Reviews for Averys smoking
guest chapter 1 . 12/6/2014
Would you like a beta for your story? I'm too lazy to long in but if you let me know in an chapter update I will pm you.
Guest chapter 1 . 9/9/2014
There was like no punctuation at all... In that entire thing... Might wanna work on that
Dog in my blog chapter 1 . 6/5/2014
Stan was everything you could ask for in a dog. Furry, loyal, smart, the ability to talk but if that wasn't good enough he was good in the sack ;)
English Teacher chapter 1 . 5/23/2014
Excellent 1st grade punctuation.
DarkSuicune2000 chapter 2 . 4/7/2014
This is the worst story I've ever read, and I've twilight. The story is bad, but the grammar is even worse. Haven't you heard of quotation marks? Anyways I don't think Avery would ever start smoking. :( This shouldn't be a Humor/Romance story, it should be a Horror/Disaster story LOL.
Guest chapter 2 . 3/1/2014
Where are the periods?The capital letters?Go back to 3rd grade!
Lesbiwriting chapter 2 . 2/26/2014
This is cute! Could you expand on it?
Bob chapter 2 . 11/20/2013
This is really bad 0/10
Unknown chapter 1 . 10/3/2013
Not o be mean or anything but why did you write the story with Avery smoking?