Not a bad beginning, though not terribly original yet. I like the idea of them destroying light and dark as concepts.

I wouldn't mind a little more background for your story... How much of their history coincides with canon until sixth year? If Draco's already brought death eaters into the castle, the Snape hasn't killed Dumbledore; is the headmaster cursed?

Oh, wow. Can't wait for more! Really good start! I love Harry and Hermione BFFs against the world. Lol.

very good keep going

Really looking forward to this one!

This is an interesting start!

It's a huge credit to your writing how readable I found this. I really can't imagine the Weasleys behaving this way but you are so good at setting a scene and describe feelings so well that I could see past that, plus I see what you're trying to achieve with that as a plot element, and appreciate the originality. Just one little grammatical niggle, watch your tenses - e.g. 'Their lives have changed dramatically a few hours ago' should be 'had' (I noticed a few like this). Apart from that, great writing.

On that note, I would like to refer you to a creative roleplaying site called Rocky Mountain International (www. rmimagic .com). From this story it looks like you'd fit in wonderfully with the other creative writers there.

Very interesting beginning. I like evil Dumbledore and greedy lying Weasleys.

Ok you have to put up the second chapter to this ASAP! You've DEFINATELY captured my attention and I have to admit I love these stories where people pick up on the manipulative nature of Dumbledore.

Great start! Like it so far!