Reviews for Unfair
mlgNoScoper chapter 30 . 11/6/2016
This is such an epic story, how I wonder why I haven't found this masterpiece earlier. I gotta admit though, I nearly teared up on this ending. And I definitely teared up at one point of this story :')
mlgNoScoper chapter 13 . 11/6/2016
I've only been reading this fic for the last few hours, it's awesome so far. Sad to see Mavis lose her baby though :(
havroth chapter 3 . 5/14/2016
Just starting, but i have super high hopes for how this will turn out.
GleekAndProud chapter 30 . 9/29/2015
Honestly? I LOVED this story. It is so amazing,and when they were talking about the life span thingamigger,I thought Mina was going to be the one to give up those couple of centuries. Crazy,right? I liked the part where Mina was trapped outside, which is weird because Mina is my favorite character. I 3 Mina. You know, in a I-wish-this-character-was-real-so-I-could-be-their-BFF kind of way. I don't know what your next story is called, but I know I'll love it as much as I loved A-Z of a life and this.
GleekAndProud chapter 25 . 9/28/2015
GleekAndProud chapter 16 . 9/28/2015
Bo'jour how'd ya do on you're French test?
GleekAndProud chapter 6 . 9/28/2015
skylaeatpie chapter 30 . 8/19/2015
Gosh... I cried during this. More then once. Bravo...
Jkoopaling chapter 6 . 1/3/2015
I have a bad feeling about Mavis's sharp pains. I hope this isn't going to be what I think is going to happen.
Jkoopaling chapter 5 . 1/3/2015
I HATE the inspector, SHE should be fired and reported to the council. Also, I love this fic so far.
Wendy80 chapter 1 . 11/12/2014
It's too long
Xanadu-King chapter 2 . 10/6/2014
Alright, so I know that you have already completed this story but I too love reading about them. I often found myself smiling at scenes in your A-Z of Life story, it would often remind me that I want something like that too. Although I am sure we would all want something like a zing in everyone's lives, and I am still looking for mine, but I digress. She is pregnant again, which I am totally down for, apparently being a vampire now did nothing to subdue Johnny's sex drive.
CM7 chapter 30 . 2/16/2014
Great job on this great story Can't wait to read the next story, See you then.
Awesomo3000 chapter 30 . 2/11/2014
Aw, shame this story's over, but I look forward to the sequel! :)
Sondardo chapter 30 . 2/11/2014
Wow, the epilogue already, time sure flies, doesn't it? That chapter was truly nice, filled mostly with tenderness, happiness and positive emotions, though, some worryness can't be avoided...

It was nice to see how everyone was viewing Lily's status as a human, and how they could see the positive sides of it, she can go out in the sunlight, and she didn't cry for very long. Yes, she's aging fast, but she still have a lot of time left, so, everyone is focusing on showering her with love...

Oh, and I loved how ironic it was that Mavis was okay with the age gap between Freddie and Lucy, but that Johnny wasn't! That was surprising, since he was a human and all, and that he had quite the age gap with Mavis too!

For now, Lily's still a kid, so it's not so bad. However, when she'll continue to age quickly, I fear that everyone will feel some measure of despair. When, in a few decades, she'll look as old as Mavis, that will start to be difficult to bear... and when she'll become an old lady in a few more decades... brr...

Yes, life is unfair, so all you can do is bear it, and enjoy what you can... And, ohh, i liked how you toyed with the possibility of Johnny and Mavis having more children, with him stating that he wouldn't mind celebrating more birthdays like that, and with Mavis stating that her sterility is not definitive yet. And... that foreboding at the end? Four kids are perfect, and nothing could go wrong? Riiiiiight, hehe!

Regardless, I can't wait to see what you will write about in your sequel! Probably mixed bits about everyone's lives; Lily growing up, Freddie's and Lucy's wedding and perhaps Lucy's pregnancy (I would love to see Mavis and Johnny's reactions), Jack's life too, perhaps even Mavis getting pregnant with a fifth child. Many things can be written... including Lily's growing older and older, and her eventual death... Her death will most likely be sad, but if she leaves this world, with her parents and family showing their love for her, her death can also be tender and somewhat sweet too...

Since you intend to write your next story kinda like A-Z, this means that things won't arrive in chronological order, and that you could portray Lily as an adult before portraying her as a teenager, or that Lily's death probably will not be at the last chapter, right? I don't know if it will be as lenghty, but I can't wait to see! Thank you for writing such beautiful stories, and for entertaining us, you have a lot of talent!
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