Who calls the transports “dust planes”? I’m pretty sure the show called them “Bullheads”….

So you have essentially flipped the script for Juane, with no aura and plenty of training. That's interesting. but is it even possible for a character on Remnant to have no aura whatsoever? Wouldn't that cause a severe case of death? How long can he possibly last without a soul, or at least with a severely diminished one? I guess we will see.

Pyrrha you are the slyest snake that ever slunked through the straights...and I love you for it.

I love this Pyrrha so much.

I love this story so much.

I'm ashamed that I never finished this wonderful piece of literature. I am determined to finally get through this.

I just recently started getting into RWBY Fanfics and had to make an account just so i could tell you I appreciate your work. I'm going to start looking through the other content and hoping to find awesome Jaune works. He feels like a grossly underused/underrated character, so I'm glad you gave him a more interesting backstory.

Weiss is a little OOC, then again so is Jaune, I like the new setting this fic has presented to us, can’t wait to see where it goes

You'd expect there to be some sort of tracking mechanism for those lockers. And ways of moving people fast, like a flying vehicle or something. And some sort of protocols in place when students go missing. And a place to put wounded students after a mishap.

So I'm saying this forest adventure subplot was dumb, basically. I'll still take it over most of the dumb crap that happens in original RWBY though.

This no aura thing is weird. Sure it's a much better underdogification for Jauneyboy than being utterly worthless idiot dweeb like the original, but he'd be at least crippled by now without some supernatural aid.

This story is so unbearably charming.

Pyrrha is a treat.
Weiss is endearing.
Velvet's adorable.
Jaune's a real stand up cat.

The way you write is very distinctive. It draws the scenes so visually and poetically. Makes me feel good on the inside when we have small sweet moments and makes the heart pound when its time for some action. I hope you eventually do more stories, I'd love to read more from you.

This fic, was a good fucking fic! I loved it.

Yeah, nothing screams about girl's affection better as her beating the crap out of him. You have really retarded understanding of romance.

I have't read that much, but it seems that the romance between Jaune and Weiss is a bit forced and not natural.

Alright this is absolutely horrible. Can't read this anymore, waay too black and white for a realistic fic.

the fuck r u doing dude, you're purposefully conjuring up psychotic villains just to simply fulfil the need FOR a villain. You know that stories work perfectly fine without exaggerated antagonists, I know you might've learnt in school that ppl dig evil villains and the greater the contrast between good and evil the better. But it makes ur story unrealistic and cannabalizes the original character. Shame on you. And Weiss punching jaune after such a beating? That's utterly ridiculous if only to cling onto the template tsundere theme u have going on for her.

I don't really appreciate you making Weiss into a damsel in distress. Maybe if you'd explained her altered backstory abit more that would work, I'm not opposed to it but she's rly ooc right now. Even Neptune didn't do this to her back in the show.