|Reviews for IS: Persona|
| Lone Gundam chapter 8 . 1/24
So far this story has been interesting. Have you considered Tabane fixing Aegis and upgrading her?
| L'esprit0Noir chapter 1 . 1/2
Please put this OC in
Name: Mara Coque Phallussaur
Year in school: 69
Nicknames: The Conquerer, ohmygodwhatisthat, The Overlord
Minato or Ichika: I don't get what you mean, but Minato
Likes: Putting their head into holes and wiggling around inside them, woman, men, butts, your mom, everyone's mom, golden chariots, demons, tentacles, more butts, Satan, redheads, brunettes, strawberry blondes, blondes, defeating their enemies with one thrust
Dislikes: Buddha, Shin Megami Tensei, angels, people who are righteous, people who say that they are gross, Ichika
Description: They are a large green haired hyoo-min with parted bangs hovering over their eyes. They were born in Chernobyl, giving them tentacles on them legs which are quite fat and round. They have small arms in comparison to their thick, overbearing figure. Often seen riding a golden chariot.
Personality: They are quite arrogant, but simply act 'tsun tsun' before you get to know them and then act 'dere dere'. They are often times quite devious, attempting to lure others into trusting them with whispers of goods and rewards.
History: They are actually Minato's long lost cousin from another galaxy that came here after penetrating the veil of time and space, losing their powers.
Their IS and Abilities: Often referred to as the 'Phallusaurus', it is a Spinosaurus-like mecha while still retaining most of it's human features. Appearing to have dull phallic like appendages flopping around on it's spine. It is unknown what purpose they serve. With a rounded shiny purple head containing a large slit down the face which is actually the visual unit, used to detect other IS and any living beings.
It wields a large medieval yet technologically advanced sword with two large sphere objects for a hilt. The handle having a flesh like texture and composition. Meanwhile the blade is a large, pulsating mass of energy with a slit at the tip which launches potent beams of white energy, an ability that the visual unit has in it's arsenal as well.
The blade has been dubbed 'The Penetrator' due to it's unbelievably powerful piercing properties.
How they meet: Thrusting himself forward, he accidentally thrusts into Minato and then te encounter begins.
I worked really hard on this OC, please put him in Minato's harem as well as my other 4500 OCs.
(I'll be surprised if he actually does make it into the story, even as just a cameo. That would be hilarious.)
| Lewamus Prime chapter 8 . 12/28/2014
Okay this is the best OC I can make o if you don't wanted I understand and if he OP then Redo him for me or change some as long he keep his IS,multiple personalty disorder, his crush on Charolltes and Laura ,because I try and see if you can do it
nickname:Icy,Hothead,Random,S.A, albern ,mignon garçon,plushy
Year in school:1st,
Likes:cute things ,Charolltes,Laura , family,friendFoods,Music,Having fun,Games,Watching TV,Helping friends or people,Good thing,Planting,Animals,Meats,dessert,Root beer(A soda like),training,weapons
Dislikes: being called a freak or monster even called a weapon idiots, people jump in conclusion without thinking or cut off guard ,Perverts,Veggie(sometime)heartless jerks,Slavery,bullies,people who hurt his friends or family,being push around,someone do something stupid,Someone ruin his Root Beer,someone insulted His brother,people who lied to someone and used someone as a weapons
Description:he have a bit pale skin and have a bit long yellow-haired , Red eye and even he is a little built up muscle with pecs,ab,6 pack . His face is angular,has two sets of teeth fangs like and possessed a wonderful smile of an angel or a great nice guy or a fearless or fearsome. One set looks like a normal human's, while the other is retractable and are shark teeth (mainly used to scare opponents).he wear a beige-colored t shirt with one large black stripe with purple lines in the middle and a beige-colored jacket ,wear black leather gloves ,wear pocket pants yellow light wear a combat boot and sometime wear a Stahlhelm helmet with steampunk goggles.
Personality:sang he have a french accent and he is have a rather heroic character with good intentions funny,,gentlemen ,nice and innocence with kindness and has a positive attitude towards almost everything and everyone he encounters. He's the kind of person who sees everybody he meets as a potential friend., then possesses very good manners. he proves a loyal and fearless he had experienced death, he knows more than most about the consequences of dying. He shares a very strong emphasis on keeping promises and friendship, when his have multiple personalty disorder(It means a dissociative disorder that is characterized by the presence of two or more distinct and complex identities or personality states each of which becomes dominant and controls behavior from time to time to the exclusion of the others. and results from disruption in the integrated functions of consciousness, memory, and identity even it is a rare dissociative disorder in which two or more personalities with distinct memories )But he in control of it if he need it or not even he let of guard that activate it but he know his multiple personalty are him and always serve and protect his family , friends or someone he in he understand and see people's feelings always solve some problem to afraid of woman's wrath,punishment and sadist
History:his story a little same as before that happen his father was german and his mother was french who die in an accident when he was 4 and now in a orphanage all alone with no friends he was being teased,bullied, push around by kids but he had enough even he almost hurt the kids even felt terrible what he did even they called him a in 2 weeks he was adopted by a man sang thought he was gonna have a family but he was wrong he been an experiment into a goverment to make him into a weapon that can defeat a super solider even take military training, hand to hand combat marital arts and survival skills even without his nanomachines inside of him that he was a task at a mission even a little help of stop the war and some help with Germany he was an expert on weapon that he built his own been adopted by man name tom who is american teach Sang how to speak english even teach him to speak russain,japanese,china and england even take some few trip around the world and he now have tom as a good so tabane who was meet when Sang want her help with his IS that they become good friends And soon been adopted as his mother even he change his name into Sang Shinonono for now because he explain his story to her
Their 4 IS :he have a Closed Form The form the IS takes when not being used. which is is a bracelet that color silver with red,blue,green and yellow on it
he have his normal is but have three armor of is he can change into similar like ezra's requip magic from fairy he in control of his multiple personality when he in a fight but when he
his first IS's name "The Hyperion Sparrow " in his normal self his IS ( just picture like optimus prime have combine with jetfire of optimus prime jet mode with a a gauntlet like from highschool dxd and also with cannons and optimus's faceplate and helmet ) and abilities:gauntlet deflect, 2nd Shift, Electric whips,beam swords,Hyper Sensor, fly at Mach 24 speed and Panzer Cannon,Valkyrie Trace system,AIC (Active Inertia Canceller) projector, 6 wire-guided daggers.,A .80 caliber heavy rail gun, Energy Barrier/Absolute Defense ,Particle Cannon, A .61 cal sub machine gun, A .62 cal heavy shotgun,Battle Damage/Repair and energy absorb
in his emotionless mode his second IS's name is " azurblau Schneesturm " (picture this as soundwaves armor from transformers revenge of the fallen combine with lobomon from digimon )abilities:Ice manipulation,fires explosive ice missiles and ice lasers from his cannons, which are also the weapons employed by his cold/calm personality and use ice power or make ice weapons and sonic disc,hacking, blades, 6 electric tentacles
in rage mode his third IS's name is "Nova buystvo" (picture this as a predaking aromr's robot mode armor like with burninggreymon from digimon togther )abilities: a twin laser turret and fires laser bolt barrages, which is also his hot-tempered personality's weapon of choice,Fire manipulation,heat beam,cloaking device
and his insane mode his final IS'name is " Carnage trigger " (picture this as Gundam AGE-2 Dark Hound with kamen rider den-o gun form)abilities: His insane/crazy specializes in exploding laser whips good at marksmanship and speed of light,copy abilities, Ice manipulation,Fire manipulation,Light manipulation, multiple explosive missile
How they meet: he was childhood friend to charlotte dunois from his trip even charlottes nickname and nickname him "mignon garçon" means cute boy in french and in his mission who he meet laura who was partner even sometime sang treat her like a llittle sister sometime she even nickname him albern means silly in now Sang go to IS academy from tabane to meet his new brother minato
Anything else you want to share:He have three kind of multiple side effect his eye color change his voice and accent even got names but they prefer to be called sang
when some girl hug him he is soft like a pillow or a stuff animal or a plush toy
sang's second personality is when he is insulted, being push around, being bullied horror,something he don't like,annoyed or angered his eye become darker red wear his red sunglasses and have a russain accent voice a bit deep ,he become Extremely strong and fast-moving, making him quite a dangerous his temper side,he have a short bad-tempered that is dangerous but he in control because his temper is like a fuel of 90,000 beast of a rampage but also very strong physically and react angrily with violent threats towards almost anyone . Despite this, he actually does care about others, even if he is embarrassed to admit it he name his second personality Hothead.
sang's third personality when he in a problem situation or sad he his eye turn ice color blue that his hair cover his right eye and have a german accent become emotionless and soft voice but threatening ,shy sometime who initially avoided speaking to anyone at all and he really cold-natured and intelligent ,loved to read book even a bible and do magic tricks, picture his third personality as ulquiorra from bleach and he name his third personality Icy.
sang's final fourth personality when he is scared or embarrassed , surprise or injured to far his eye turn yellow his hair shadow to over his eye may look scary of a shadow like glowing yellow eye and have a american accent and have a personalty of a 6 year old child or a maniac in a good way even sound like a child and a maniac together and really crazy may toss out good puns and jokes, children's nursery rhymes, or random non sequiturs, mostly followed by hysterical laughter even sadist but around friends he really a Goofball,Oddball,Helpful,Modest, overall, a comedy guy from tv or a cartoon like person to make people laugh of his way or jokes picture it like the joker and deadpool like but in a good way even he fight like so crazy he run really fast like the flash sometime even he crazy make people scared or sent chill to their spine by his crazy eye and smile he name his fourth personalty random because he is crazy and insane.
and he a polygamist means When a man is married to more than one wife at a time, the relationship is called polygyny or polygamist;
a polygamist it means A serious trusting relationship with multiple partners (because it's not cheating if you have no secrets and all partners are alright with you bringing another into the group) and without marriage (because marriage is only used by governments and religions to control stupid people). The larger the group gets, the more consent is needed to bring in new partners. Polygamy is not the same thing as an open relationship because in an open relationship you see and do who you want without asking for anyone's consent first.
One Man And Many Women
| Xystia Crossroad chapter 8 . 12/12/2014
Please dont give up on this series
| Treant Balewood chapter 2 . 11/20/2014
Wow a 'child go down my spine' huh must have felt really strange
| fallenlegion chapter 8 . 6/19/2014
hey nice work on the story, though I do agree with the other reviewers that you write short chapters and was wondering how long it takes you to post since it's been 5 months since you last updated and a suggestion. have minako's daughter trick minato into thinking it really is her gramdma and then humiliate him in the process XD
keep up the great work
| Chaos Theory chapter 8 . 5/31/2014
My my, does thou protest too much?
| Chaos Theory chapter 3 . 5/31/2014
Crap, missed that part. Sorry. And wait... Yo? That is all you have to say to a class full of girls? ...why am I not surprised?
How they Obtained their IS: Similar to Minato's circumstances, Tabane designed his IS, however it was a prototype, like its Core, and was the basis the next Generation IS, however in retrospect, it is still classified as a 3rd Generation. Of course, Tabane was against making another core... until Chifuyu threatened her with White Knight.
| Chaos Theory chapter 1 . 5/31/2014
Hm, sounds interesting... Hey, do you mind if I put in an OC? It's a guy, unfortunately, but...
Name: Soran Imbraghim (not Setsuna F. Seiei from Gundam 00, mind you)
Year in School: 1st, hardly ever attends
Likes: anything except ramen
Dislikes: everything about school
Description: Soran is '5, 4" ft tall with dark brown hair swept to the right side that covers his right eye, which is red while his left is green. Unlike most students, he prefers wearing casual clothes, which is usually a dark blue windbreaker over a red hoodie and a green t-shirt underneath, along with light khaki slacks and brown leather boots. He also wears a trademark beanie on his head. It was noted by Minato that, despite his personality and hair, he bears a striking resemblance to Shinjiro Aragaki, a deceased member of S.E.E.S, and often mistakes him for Shinjiro.
Personality: Soran is by far the shyest person you will ever meet. He is usually seen hiding behind or under his desk or behind a corner when speaking to someone, and is rarely seen at school due to the fact that it is an all-girls school, and is embarrassed by the very thought of it, despite there being two male students (Ichika and Minato) already attending. It is usually either Laura or Chifuyu who makes him attend, and more often than not, by pulling him by the ear. However, he is fiercely loyal to any friends he makes, and would even make life-threatening plans to ensure their safety at the cost of his own. When someone dear to him is hurt, he does a complete 180 and goes into a fit of rage, cursing profusely as he tries to severely wound, and if pushed to the point, will try to kill the attacker. He also holds Minato in high regard, stating that he, one day, would like to get to know his past. He seems to hold some affection towards Laura, though he is afraid to admit this due to her terrifying nature (also partially scary looking because of her eyepatch).
History: the Representative Candidate of Afghanistan, as well as the illegimate son of Biskow Imbraghim, a Congress Member who took the proper measures to ensure his son's safety. Growing up, Soran moved around quite frequently with his father, and at some unknown point in time, learned that he was also capable of piloting an IS. At the time, however, a terrorist organization was chasing after his father, and if they learned about Soran, they would likely use him. To ensure this would never happen, Biskow faked his own death, and entrusted his friend, Chifuyu Orimura, to look after him. Afterwards, Chifuyu trained him personally, and according to her, he is nearly on the same level as Laura in terms of strength and power.
Their IS and Abilities: Solar Dawn-Unlike most IS, this one features a prototype solar reactor IS core, and as such, it's capabilities are always at their height in the day. It holds the same design as Blue Tears, except with a gold color scheme with white rims, and instead of using a rifle or missiles, it uses twin energy blades that run on Solar Energy. It is also equipped with twin assault rifles, but they are primarily used for destroying projectiles.
How They Meet: Minato met Soran on the first day he came back, and later reappears, introduced to the class late during the school year. Whichever point is yours to decide.
| rickyp01 chapter 8 . 5/23/2014
Two things id like to see:
1 use his superpowers to fight him on an even level, for about 5 minutes, THEN deploy the persona-suit. (not using personas BTW, just the passive skills like evade X Null X or auto-sukukaja and a sword he pulls out using universe arcana.)
Will Shizaku be watching the fight?
And one i always recommend when i find an early-stage Persona revived-Minato fanfic:
What can the universe do (acording to igor nothing is impossible but what can it do WITHOUT killing him or causing extreme stress?)
This last one is something no-one seems to put to much thought into.
And to make this revieuw more usefull let me list some options (not to say: Do this or else i wont like it, just trying to help.)
with a persona, (like becoming thor,) Cannon already established this as a possibility with the following individuals: Jun kurosu (IS) Evil Corporate Asshat-guy (P1) That guy who wielded Hypnos(P1)
2. Grant P1/2 demon personae skills (seeing how you mentioned him to know about the existence of Zan skills it apears you already added this to his possibilities)
google, (often called knowledge of the universe) basically a slightly MORE omniscient google.
5. Strengthen personae twice or thrice as much (Maybe as a sort of orgia mode)
. (basically established cannon seeing P3 eding cutscenes)
in evoking, (no more need for a gun, you are established as omnipotent this shouldnt be a problem, Hell the first two generations of persona users never needed a gun NOR a special hour of the day)
or a fuuka-like function with scanning and stuff.
to evoke ALL personae at once.
10. Personae gain sentience, (seems suprisingly popular, like the idea myself as well)
11. Transcension of the 170 personae limit, adding characters used as personae in P1 2 4 and golden.
12. Access to his own velvet-room like place. (Recommend the doors to be like smaller versions of the doors from the seal but then without the living doorbar)
personae and pulling them out of the sea of your soul without Igor or Velvet room help.
more reliance on a nihil-weapon for personae, (also ability to use thor as a hammer and a persona at the same time still)
Weapons gain mythical atributes, (like you cant heal away the injuries of the cursed spear gae bolge, or if unworthy of touching Deus SyphosDivine Wrath of GOD)
Hope these help with writing, i just dont like telling someone: Look into what to do with this, and then sitting back. not meant to say do X, just meant as inspirationpoints i guess.
| arkzero chapter 8 . 4/24/2014
I'm guessing that the other two shifts are Thanatos, and either Messiah or Orpheus Telos.
| xion930 chapter 8 . 4/24/2014
Henaru's route looks like it will be interesting by the way are you thinking about making alternative routes or harem route?
| Nunas The No Name chapter 8 . 4/19/2014
i want to see more epecially the changing IS: persona
| Firem78910 chapter 8 . 4/13/2014
i'm loving it more
| plantkingman1 chapter 8 . 3/4/2014
Can't wait to see or in this case read about Minato's IS in action using his persona!