Reviews for Hurt and alone
Hi chapter 1 . 11/4/2013
I'm from Panama City It's in Central America.
I don't know where you got the definition for (Ese).
In my country (ese) means (this) or (that).
I'm not trying to be rude.
But if you're going to use Spanish please note there lots of different forms from Argentina to Chile to Panama and Spain.
Think of it how people from Texas, Scotland and England have different accent.
The same thing is with Spanish and we all say things a little differently.
So it would be very helpful if you're going to use a Different language if you say in the beginning what kind of language it supposed to be whither it's Spanish from Spain or Argentina.
I find it very helpful to use Google translate or if you have an app that translates.

Aside from that I think your story was great has a lot of drama and And when Jaime got sad I wanted to hug him. I like how you made everything worked out in the end. Can't wait to see more blue beetle stories from you.
Dead Hero chapter 1 . 10/30/2013
This is really cool, I'm surprised that it isn't more out there! Oh well.
Dead