Reviews for Betrayal
Death Gone Wrong chapter 1 . 5/8
I can't help but notice that some letters in the first chapter could be used to spell "I love Hitler"
quokinnns chapter 9 . 5/6
omg imagine if this was a Naruto/ Gaia story. Then you would have to call it nary/gai
lololol. It would be a youthful couple at the least
Lewis-Sama chapter 16 . 3/24
Great. It would be great if Itachi told Sasuke that he didn't chose the village over the clan, but he chose Sasuke over both the village and clan.
DViper chapter 4 . 3/9
Honestly, I have to say I like your idea. Unfortunately, I have to stop reading it after Chapter 4.
Your story/ idea is good but the plot was not.

The story too rush with too little explaination. I mean take the bell test for example. The moment where Naruto put 'kunai' at Kakashi troat I assume. You did not mention a kunai or sword or tanto at Kakashi troat. You just said
"He stopped when he felt something cold on his throat". Something cold be anything. Hell, I could imagine an ice spear at his troat.

It would be nice if you explain a little more like
"He stopped when he felt something cold on his throat. Behind him, he saw Naruto holding a kunai with piercing blue eye as to show his hatred towards him when he betrayed Naruto at the Valley of the End".

and I'm only talk about 'kunai'. There a lot of scene where I saw you rush it.

I'm sorry if my review a little harsh. I just want to show which part you can improve since this is a great story. Like I said, I love your idea.

Thank you for the story
DViper
Fangirl-Miu-Chan chapter 7 . 2/9
*raises eyebrow*
Fangirl chapter 5 . 2/7
Poooooor Jiraiya, He's going to be the victim of Planetary Division
Fangirl chapter 1 . 2/7
*Fangirl Scream* SOOOOO COOOL!
so, kakashi prefers a raging tsuande over the rage of the council.
Guest chapter 16 . 1/12
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Talonsen chapter 16 . 12/26/2016
DEATH to Kohona! Well actually… if you think about it as Hokage both Naruto and Orochimaru could get everything that they want. Orochimaru could declare war allowing Naruto to declare martial law and with that he could kill off anyone and everyone who was against them. Now Sasuke obviously hates Itachi so they can use that to manipulate them. This way Naruto can keep the love and loyalty of all his love interests while taking his revenge and keeping his promise to Orochimaru, this would also allow him to gain Oto and Ame as allies as he could use his Hokage position to smooth things over with the two villages. Just an Idea, feel free to tell me if you think it's dumb.
lostxinxthexdarkness chapter 16 . 12/24/2016
Great story so far, keep up the great work!

P.s. I hope you have a great Christmas/whatever holiday you celebrate!
zen-aku the spirit of the wolf chapter 9 . 12/13/2016
why I'd the otokage not orochimaru, orochimaru is the founder of oto
zen-aku the spirit of the wolf chapter 2 . 12/13/2016
right, it's ridiculous, it's obvious that he finally hit his ceiling and has given up on them, now he is hoping to exact revenge for all the shit he has dealt with during his life
Gbds chapter 16 . 12/11/2016
Good story so far.
Majin-kun chapter 4 . 12/7/2016
Jonin Exam in Oto? Lol.
KamiKageRyuuketsu chapter 8 . 12/5/2016
Ok this childish immature teenage cat fight bullshit is completely immature and childish and no one gives a fuck about stupid petty cat fights well mature adults don't I see them as petty and immature
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