|Reviews for Just Another Day|
| snoozinghamster chapter 7 . 9/14/2014
Sounds like an exhausting day. Really good. Loving little estel. He's so sweet and innocent. Trying to pretend to be asleep never seems to work!
| PegasusWingsVW chapter 7 . 3/28/2014
Hey LaurielS, just wanted to drop a word of encouragement. You are by far NOT the worst writer I have encountered (you are rather good in fact), so please don't be discouraged from continuing to grow and learn. Write for the freedom and enjoyment it gives you. If you like what you've written, then don't mind what others say. Cheers!
| shadowbride chapter 7 . 3/17/2014
please can Estel be my foster son?
| Quihi chapter 7 . 12/25/2013
Wow! I really enjoyed this entire story. It is well-written and while some of the phrasing does seem a bit awkward, you have good grammar, spelling, and characterization, which puts you ahead of many beginning writers! All of the chapters were very cute. I love how Glorfindel is always bribing Erestor with miruvor.
Reading reviews, I realized that it is surprising that Gilraen was not around in this story. However, many smart 4-year-olds can write and I would certainly expect Estel, with his lineage and surrounded by Elves, to be able to read and write, even if not perfectly. Also, seeing as Estel has his mother living in Rivendell and that it is Elves, not humans, I am not particularly surprised that Estel does not have a permanent nanny.
I hope to read more stories of yours soon! Happy holidays!
| moonys revenge chapter 7 . 12/15/2013
whether erestor is seen as family is irrelevant he is a horrible babysitter who knows nothing about children really, at least human children (the veggies, the expectation he write, the behavior complaints)
the child needs a nanny, caregiver to mind him when his father can't (I assumed I was reading a story where his mother had been written out of it, had died w/ his father or whatever which is a tact many fanfics take) whatever, he needs a set up similar to the idea we would send our kids to daycare, employ a babysitter while we work daily
there has to be a better elf in Rivendell than erestor to fulfill this task and when glorifendel couldn't do what he originally planned to estel should have gone to his normal nanny for the day
it doesn't matter how long the paragraph was or wasn't when most 4 year olds can't write especially if they have had no form of preschool are just learning their letters if they are future king of gondor or not what you described was more a 6 or 8 year old not 4
time out would work w/ a 4 year old if done properly as would having to help clean his mess or being denied the opportunity to go to the dinner for what he did
and though I find erestors comments on Estel's behavior standard adult bull sh*t people were so enamored with him because he's cute he's a child not because he was putting on a show for people he didn't know kids usually act up more w/ people they don't know not less. Estel is also not ill behaved the rest of the time he is simply young, normal for his age and poorly supervised on top of erestors ridiculous expectations
it should have been understood that yes estel could attend the dinner but once he was finished eating and began to fidget he be dismissed because he is 4 should he attend the dinner again at an older age the next year it be understood that if he is allowed the privilege he must stay X long after eating or not go at all
the story is very cute, funny and erestors reaction is very realistic but nothing else is
| horseyyay AKA Morgoth chapter 7 . 12/14/2013
Hehehe :) adorably cute And a perfect ending to the story :) if only it didn't have to end :( oh well :) will be looking forwards to more of your stories
| moonys revenge chapter 5 . 12/9/2013
oh come on Erestor can't be that stupid not to just plop veggies on a plate and expect a child to eat them; no he is certainly not an ideal babysitter but surely elves cooked vegetables with seasoning, added cheese or something rather than eating them just raw all the time or slightly boiled DAH!
As to your other comment response my point was there should be a nanny, babysitter, someone whose sole job it is to WATCH him to structure activities for him so Erestor and others don't have to; yes glorifendel was supposed to take him out for the day or an activity, but seeing as the construct of the story works on the premise Elrond is acting as father the twins as brothers and his mother is nowhere to be seen, it seems even more unlikely the lord of a kingdom has time to provide the supervision needed for a 4 year old or that other members of the household could do so even in a passive manner that would not lead him getting hurt
I also agree with the other commenter who said it was unlikely a 4 year old could write at that age never mind copy a paragraph as assigned; it is also an inappropriate punishment for a 4 year old and what appears to be his first prank better to make him sit in time out for 4 minutes or lose a privilege (no bedtime story) than copy work
Don't get me wrong love the story, find it highly funny and typical of too many adults I just wish it wasn't so close to a bad reality in parenting .
| horseyyay AKA Morgoth chapter 6 . 12/7/2013
appropriate for older people cus I would have though most of them kno who he is :) :) and awesome :) SOOOOO CUTE!
| Quihi chapter 5 . 11/23/2013
Elrond is back! Yay! This next chapter promises to be interesting, though it will be weird if Estel is actually that bad.
I liked how you used a more general POV this chapter, or so it seemed to me. It gave the story a different tone- more just about Estel's life and less focused on Erestor, letting the story expand to cover more events.
Anyway, the chapter was great. I look forward to your next update!
| horseyyay AKA Morgoth chapter 5 . 11/20/2013
hehehe :) :) this always make me smile :P estel reminds me SOOOO much of my little cousin when he was that age :P :P keep going :) I love it
| Quihi chapter 4 . 11/17/2013
Aww! Estel is awful. I love how you include so much detail in just the right places to make scenes like this fun to read. It's awesome!
I'm just going to mention that you should capitalize all the words in the title: Just Another Day. The same goes for chapter titles: The Punishment.
| horseyyay chapter 4 . 10/27/2013
LMAO still laughing
sorry I'm not logged in
| moonys revenge chapter 4 . 10/27/2013
hate to interject some realism into this story but where is anyone WATCHING this child he can't be more than what 5 and no one knows how to watch him
punishment great where was the part about you are not allowed to GET UP until you finish the task and if you get up you will start over
| Guest chapter 4 . 10/26/2013
Good story, but I don't think the average four year old would know how to write big words though some of them might be able to write small words.
| PrincessMnMz chapter 3 . 10/21/2013
Oh no, Erestor. This doesn't look promising. Can't wait for more. Loving this story.