first off I love the way you put both nezumi and shion as a seme and uke In different situations
and the dialogue was amazingly sexy and I feel was totally fit for shin and nezumi
sooooo good and cuuuute

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Ahahaha it's so cute :D Poor Nezumi :D. It was really refreshing to read the fic in their POVs, thank you!

Sympa your 4 points of vue thank you

OMG the only thing Shion did was to faint XD And Even in these situations they are fighting :D

Lmao I can't even xD this was really good :D Wayyyy toooo good 3

That was absolutely amazing although waaay too short for my liking ;) And it's so cute how each time it ends with Shion fainting lol

Omg this was great. I loved it. Some grammar errors but you warned english wasn't your first language. But i loved it. A. i hope u write more.

wow. There no other words for this...and I mean it in a good way

HAHAHAHAHA

OH MY GOD Poor Nezumi! X'D At this rate, never of them will have a sex life.
This was really funny and really cute.

God you're killing me that was so awesome
Bet I looked quite ridiculous reading this in the train with a stupid smile on my face :p
Thanks for the nice sexy times!