I can say, whenever a person writes a Story, he imagine hinself as the protagonist himself. In this case Naruto himself. That means you like to be a bitch to others. Letting Rias Boss around him. Acting like a Beta Bitch sme as yourself. The way you write lemon scenes between Naruto and Rias is ridiculous. He actlike a beta Submissive bitch, instead fucking her into the bed like a Fuck alpha. That means you are a Submissive Bitch, who like to Let his girlfriend take the lead, instead of taking the lead by yourself like a man with a back bone.

The story is utter trash. Naruto is acting OOC. He ain't anyone's bitch. He won't bow to anyone at anytime. Only if the situation required. But in this story he is a Beta bitch like yourself. And opposite of his original personality.

I came alot.
Seriously,good story!

Rias and I haven't tried this yet, but I've always been curious to see how it feels after watching anime," Naruto said, bringing her foot to his face. "You'll have to let me know what you think."

She would have asked what he was talking about, but then Naruto
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Rias and Naruto actually have done this before.

921k?
IVE BEEN LOOKING FORWARD TO THIS.

why is naruto such a fucking pussy? dude you’re trying to portray him as a goofy badass but all i’m getting is a fucking idiot who doesn’t know how the world works

You hate warms the cockles of my heart and nourishes my strength.

Rias is annoying.

Like most stories shes fine one minute then she acts like a stuck up toddler very annoying.

complaints so far from binge reading:
contradictions (Did Issei take the mutated pawn or all 8?)
Naruto acting ooc.
important story elements that are mentioned but happen off screen
a stronger physical body but being able to handle less of Kurama's power.
what? he could handle the full Kyuubi in Canon as an adult, and has the Chakra Impressions of all the other tailed beasts.
and you're telling me that his old body which could handle that absurdity, cannot handle the Jūbi's power in a stronger physical form? I don't fucking buy it lol.

the tension from the holy sword arc was artificial. because we knew. that Naruto was gonna pop up. You took him out of the equation in a way that made sense but his lack of trying to escape w Asia was really odd. Meaning the entire siege on Kuoh, (which you've managed to misppel every way it can be when starting with K) was entirely unneeded, and completely fucking pointless.

I'm gonna give it a few more chapters to see if it's worth finishing bur as it is rn, it's not.

Gosh that took me forever weeks to finish this, great story though

Shitty ass fanfiction

Sate Sate Sate.

...
Akeno and Issei are breaking up?
aww phoey

Dropped because of all the forced and unneccecary drama. Would it fuckibg kill you to have one fucking happy scene, you depressed psycho? Get some help

What I don’t like and people seem to get wrong is that Naruto is against killing….but he’s not. He’s a cold hearted Killer. He only ever hesitated with Killing Haku cause he had had a positive interaction with them, he dead going to kill Kabuto with the Rasengan if he didn’t heal like he did, he didn’t kill Sasuke for known reason, he definitely tried to kill Orichimaru but Orochimaru escaped, Kakuzu should have been one shot by the Rasenshuriken which is an instant kill move, the rest of his enemies are people who had a huge impact on his life as well as a connection to him in the fact that they were all chasing the same dream but using different methods so they were used to show contrast and to show his ability to change people and get them to he inspired by him so it was a matter of writing there….

But in each and every situation where you are an enemy Naruto did not default to kindness. He actively tried to kill you, like when he fought and killed that Itachi clone who was made using a sacrifice from some guy from the sand village, he was trying to murder him and after finding out he wasn’t Itachi he didn’t even slow down to think about how he killed the wrong person. Naruto was always aiming to kill his enemies but in most cases they were either too skilled or had some form of plot armour or not killing them led to them helping him out, like how not killing Nagato led to him resurrecting the Leaf Village residents he killed and how changing Obito ended up with him fighting against & helping them with Madara and Kaguya.

Naruto is a stone cold killer and stop making him out to be a bleeding heart

Every time I re-read this and get to this chapter I can’t help but think Rias’s anger at Naruto is just way too irrational and she’s just constantly digging the knife deeper into the wound and twisting it up….like entirely doing too much…not even trying to understand his side of the story, is her anger justified, yes but the way she’s reacting to the situation at hand is just crazily irrational…then I remember she’s a 18 year old teenage devil and it makes some form of sense but it’s still too much. Plus how Naruto just let’s everyone walk all over him, I kind of wanted to see him grow some fucking back bone but he just sat there and took it like a whore behind the local bar being drilled into the dumpster….