Love the rapid pace and all the description. Well done!

I liked the first one better, more passion and the way it led to the kiss was better.
And then a second kiss, I imagine they'll be going at it for a few more hours! :)

I think I enjoyed this ending more than the other-maybe cause it led to the second kiss? Just seemed more like them too. Either way, keep writing-and I'll continue to read, deal?

Yay for the kissies !
I absolutely loved both ! I'm going to make a ridiculously fluffy fluff just for you for giving me and Ash so much of it :*

Both alternatives were amaing ! :D