|Reviews for Sailor Ranko: Tunnel Vision|
| maryjane5000 chapter 27 . 3/16
Since Sun wasn't breathing for a moment or two when she comes to you could have had her say "Hey Tomboy, your Mother says she misses you & she's proud of you"
| Guest chapter 29 . 7/10/2015
"Work is good for you, Ranko" Nabiki smirked "Try it sometime"
"Starting at the age of ten about twenty places during the training trip then since coming to Nermia the NekoHatten & Uuchans, which has been good for me. So how about you take your own advise Nabs & get a job"
| Chaosking chapter 25 . 7/10/2015
Pluto should have said
"She's angry & frusterated she has lost more then any of us"
"How can you say that?"
"Her father, mother, her in-laws, two friends & two best friends & several of them right in front of her"
| maryjane5000 chapter 23 . 7/10/2015
This doesn't make sense
Mercury fades as she dies turning back into Ami (her civilian form) her mother comes in & sees her dead but can't tell anyone why she crying for Mercury
I get the secret identity but any hospital staff that sees Mercury change into Ami would know why she was crying for Mercury but if no one saw her change they would see the senshi taking Ami
So wouldn't it be "couldn't tell anyone why they took her daughter?
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/9/2015
You keep saying that time erased but to when because it more or less goes
Sailor Ranko by Fire
Send Ranma & Akane to Jubban & Learn from Mr. Miyagi
Ranma recruited by senshi
Sun retires, Return of Sun & nearly dies
Trapped in Jadite's dimenssion
Train Akane, Final Battle & Rejected by Mother
Sailor Ranko Love Story by you
Ranma goes to talk to Uuchan while Akane vs Shampoo
Flashback to training Akane
Nodoka's regret, Akane vs Mousse, Akane's wig
Proposal, return to dojo & Ranma gets biology lesson
Twice in a Millenium
R&A get married, Akane is made a senshi
they find Ranma's familiar
Ranma & Nodoka reunited
Black Moon Eclipise of Sun
Return to Jadite's, Return to Nermia?, Yuka possessed
Move out of dojo/transfer to Jubban, to Sun station
Nabiki gets Konatsu to follow them while Sun remembers past life, Return of Usa
Sun & Io help Neo-Moon, Mars then other senshi remember
To Jadite's dimension/Sun & Io to Crystal Tokyo
Help save universe then return
Granted Ranma & Akane may forget what they did in Crystal Tokyo but given they remember everything else as do the rest of the senshi. So, why wouldn't Konatsu remember being sent by Ukyo & Nabiki?
| maryjane5000 chapter 6 . 7/9/2015
Ok, I understand that
While Sun & Io were in Jedite's dimension the senshi forgot they were senshi, the NWC forgot Ranma & Akane got married
So they transfer & leave Nermia, they help Neo-Moon which restores the senshi's memory which in turn gets Senshi sent to Jedite's while Sun & Io are sent with Neo Moon to Crystal Tokyo. Now while this is happening back in Nermia Nabiki is getting Konatsu to spy on Ranma & Akane.
He finds out & tells them then Ranma & Akane return to the past which except for trip to CT they & the senshi remember so how is it erased?
| Guest chapter 10 . 7/9/2014
It's boring. Not bad writing, just a really boring story with not much happening and what does happen is kind of lame.
| Marty chapter 22 . 7/16/2013
This is the second time I've read this and I have to voice a pet peeve.
If a scene takes place out of doors when a character generally cannot fall to the FLOOR... They fall to the GROUND...
When the scene takes place inside a building they fall to the FLOOR not the GROUND...
Sorry for the all caps - I'm not yelling its just for emphasis.
| Marty chapter 13 . 7/15/2013
This is a very small comment:
She kneeled and waited at the door for them to all come back and enjoy a nice family dinner together.
She knelt and waited at the door for them to all come back and enjoy a nice family dinner together.
You do very good with word usage and usually use the correct form.
Many do not (using sneaked instead of snuck) (here instead of hear) and etc.
| Guest chapter 19 . 3/31/2013
Sun should have started glowing sickly green (sign of Shi Shi Hokodan) after she woke and fixed her leg
| Guest chapter 15 . 3/30/2013
Last chapter Ranko & Akane don't goto school because of Genma's death and when they leave you make no mention of how there dressed before going senshi so we assume there in their normal outfits yet all of a sudden when they stop being Sun & Io, Ranma is in a school uniform
So no school & Ranko is wearing a girl's school uniform while Akane is wearing one of her normal outfits
This doesn't make sense
| Y2Ranma chapter 13 . 3/30/2013
Two problems with your story
1) You say it's a Sequal to "Black Moon Eclipse of the Sun" so Ukyo should have already known about Ranko & Akane before she sent Konastu to Jubban
2) Sailor Pluto can teleport by herself so she shouldn't need Sun's help
| Guest chapter 6 . 3/30/2013
If you read "Black Moon:Eclipse of the Sun" you wouldn't have Ukyo thinking that Akane might be a senshi because Konatsu told her & Nabiki that both R & A Saotome were senshi
| Guest chapter 6 . 3/30/2013
If you read "Black Moon: Eclipse of the Sun" you'd now that Konatsu already the only difference is that Yu have Ukyo send him instead of Nabiki
| Grizzmon chapter 10 . 3/17/2013
Well, sometimes is ok for a man to cry...