|Reviews for The Patient|
| Nimbus Llewelyn chapter 2 . 10/20/2013
Okay, so I heard good things about this fic, so I checked it out. My immediate reaction:
ARGH! ALL IN BOLD!
It's not bad, but seriously, remove the mass bolding, it's really off putting.
| Rubyet chapter 11 . 8/3/2013
Have just finished this and I feel the need to voice my absolute approval.
Le fael! Agoreg vae. ;)
| Marcus S. Lazarus chapter 11 . 11/17/2012
Intriguing idea, as with everything I’ve read that you’ve written, I’ll give you that.
The opening created an intriguing perspective on how our modern world compares to Middle-Earth- a bit bleak at times, but the essential idea is still effective, as we sacrifice wonder for reason without knowing what we once possessed-, and subsequent developments as you implied the existence of a threat great enough to prompt Gandalf to return and then vanish only added to my high opinion of the storyline.
The subsequent plot was equally interesting, with ‘Aaron Stone’ presenting us with an interesting character in his own right- who he is might be relatively easy to work out, but what he’s doing there or how he’s ‘back’ is another matter- even before we’re introduced to the mystery of Moses and the Malcolm Building, to say nothing of Legolas’s decision to return to Earth reflecting the strength of the bond between the Fellowship despite the relative brevity of the time they spent together as their full nine.
The question of John Malcolm’s real agenda and/or identity- given that he could be a reincarnation of an old foe or just someone who knows the difference between legend and fact- is excellently contracted by the humour of Legolas and the elves’ confusion about how the world of men has changed and developed since the days of Middle-Earth.
Eve’s ‘real’ nature was an interesting touch- I had a suspicion that she’d be more than just a detective, but that’s not the same thing as receiving confirmation- and her subsequent meeting with Aaron was an excellent way to bring them together without forcing the situation, pitting them against a new/old and terrifying enemy with a connection to a past that none of them could have imagined as they’re forced to analyse a world beyond anything they were expecting.
It might be skimming over the truth a bit to just have Aaron and Eve ‘know’ that they can trust the elves, but considering the complexities of reincarnation as a concept it’s not exactly impossible, and what the villain did to Gandalf certainly adds an interesting edge to the story.
The final battle was also excellent, neatly combining the elves’ skills and knowledge with Aaron and Eve’s awareness of the world they live in, culminating in a brilliant moment when Aaron does something that Aragorn himself may not have been able to achieve, destroying Melkor’s plans the only way he could when faced with the full scale of John Malcolm’s evil face-to-face.
Still, it’s in the conclusion that this story really shines; maybe the Fellowship as a whole aren’t there, and maybe their time won’t last forever, but a unique family reunion has taken place, as the world of Valinor finally greets the arrival of Arwen to its shores, to say nothing of Gandalf’s restoration to his true self.
Once again, a story that I think Tolkein himself would have been willing to write if the idea had occurred to him first; keep up the great work!
| Fortune Zyne chapter 11 . 3/28/2012
I really enjoyed this story and for awhile I thought Malcolm was Sauron. BEcause if MElkor was defeated the world would end and be remade right? That's how I always understood it. Also the Valar put a ban on MEn entering Valinor. But Eve and Aaron got to enter.
Other than that it was a great story!
| Glory Bee chapter 11 . 3/16/2012
A very unique spin, definitely AU but a very exciting read!
| FireHeart Alchemist chapter 3 . 9/8/2010
Wait. Stuart Farmer? As is Steward and Faramir? DID YOU JUST KILL FARAMIR? Noooooo!
| FireHeart Alchemist chapter 2 . 9/8/2010
Malcolm and Sandra? More like Melkor and Sauron! Oh I love the references here!
| FireHeart Alchemist chapter 1 . 9/8/2010
Okay, not done this yet, but I would like to applaud a snipped of brilliance in this chapter. "If there was any innocence left to the race of men, it was burned away forever the moment wonder was given up for reason."
Brilliant! Amazing! This one line has me convinced that you are a literary genius! Or at least a master of the English language.
| oldRazberri chapter 11 . 10/24/2009
I read this entire story just today. I was so hooked, I could not stop! So many great characters, and no plot discrepancies to speak of. I am looking forward to reading the sequels! An all-around well done, finely crafted piece of fan fiction literature!
| Greensleeves the Great chapter 2 . 11/23/2008
Is it just me, or does "Malcolm and Sandra" sound a lot like "Morgoth and Sauron"?
I really like the story, and that dead guy, Robert Whatsisname is really puzzling me. Is he someone we know (knew)?
| GoodnessKnows chapter 11 . 7/26/2008
This is a very good story; in fact, this is my second read. The adventure is so exciting, and so dramatic. The epilogue's a bit dissapointing, though. They just sail to Valinor, and it's happily ever after. And next to the drama of the earlier chapters, it's a bit anticlimatic. I especially would have liked to see Elrond's reaction to Aaron, since Aragorn was very important to the elf lord as well.
| Bob chapter 8 . 5/18/2008
I love this story. It's creatively written, and it has great characteration.
The only problem is that you have a lot of run-on sentences. Try to say things more concisely.
| Gord and V chapter 11 . 6/26/2007
This is one of the greatest stories i have ever read! i usually don't read stories set in the present day, but i loved this one so much!
peace out boy scout
Gord and V
| Akkarin11 chapter 2 . 3/5/2006
I like how your story is developing, but your punctuation could use some work.
| Akkarin11 chapter 1 . 3/5/2006
Love you story. Is Olorin supposed to be Gandalf?