|Reviews for Unfair|
| Jkoopaling chapter 6 . 1/3
I have a bad feeling about Mavis's sharp pains. I hope this isn't going to be what I think is going to happen.
| Jkoopaling chapter 5 . 1/3
I HATE the inspector, SHE should be fired and reported to the council. Also, I love this fic so far.
| Wendy80 chapter 1 . 11/12/2014
It's too long
| Xanadu-King chapter 2 . 10/6/2014
Alright, so I know that you have already completed this story but I too love reading about them. I often found myself smiling at scenes in your A-Z of Life story, it would often remind me that I want something like that too. Although I am sure we would all want something like a zing in everyone's lives, and I am still looking for mine, but I digress. She is pregnant again, which I am totally down for, apparently being a vampire now did nothing to subdue Johnny's sex drive.
| CM7 chapter 30 . 2/16/2014
Great job on this great story Can't wait to read the next story, See you then.
| Awesomo3000 chapter 30 . 2/11/2014
Aw, shame this story's over, but I look forward to the sequel! :)
| Sondardo chapter 30 . 2/11/2014
Wow, the epilogue already, time sure flies, doesn't it? That chapter was truly nice, filled mostly with tenderness, happiness and positive emotions, though, some worryness can't be avoided...
It was nice to see how everyone was viewing Lily's status as a human, and how they could see the positive sides of it, she can go out in the sunlight, and she didn't cry for very long. Yes, she's aging fast, but she still have a lot of time left, so, everyone is focusing on showering her with love...
Oh, and I loved how ironic it was that Mavis was okay with the age gap between Freddie and Lucy, but that Johnny wasn't! That was surprising, since he was a human and all, and that he had quite the age gap with Mavis too!
For now, Lily's still a kid, so it's not so bad. However, when she'll continue to age quickly, I fear that everyone will feel some measure of despair. When, in a few decades, she'll look as old as Mavis, that will start to be difficult to bear... and when she'll become an old lady in a few more decades... brr...
Yes, life is unfair, so all you can do is bear it, and enjoy what you can... And, ohh, i liked how you toyed with the possibility of Johnny and Mavis having more children, with him stating that he wouldn't mind celebrating more birthdays like that, and with Mavis stating that her sterility is not definitive yet. And... that foreboding at the end? Four kids are perfect, and nothing could go wrong? Riiiiiight, hehe!
Regardless, I can't wait to see what you will write about in your sequel! Probably mixed bits about everyone's lives; Lily growing up, Freddie's and Lucy's wedding and perhaps Lucy's pregnancy (I would love to see Mavis and Johnny's reactions), Jack's life too, perhaps even Mavis getting pregnant with a fifth child. Many things can be written... including Lily's growing older and older, and her eventual death... Her death will most likely be sad, but if she leaves this world, with her parents and family showing their love for her, her death can also be tender and somewhat sweet too...
Since you intend to write your next story kinda like A-Z, this means that things won't arrive in chronological order, and that you could portray Lily as an adult before portraying her as a teenager, or that Lily's death probably will not be at the last chapter, right? I don't know if it will be as lenghty, but I can't wait to see! Thank you for writing such beautiful stories, and for entertaining us, you have a lot of talent!
| floodmaster16 chapter 30 . 2/11/2014
Well, sadly it's over, but will definitely keep an eye open for the sequel
| CM7 chapter 29 . 2/7/2014
Yea the hotel I knew the hotel would stay open, Not like Drac would every allow it to happen. It seems that almost everyone in the hotel is happy about the hotel not closing down. Even Ava's a little happy that all the chaos is over for now. Great job on the conversation with Lucy and Ava, how Lucy understanding why the way she acted and thanked her that she didn't go through shutting down the hotel.
Mavis is warming up to lily, getting through the past no matter how dark or grim it is and looking into the future. Well I knew Mavis couldn't stay away from any of her children for a long time. I know they are going to make the most of lily's life no matter how short it is.
You are a great writer cannot wait to read more of your stories.
| Awesomo3000 chapter 29 . 2/4/2014
Yay, the hotel stays open! And Ava's not evil! Hooray! :D
| Sondardo chapter 29 . 2/4/2014
Very nice! All loose ends were nicely tied up, the hotel isn't going to close, Ava accepted Johnny, even if he was a human, Lucy and Freddie can now be together, without fear or without having to hide anymore, everyone cane to terms with the fact that Lily will live as a human, with a shorter lifespan...
Oh, and, most importantly, Johnny managed to cheer Mavis up, alleviating her guilt and fears, making Mavis starting to forgive herself. And, Johnny's right, Lily wouldn't exist at all, if Mavis did nothing. Okay, what she did wasn't ethically correct, and she paid a very high price too, since Lily will be the last child she'd be able to bear.
Still, let's look at this positively, four kids is a nice number, Mavis did her share, she can let her body rest. Heh, one side effect of her state, if we want to look at the bright side, is that she won't have to worry about getting pregnant, so, Johnny and her could... show less restraints while doing you know what, hehe...
Of course, I can foresee some sadness, when Lily will grow old and eventually die of old age, but... if she was loved by her family, even her short life would be very much worth it and fulfilling! So... aside from the sadness, I can foresee tenderness too...
I can't wait to see what you will write in your epilogue, and what you will write as follow up stories too! I thank you for having written such amazing stories, you're extremely talented, and I wish you luck, whenever you want to try writing a book! Heh, got any ideas what you will want to write about?
| seniorcopycat chapter 29 . 2/4/2014
Sweet! Can't wait to see how it all ends
| Sondardo chapter 28 . 1/27/2014
Okay, that chapter was pretty nice! I loved how you let yourself loose and had some fun with the part about Lucy impersonating various characters from the movie, giving you an excuse to cram quite a few quotes, hehe. That moment was refreshing, it was a breath of fresh air compared to the drama we had, and still have a little.
So, it seems that the baby is well, even if human, and that Johnny loves Lily with all of his might. I was pretty saddened about how Mavis still hates herself. I can't completely blame her though, she did do something somewhat immortal, but, Johnny is also right, without that, Lily wouldn't be here, so it wasn't all that bad. Perhaps, in time, she will forgive herself. It was heart-wrenching about how Mavis wished Lily to have none of her traits...
And, urk, I was unfortunately right, Mavis lost the ability to bear children now, because that accelerated pregnancy burned her body out. Even though four children is pretty respectable, and even if Mavis didn't wanted any more children, learning about her sterility cannot have been fun.
Well, at least, we'll soon find out what the Council will have decided, won't we? I can't wait to find out.
Also, don't worry, it's okay if you want to end your story, and you entertained us so much already, I salute you! Still, I'm looking forward to see the remaining chapters, and that epilogue of yours. I'm not sure if the ending will be sad, happy, a little of both. It could also be open, for your follow-up story, hehe...
No matter what your other stories will talk about, I will be eager to read them! I do admit, a story about Mavis and Johnny becoming grandparents, I would be very curious to read it, hehe!
| CM7 chapter 28 . 1/27/2014
Great chapter with all of the kids joking around with each other and Johnny interacting with lily. Hopefully the pain Mavis feels will just go away and she will not feel like the problems the witch caused were all her fault. Damn to bad theirs only a few more chapters left this is a really good story. I still feel that Damien really hasn't really been punished enough for what he was going to Lucy. Is the hotel ever going to find out what really happened to Mina and what and who lured her out into the sunlight. Cant wait for the next chapter and your next story!
| Awesomo3000 chapter 28 . 1/26/2014
Ooooooh, the report's finally here! And what does it say?