Reviews for Intrusion
DarkAngel.of.RiffWaves chapter 1 . 10/7/2013
That was so great! Honestly I thought it might've been going a different direction when I read the summary (like Alan being a teenage boy and needing "time alone" in his room). Haha but this was very well written and unique. I really enjoyed it! You should do a part two/continuation or something where Alanna finds awkward things/situations around the swoop! Haha it was funny though! And I agree Alanna probably would be pushed around on the more womanly parts of the household.
BlueLion chapter 1 . 10/7/2013
well done - one might expect that pages learn to keep their rooms clean, though - it's sort of a military training, and I wouldn't expect any drill sergeant to leave such matters be ...
Princess Unikitty chapter 1 . 10/7/2013
very coo lone-shot. i liked the dialogue.