|Reviews for It Started With A Detention|
| yep chapter 3 . 1/29
I can see it in my head
Harry and ron on one side of a shield and hermione, fred, george, angelica, on the other
Harry and ron glaring while hermione is frowning in a disapointing way
| Minty Siren7 chapter 4 . 1/8
Ooooh! Please hurry with the next update! I'M ANXIOUS! 8}
| AllThatDramione chapter 4 . 12/27/2013
DO YOU EVEN UNDERSTAND HOW DAMN CUTE THIS FIC IS OMG I CAN'T EVEN.
Literally could not stop smiling throughout this entire thing. Even though Harry is really OOC it's okay because THE CUTE.
more please? soon please?
| Venetiangrl92 chapter 4 . 12/29/2013
Great chapter! So can't wait for the next one! I love them! Xoxo
| zMisteryLifeZ chapter 4 . 12/28/2013
Awwwwwww I love the story but I can't wait for the next chapter :)
| Fremionelife99 chapter 4 . 12/27/2013
I love your story. You're one of the few authors that doesn't constantly switch between 1 and 3 pov. It's just perfect!
| punkyredhead chapter 4 . 12/27/2013
So glad that Ginny is the way she is. The chapter was super sweet. I loved it. I loved all of the hidden Fred and Hermione moments that people didn't see. Together they plus George, Angelina and Ginny will be good. A sweet date but not a date chapter will be good. Keep up the great work.
| RayningRoses chapter 4 . 12/27/2013
You are doing a wonderful job. Give Ron a literary butt kicking for me.
| LadyMagic96 chapter 3 . 12/21/2013
Please please update again soon :D I love this story
| Guest chapter 3 . 12/18/2013
I need more of your story nowwww. I can't wait. Please its sooooooooo good.
| Guest chapter 2 . 12/18/2013
Oh my goodness this is one of the best stories I have read in a while! And even better it's one of the very few with 1 or less grammar mistakes! I love it sooooo much! Keep writing, because it's absolutly fantastic!
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/18/2013
This was Ah-mazing!
I really love it!
| lasaints2015 chapter 3 . 12/14/2013
I really love the concept for this story. Keep on writing please!
| Venetiangrl92 chapter 3 . 12/13/2013
Loving this story! So can't wait for the next chapter! Hope you update soon! Xoxo
| annewed chapter 3 . 12/12/2013
Thanks for sharing your story. I'm going to be very honest and hope you take this review in the spirit intended.
I like your writing style overall - it's clean, it's mature and thoughtful, though at times it feels a bit stilted. I like the way you are developing Fred and Hermione, though it took me by surprise to step back and consider this as only a few hours (I mean that in a complimentary way). I'm interested to see what you do there. But - I really hate what you're doing with Harry and Ron. It feels really OOC and because there is no real background to it or build within your story, it feels aggressive and wrong. In the first chapter, I thought was more than fair and well written and plausible. The second and third chapters though are really throwing me to read.
Obviously, as the author, you get to make character choices and decisions and having a callous/jealous/possessive Ron or Harry is absolutely up to you. But when it's something happening against their canon depictions - and this is, I think, especially Harry - I feel like there has to be some reasonable explanation or lead from the fanfic author. It's especially glaring to me because you seem to be so thoughtfully building a believable level of interest and attention and intention between Fred and Hermione. Please understand, I'm not trying to tell you that you are wrong for moving the characters in a direction I might not personally! More to the point, I'm saying that the background or justification for it isn't present enough to give me adequate buy-in.
I think it's fixable, if you want that, because I see a great deal of potential in your writing overall. I am terrible at giving constructive criticism because I feel bad! But I like your writing enough that I wanted to say something useful, and this was really bothering me and continually taking me out of the flow of the story. Please know I mean this as nicely and constructively as possible. And I do thank you again for sharing.