Reviews for The Family Business |
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![]() ![]() ![]() elspith smirked not Rosie |
![]() ![]() ![]() *reads the last sentence* And THAT is why you don't mess with people Sherlock Holmes cares about. |
![]() ![]() ![]() How old is Elspeth, exactly? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Poor Elspeth! I've completely fallen in love with her as a character and it was just so hard to see her in so much pain! I did get upset while reading it but that just proves how good a writer you are for making me loves these characters in was the show doesn't even do. Have loved this story since I started it! |
![]() ![]() oh no. (I really like your writing style) |
![]() ![]() This is amazing |
![]() ![]() OMGoodness! You are an INCREDIBLE writer & just gave me soooo many feels. I'm reading this on my ipad & I think u gave my ipad feels, cause it kept shutting off at the emotional parts the last two chapters lol. I realize it's been a few years since you wrote this but I hope you see this review & know how much I love your writing (both this story & the prequel were great) I hope you continue these stories when series 4 comes out next year :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh shit it's 2 am and i'm crying my eyes out i have this huge headache |
![]() ![]() ![]() yes Astrid Berges-Frisbey |
![]() ![]() ![]() The part where Elspeth mouthed, "My ex-boyfriend" was brilliant. :) However, I cannot imagine Sherlock ever having a daughter. It seems out of character. Also, this first chapter is mostly a copy of the actual episode. Still though, good job. The backstory as to why Sherlock moved into 221B Baker Street was VERY believable. Not concerning himself with mundane matters like paying the rent is exactly something Sherlock would do. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is probably the best Sherlock fic I've ever read. Excellent work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story is absolutely brilliant. I can't thank you enough for writing it, this is so wonderful and I'm so thankful to have the pleasure in being able to read it. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like Elspeth, I just wish that this would have been an original mystery case, cuz I already know this story from the TV show and now it just feels repetitive and a bit boring. Elspeth has a lot of potential but she is a supporting character that is not needed in this case...I want more Elspeth is what I am trying to say, I guess. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This chapter was better, as Ellie felt more like a justified character |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ellie is starting to stand out more. But still, her being there isn't felt very much in the story. I think another reviewer said this, but she seems like a bit of an afterthought. I was told a while ago that when you insert in an OC into a plot line that we all have watched, there needs to be a justification. You have a great character in Elspeth, but you aren't justifying her. Try asking yourself what will change with Elspeth being there-make big choices, rather than little ones. Perhaps a plot line won't go the same way, and it'll end up changing. If Elspeth is an important character, then her being in the story should logically make things change. Just some food for thought :) |