Reviews for The Legacy
Tertius711 chapter 54 . 5/12
Dudley the chad. Always good to see
Darth Lazy chapter 18 . 5/4
it's not paranoia if there's real danger
gdecon chapter 38 . 5/4
COULDN'T IT BE MENTIONED SOMEWHERE THAT KILLING OPONENTS IN WAR IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER IS NOT MURDER. Is that close to the preceding number of idiotic on coments on moral highground in war
Arghhh Where's Mad-Eye when you need him
gdecon chapter 30 . 5/3
making the key points in this chapter is over repetitie by 40 % . They go from compelling to particularly irritating and leave the reader muttering "YES he's going losing it, YES he'ws gone cazy SO GET ON WITH IT"
Guest chapter 1 . 5/3
“Spoiler” Dudley turns out awesome
gdecon chapter 1 . 5/2
Adults with IQ.'s above 100 and certainly young adults (Bill)recognize that teens closing in on their majority are also closing in on the point when they are free to tell "adults" to mind theirr own business if not "got to hell" and flaunting their "authority" will shortly result in them having no influence
Molly regularly behaves in a way that suggests she may not satisfy the inteligence standard but Bill does and is close enough to being first able to tell "adults" that he will make his own decisions thank you very much that he would recognize that making pronouncements to Harry about what he can and can not do in Harry's house is very short sighted.
snow in the darkness chapter 44 . 4/25
wow I read a lot of DG romance but this one personally is the most forced and uncomfortable relationship I think.
snow in the darkness chapter 42 . 4/25
dislike hero but ask help from one, why not ask from malfoy before he lose his mind. Hypocrite much
snow in the darkness chapter 37 . 4/25
I think even if you manage to make harry in love with daphne. it will be disgustingly forced that it's not even funny
snow in the darkness chapter 35 . 4/25
how the hell can you expect harry to marry and fall with this insufferable woman, Daphne is seriously annoying
snow in the darkness chapter 20 . 4/25
fuck this daphne. Damn I really hate her, no need to bloody rude, it's if Harry ask her to snog
jimmy.oz chapter 1 . 4/23
Well the first chapter made it seem interesting along with the synopsis but since there isn't any more updates after so long not sure if i should look into it or just wait till a time when i am bored and want something to read.
Guest chapter 41 . 4/18
The story moves backward too much. Characters spend whole chapters re-deciding their reasoning and future moves, only to do it all over again the next chapter, repeating the same long narration to get there.
Biggest issue is there’s too much narration as the writer thinks out their ideas on the page, and too little actually character dialog and action. Don’t tell when you can show.
fiadhoftheunbrokenwinds chapter 10 . 3/21
Info dumping is actually very fun to read. A good source for my own writing.
cravingsforthesoul chapter 6 . 3/11
I do hope hermione’s character shows some maturity going forward, unlike canon !
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