below. You already are tackling one Harry Potter crossover so I would like to see how you do with another. Can you handle taking on these two Fantasy Giants?

The Wizard of The Planets and the Silver Senshi part 1: Harry's new family. When Harry was little more than three the Grunnings drilling company That Vernon works at was bought by a Japanese business firm so they are forced to move to Jubaan Japan. After moving to Japan Harry's abuse by the hands of the Dursley's was exposed to his school teachers. After this happens Harry is adopted by the Tsukino family and is raised along Usagi as her brother. However when Albus Dumbledore finds out about Harry's adoption by the Tsukino's after his abuse at the hands of the Dursley's he goes to Japan and reveals Harry's heritage to the adult Tsukino's and proof of the Wizarding World and asks that they raise him to the best of their ability. If I were you I would take some inspiration from another Sailor Moon and Harry Potter crossover called The Little Love of Venus and a Sailor Moon and Naruto crossover called Naruto: The Lunar Knight for this part of the story. Now on the topic of Dumbledore I would take a look at Quartermass's Cetra Heritage Saga on his character and see how he is portrayed as I am tired of character bashing.

The Wizard of the Planets and the Silver Senshi part 2: Harry's powers and adventures. Harry as he develops and goes on his adventures throughout the original Harry Potter Hogwarts books where and when he gains all of his cannon skills, equipment and abilities. Including all the Deathly Hallows for the final Battle against Voldemort and Chaos. However when we get to the start of Sailor Moon Harry does get his own Senshi powers and his own crystal which should be born of the Earth's Golden crystal, Harry's magic, and the scouts own powers symbolizing Harry's earthly heritage, his bond with his friends and family and his growth as he goes down the Sailor Moon Anime(whether the original anime or it's reboot is up to you)with his sister and the Inner Scouts and hold his own with them and is their equal in terms of power and versatility. Also when the gang find's out about the Horcrux in Harry's scar, they eventually exorcise it without killing him but Harry does get the skills and powers Voldemort had as Tom Riddle. Also on the topic of Harry and the Scouts he has to have no Sailor suit, dear goodness no!

The Wizard of The Planets and The Silver Senshi part 3: Parings for the Main protagonists. Seeing as love plays a massive role in the Harry Potter mythos and as Sailor Moon is a love story their has to be love and parings. Usagi has to get with Mamoru, Harry gets with Makoto, Ron Weasley gets with Ami Mizuno, Minako Aino get's with Viktor Crom, and Rei also get's with Chad. Hermione gets with Neville Longbottom. Luna and Artemis get together(the moon cats),and Luna Lovegood get's with Dudley and makes him a better man. For the rest of the casts parings you can do what you want so long as it fits their cannon characters.

The Wizard of The Planets and The Silver Senshi Part 4: The Senshi's abilities. The Senshi gain all of their cannon powers, gear, and abilities throughout the Anime and Manga but they also gain access to Wizardry and learn all spells and powers that Harry can do during his time at Hogwarts. Also Tuxedo Mask gains the Golden Crystal and all the powers he has in the manga but also Wizardry like the rest of the Senshi so he is not given the punching bag treatment like in the Original Anime. You can also give the Senshi Japanese styles of Magic and other powers of magic so long as those powers suit their cannon characters.

The Wizard of The Planets and The Silver Senshi Part 5: Harry's enemies. Every great hero need's great villains so Harry's enemies have to be no push overs. Voldemort has to be Harry's greatest enemy. The Death Eaters have to obtain the powers of Dark Celestial Threats and Youma along with all their cannon powers when they find out how powerful Harry is becoming and the strength of his allies, they have to be legitimate threats. Also Harry has to face the same enemies that the Scouts face in the Anime and Manga and face a mixture of both the main enemies of his series and the Sailor Moon series.

The Wizard of The Planets and The Silver Senshi Part 6: The Neo Silver Millennium. When Harry and his friends get to know their future and what the Neo Silver Millennium holds, it is truly something beautiful. While it is mostly original anime cannon on the Sailor Moon side on the Harry Potter side it is truly great. The Wizards no longer have to live in hiding and both sides are working together to build a world where science and magic coexist in harmony and to build a better world. The Neo Silver Millennium also encompasses the entire Solar System and they are able to colonize and terraform all the planets of the Solar System. The Wizarding World's Fantastic Beasts and all of the creatures of mythology are also able to roam free and have wildlife preserves where they are able to roam free and all of earth's ecosystems are revitalized.

The Wizard of The Planets and The Silver Senshi Part 7: Harry Potter's allies. When Ron, Neville, Hermione, and Luna Love good encounter the scouts, they not only gain their own crystals but they also gain the powers of Endymion's four generals as they were before they became Youma but also their Youma powers but purified and added to their new crystals along with their cannon powers. This needs to happen so they are not left in the dust or become irrelevant in terms of the story. Also all the Celestial Soldiers in the Manga that are allies to the Scouts show up as well to aid the Scouts and Harry in the Final Battle against Chaos and Voldemort.

I really hope this happens because it would rock! Because if it does happen...Oh boy Harry, you are in for one magical adventure with the Scouts and the Wizarding World and it would be awesome! I wonder how the rest of the Scouts will react to the reveal of an entire world of magic that they did not know existed until now and I am looking forward to their interactions with the Wizarding World. I can see Ami being curious about the differences between the magic's of the Scouts and the Wizards and the biology of the Fantastic Beasts. Jupiter can get along with Hagrid and would love the challenge of facing some of the Death Eaters, and Rei would definitely be curious about the spiritual side of Western Wizarding magic.
Celestia's Paladin chapter 12 . 4/2
First off I would like to applaud you for not take the same route as most of the damn HP fandom and have Dumbledore be evil incarnate... Those stories get tiresome real quick.

So let's see... Harry isn't an angsty little turd and is remarkably close to how he is in the frist book, he's thriving under Reimu's care, though I'm surprised Yukari hasn't mentioned anything about the Wizarding World.

So hopefully it won't take another two years till the next update.
Thunder Dragon chapter 12 . 4/2
I actually have an idea for Mamizou's love interest, Mamizou is a Tanuki shape shifter so her falling for an Animagus or someone with Shape shifting powers would fit, you can even make an Male OC who is an Animagus for her to fall in love with or she hookup with Victor Crom and cause him quite a few headaches while also being his moral compass. It is up to you.

I have a few other ideas as well for Touhou antagonists joining up with Villains from the Harry Potter Franchise. Mima could (finally)return to side with Voldemort and The Death Eaters and be one of Harry's enemies along with his cannon ones and any of the truly evil or malicious Yokai in Gensokyo or even Japan could join as well.

Also maybe Harry can have a Harem of Youkai Girls if he becomes an Animagus and takes the form of a White Stag like his dad and his mom could shape shift into deer, Like Ran Yakumo, Or any other female Yokai shape shifter in Tohou if he takes on the Animagus form of the Stag like his dad.
Thunder Dragon chapter 12 . 4/2
I actually have some ideas for Pairings that you can implement if you want them. Reimu can fall in love with Bill Weasley, Marisa can hookup with either George or Fred Weasley due to their mischievous nature with the other available twin being open to Tenshi Hinanawi. Fawkes can become a Youkai if he ever gets to Gensokyo and can take a male human and his original phoenix form eventually with his power of rebirth being similar to Fujiwara No Mouko's and can hookup with Utsuho Reiuji or Fujiwara No Mouko.

Nymphadora hooks up with Remus like in cannon and Hermione gets with Ron like in Cannon, however Harry does hookup with Fleur Delacour, If their any I have missed that may be needed in terms of parings let me know so I can help.
Taranodongirl1 chapter 12 . 3/28
Great fic! I can't wait for more chapters
Darklight of the 0 arcana chapter 12 . 3/19
That was a nice chapter.
I hope to see it soon (hiding final destructive laser)
James Birdsong chapter 12 . 3/17
Excellent two chapters
Thunder Dragon chapter 12 . 3/13
After looking back and seeing how the spell cards work I can see that I messed up on some of Harry's powers. let me revise Harry's combat abilities and some spell cards. Also here are some of my ideas to truly flesh out the world of the story and try to help merge both worlds in ways that make sense.

Harry's Combat skills and Main powers: Harry has to learn how to use a Sword after his adventure with the Chamber of Secrets so he does not get poisoned again. I say he should learn fencing, how to use a broadsword, general western sword styles, along with Kendo, and Eastern Sword styles. Harry is also able to summon energy avatars of Lion's and other Big Cats and have a western knight's armor appear and on his body for defenses and a energy Sword in reference to King Richard the Lion Hearted Crusader and how Gryffindor is a figurative Lions Den. Also Harry should learn to use his cannon powers with this fighting style to cover Long, Short, to Mid Range Combat. I would love it if Harry learned all is cannon skills and magic's during his Hogwarts years. But before that Harry get's some spiritual and physical examinations for his health and to try and graph Harry's potential which is done by Reimu and Remilila along with Patchouli during the examination they realize Harry has a Horcrux and after preforming an exorcism to get rid of the thing Harry has accidently gained all Tom Riddles' non Dark Lord powers(but keeping the powers of a Parseltongue)when he was still in Hogwarts putting him on the path to be a Hero and allowing him to get a jumpstart on his Magical education.

Dealing with Dumbledore: When Albus Dumbledore finds Gensokyo to try and locate Harry he tells them that their is more magic in the world than what Reimu and the others thought but just hidden from notice of the public eye. Now when Dumbledor finds Gensokyo he talks to Reimu and finds out about Harry's treatment by the Dursley's he is willing to change his plans accordingly especially when he finds out about the Horcrux being exorcised and Harry gaining the powers and knowledge that Voldemort had as Tom Riddle before he became a dark lord.

Harry's Hogwarts Spell Cards: Spell Card number 1. For his first Spell Card it should be called Illusionary Wizard and Dream Mirrors which causes illusionary copies of his energy bullets to appear as a fakeout to mess with his opponents heads. He can also make Mirrors that allow Harry to Reflect enemy Projectiles and show them their Hearts Desire to further trip up his opponents and mess with their heads so he can have a shot a winning.

Harry's Hogwarts Spell Car Number 2. His second spell card is similar to the Hourai Elixir spell card and is called Serpents Renewal, Eyes of the Basilisk and Phoenix Tears. Harry when he activates it can leave an opponent completely immobile for 30 seconds to 1 minute maximum and nearly defenseless and the paralysis can bypass any defense and it also allows Harry to regenerate from serious injuries to perfect condition three times with out draining his reserves just to not make it OP but it can also allow potentially limitless amounts of recovery and full regeneration but by doing so draws power from Harry's Magical energy and can leave him exhausted if he use it for two long. This is a reminder of how Fawkes saved his life and as a reminder of his battle with the Basilisk in the Chamber of Secrets.

Harry's Hogwarts Spell Card Number 3. Harry's Third Spell Card should summon projections of his Patronus, The Stag and The Dementors. The Stag can actually attack and summon a mental defense for Harry to protect his mind from psychic attacks or his mind being read. The Dementor projections due what a Boggart does and their real selves due, make his opponents see their worst fears and drain the life and happiness from a person to the point they are a vegetable or out of the fight. This spell card is called A Marauders Birth and a Father's Legacy.

In case you haven't got the pattern by now Harry's Hogwarts Spell Cards should capture the main battles and events that shaped cannon Harry in the Books and referencing them. If you need any ideas of the names and Mechanics of the Hogwarts Spell Cards just let me know but I hope this gives you an idea on where to go with those spell cards.

If it seems that I was spamming the review section this was my original review with some revisions. but some how the pre-revised part was fragmented and split into two different reviews and my revised version of Harry's powers.
Thunder Dragon chapter 12 . 3/13
After looking back and seeing how the spell cards work I can see that I messed up on some of Harry's powers. let me revise Harry's combat abilities and some spell cards.

Harry's Combat skills: Harry has to learn how to use a Sword after his adventure with the Chamber of Secrets so he does not get poisoned again. I say he should learn fencing, how to use a broadsword, general western sword styles, along with Kendo, and Eastern Sword styles. Harry is also able to summon energy avatars of Lion's and other Big Cats and have a western knight's armor appear and on his body for defenses and a energy Sword in reference to King Richard the Lion Hearted Crusader and how Gryffindor is a figurative Lions Den. Also Harry should learn to use his cannon powers with this fighting style to cover Long, Short, to Mid Range Combat.

Harry's Hogwarts Spell Cards: Spell Card number 1. For his first Spell Card it should be called Illusionary Wizard and Dream Mirrors which causes illusionary copies of his energy bullets to appear as a fakeout to mess with his opponents heads. He can also make Mirrors that allow Harry to Reflect enemy Projectiles and show them their Hearts Desire to further trip up his opponents and mess with their heads so he can have a shot a winning.

Harry's Hogwarts Spell Car Number 2. His second spell card is similar to the Hourai Elixir spell card and is called Serpents Renewal, Eyes of the Basilisk and Phoenix Tears. Harry when he activates it can leave an opponent completely immobile for 30 seconds to 1 minute maximum and nearly defenseless and the paralysis can bypass any defense and it also allows Harry to regenerate from serious injuries to perfect condition three times with out draining his reserves just to not make it OP but it can also allow potentially limitless amounts of recovery and full regeneration but by doing so draws power from Harry's Magical energy and can leave him exhausted if he use it for two long. This is a reminder of how Fawkes saved his life and as a reminder of his battle with the Basilisk in the Chamber of Secrets.

Harry's Hogwarts Spell Card Number 3. Harry's Second Spell Card should summon projections of his Patronus, The Stag and The Dementors. The Stag can actually attack and summon a mental defense for Harry to protect his mind from psychic attacks or his mind being read. The Dementor projections due what a Boggart does and their real selves due, make his opponents see their worst fears and drain the life and happiness from a person to the point they are a vegetable or out of the fight. This spell card is called A Marauders Birth and a Father's Legacy.

In case you haven't got the pattern by now Harry's Hogwarts Spell Cards should capture the main battles and events that shaped cannon Harry in the Books and referencing them. If you need any ideas of the names and Mechanics of the Hogwarts Spell Cards just let me know but I hope this gives you an idea on where to go with those spell cards.
Thunder Dragon chapter 12 . 3/13
You need really need help on the Danmaku fights, they seem to be lacking the kind of creative bursts of energy that you find in the games and the sheer spectacle as well. You have to make the character seem that they are really in a fight, put detail of the effects and on the actions of the character or characters in the fight. But onto a more pleasant topic, I have other ideas this time for the Wizarding World. Two for World Building and one for Harry's combat skills and three more for eventual spell cards.

Idea number 1. Seeing as that Magic was drying in the east up causing the creation of Gensokyo. when Albus Dumbledore finds Gensokyo to try and locate Harry he tells them that their is more magic in the world than what Reimu and the others thought but just hidden from notice of the public eye.

Idea Number 2: When Dumbledor finds Gensokyo he talks to Reimu and finds out about Harry's treatment by the Dursley's he is willing to change his plans accordingly especially when he finds out about the Horcrux being exorcised and Harry gaining the powers that Voldemort had as Tom Riddle before he became a dark lord.

Idea Number 3: Harry's Combat skills. Harry has to learn how to use a Sword after his adventure with the Chamber of Secrets so he does not get poisoned again. I say learn fencing, how to use a broadsword, general western sword styles, along with Kendo, and Eastern Sword styles.

Idea Number 4. Spell Card number 3: Lions Heart. Harry is able to summon energy avatars of Lion's and other Big Cats and have a western knight's armor appear and on his body for defenses and a energy Sword in reference to King Richard the Lion Hearted Crusader and how Gryffindor is a figurative Lions Den.

Idea Number 5. Spell Card number 4: Phoenix Tears. This Spell card is similar to the Hourai Elixir spell card and is an upgrade from the Serpents renewal for potentially unlimited amounts of recovery and full regeneration but draws power from Harry's Magical energy and can leave him exhausted. this is a reminder of how Fawkes feather is in Harry's original wand and as a reminder of his battle with the Basilisk in the Chamber of Secrets.

Idea number 6. Spell Card number 5: Eyes of the Basilisk. In another reference to the Chamber of Secrets. Harry when he activates it can leave an opponent completely immobile for 30: seconds to 1 minute maximum and defenseless and can by pass any defense.

If you need Ideas for Spell Cards let me know and I will come up with some ideas.
Thunder Dragon chapter 12 . 3/12
Can I make a few suggestions for Harry's growth? I would love it if Harry learned all is cannon skills and magic's during his Hogwarts years. But before that Harry get's some spiritual and physical examinations for his health and to try and graph Harry's potential which is done by Reimu and Remilila along with Patchouli during the examination they realize Harry has a Horcrux and after preforming an exorcism to get rid of the thing Harry has accidently gained all Tom Riddles' non Dark Lord powers(but keeping the powers of a Parseltongue)when he was still in Hogwarts putting him on the path to be a Hero and allowing him to get a jumpstart on his Magical education.

Suggestion 1: Harry's first Spell Card. For his first Spell Card it should be called Illusionary Wizard which causes illusionary copies of his energy bullets to appear as a fakeout to mess with his opponents heads.

Suggestion 2: Harry's second Spell Card. His second spell card should be called Serpents Renewal which allows Harry to regenerate from serious injuries to perfect condition three times just to not make it OP.

For Later Spell Card inspiration I think you should take a look at the Harry Potter books when he was in Hogwarts and the movies for some ideas. Also he should learn the Master Spark along with Reimu's skill set so he is not just a kid bystander in the adventures in Gensokyo.
Ezequiell chapter 12 . 3/9
Wow, its alive...

Please, don't disappear again, this story has a lot of potential, and its cute as hell.
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