It’s painfully clear that Hatake is being set up to be a romantic interest, which is fine, but I’m not happy with the way you did so. His reaction at first was cliche in a bad way that doesn’t match what likely should have happened, though his later reactions to the bento was definitely more natural, if not completely.

This is a very well written story so far. Usually the fanfics of Naruto that aren’t Drama or Action types don’t really feel satisfying to read, but for some reason this one is. I like it and I’m glad.

Awww great story! I hope it continues! Really great writing and Im loving the changes from the canon!

noooooooooooo... no, no, no! Asuma! Stop raising flags!

ahahaha his least favorites are anything fried especially tempura, or sweet proud to say i knew that

I know this is a long shot but I've just reread this fic and I remembered how much I loved it and how much of a cliffhanger we left on! I was so looking forward to the Sound invasion, it's my favorite part of the anime and add to that a pregnant Shiori and an overprotective Kakashi, I'm desperate to read it. Please please please consider coming back to this fic, even for just a few chapters more. Please please please

Only made it till here because it's a civilian SI and a Kakshi romance.
Can't say I'm a better writer than you are, but what bothered my is that there's so much telling and not much showing. Also not a lot of diaglogue that would have made it a bit more organic and fun.
You offen say she's very warm and open, but she and was not to her peers. She doesn't seem to have any friends.
A lot of scene seem to be too well, when i'm reading I ask myself where the conflict is (internal or external). Often, there is none.
It's fine to have a beautiful OC, but you can't make everyone love her. Have some characters (that are likeable) not like her.
Keep on writing and editing! :)

noooooooo it ends fuck you mate i want moarrrr

noooooooooo

What the heck, I am enjoying this far too much didn't even notice I'm at the end chapter lol

Hahzuqvsuaha being so used to reading slow burn pairings makes me a bit unused to this fast paced relationship. I wonder when kakashi will have the team 7

This is still one of my favorite stories. I just had to reread it again.

are you going to continue this story

This will always be my favorite chapter. I just couldnt get the smile off my face while reading this

I've... reached the end. This story was going so well too, this had been an amazing read, I hope you pick it up again. Sadly, that won't be the case seeing as its been more than 4 years since you updated