Bro it would be so CUTE if Harry lived with the Diggorys, him and Cedric would be like brothers. You know how adorable that would be!

I thought this might be interesting story, but youre basically just writing canon and its boring. So this will be where I stop reading.

lol im on harry on this one. with very little population they are going to change one way or another. or is the neutral just going to be the stop gap before they go killing muggles again? the status quo was already on the brink 10 years ago in the story, what more when the evidence can be seen in this years current students. them gatekeeping the culture is the most obvious one, and they can bitch about however they want (that's what they are good for anyway) but proclaiming that muggles are overruning them while also being racist?

Where did you find those lyrics?

Thank you for a wonderful work, it has given me the best time.

“Harry Potter is jus as same as Rowling is”

Well, since JKR is a pos racist transphobe that doesn’t bode well for Harry.

Ok, it can't just be me that feels like HP is just weak here. Even with his superior physical stats and reflexes which are important in a duel and somehow he still loses? I mean I don't really mind much except the fact that Herm seems to better at everything that him other than flying. LMAO just send her off to fight the Dork Lard.

Seriously Hermione telling Harry to "not pick fights" like he's looking for themsorry I tried enjoying this I really did but it's fucking annoying that nothing gets done. Good story just not for me.

Oh wow a good story.
I think it was good and delightfully well written with a plot that was both very alike to Rowling's and yet so far from. You had indeed come up with a new, exciting and original variation that embraces incredibly wide in the universe with your clear take on answering some of the questions that Rowling had left behind. Not only that, but this was an incredibly approximate adult twist on the original HP.

I thought maybe you focused a little bit to much on their travels to foreign countries, yes. But it is also a matter of taste and pleasure, and I also see that it was relevant to the aforementioned twist. Furthermore, I must honestly admit that I ended up skipping much of your passage about their new game because it seemed pointless and bored me. But I could then suddenly see the purpose of it with Viktor and Harry's talk after Cedric's death, something I certainly didn't like either, but at least his death didn't seem as hollow as Rowling's version. This time I actually got to cry, so bravo for that.

That said, I must also admit that I love all your movies and Doctor Who references. And as onr fan to another fan, I'm going to have to tip my hat to you, for all of them, but most of all for your portrayal of Barty Crouch Jr. It was so amazingly made that I could imagine David Tennant in those scenes.
Brilliant!
Okay a little bizarre with that... Ehm... Stuff? ... With his own cousin, but you must surely have to include some of junior's madness to make the character right otherwise it would br even more wierd.
But seriously, I could give you standing ovation for his first scene in history.
So... before I go, I just want to tell you: you were fantastic. Absolutely fantastic.

Okay, I can't stay quiet anymore. I hate how you're downplaying Harry's skills! You're making Herimone a Mary Sue and having her doubting Harry left, right, and center whenever he brings up his concerns, and HES ALWAYS RIGHT! The bint doesn't even CONSIDER his concerns before she's slapped in the face with proof that he's right! Plus, Harry's always been better than Herimone at the practicals, but here you're writing her like she's the second coming of Merlin prodigy that never really struggles with anything! Not even flying! Hell, Harry should AT LEAST be a better dueler even if she had a faster time picking up spells! But, he never gets ANY type of special edge, even if he's a child of prophecy! You're even setting up Herimone becoming an animungus (which is Harry's ONLY) special skill at this point! And, don't get me started in how she jerks him around, dismisses all his plans until he wears her down, and even ties to talk the adults into not taking his concerns seriously! And, what's rankling me now is that you had JUSTIN, a kid who has no dueling experience, beat Harry when he's already better than a good person of the THIRD YEARS. That's just crap and bad writing! Especially when you talked about the power it took to bypass the protection of his wrist holster during his fight with Quirellmort. It's like you want to stomp on Harry's abilities even more than you've already done.

This was a good second year! I really enjoyed the extra scenes with Ginny and how you're including later locations and events earlier in the timeline.
Glad to see Neville being included and how he's already changing due to Harry and Hermione's influence. The assorted friendships with the other kids and characterizations of existing characters is nice; in particular the little changes you've made to Ron feel natural and welcome. I'm not the biggest fan but he's done dirty far too often in fanfics lol.
I feel I was too harsh on Hermione previously; while I'm still not a fan of the public nature of her restraint, it is in Harry's best interest. The mistakes he makes or brawls he enters would have far wider repercussions and there's no guarantee public opinion will side with him.
Finally I don't think I mentioned it before but I really like the beginnings of writer!Harry we're seeing.
Thanks for writing this for all of us!

I understand you're keeping things close to canon while providing details and stretching it out into a more coherent story, which I appreciate, however it makes the gaps in logic very frustrating. I suppose it's understandable narratively: on one hand you have what are supposed to be children and on the other you have adults with no common sense. With that in mind, obviously they can't fix their own problems or see the issues with their arguments. But it also feels a bit like hitting a brick wall again and again until we reach the point in the story where we're allowed a resolution. Malfoy kind of deserves to win at this point lol. Or we need some actual adults in the room like the Grangers.
Adding to the frustration is Hermione constantly cutting off Harry, often using some physical way related to cats. While I get she's the sort of big sister role and is keeping him controlled, this isn't OoTP Harry that flies off the handle regularly due to recently developed PTSD (which would still be bad form, but I digress). It just feels controlling rather than supportive which is how it's portrayed, and it's that which gets me annoyed.
It wouldn't be so bad if Hermione got some pushback in one form or another, from Harry or otherwise, but with her intelligence and (mostly) superior spell casting, she's almost too "perfect." She's taking agency away from Harry (with good intentions or not), showing her bossy side over her sibling and no one comments on it.
Given the length of this story I imagine it will have a pay off or be addressed, but it feels like a long road to get there. I'm just glad she came around on Lockhart; waiting until the end of year for that reveal, another QuirrellSnape situation, may have pushed the frustration factor too far.
Dispite my negativity for this chapter I'm still enjoying the story and want to see how things play out. I have confidence in your writing, that it will be done well and in an interesting way, these are just some irritations that keep popping up.
Most of my annoyance is at Malfoy, the governors and Dumbledore, whom I know are basically giving an explanation for how things proceeded like they did in canon. Seeing the mishandling "live" so to speak and treating the situation as so openshut though, while counting the kids like they're potatoes, just leaves so many options on the table that I want Dumbledore's beard to come alive and smack some sense into all of them.

I enjoyed first year! The way the story unfolded was pretty interesting and I liked how known scenes were changed to reflect how they could play out in this world (the quidditch game, overhearing the meeting, the resolution with Voldy, etc). The way you portrayed Snape and Quirrell was well done and I really liked how you made Voldemort's anger the reason for the stutter. It's a simple, nice touch I don't recall seeing. Quirrell's classroom scenes were always fun too.
I also appreciate your more nuanced take on Dumbledore. It's easy to write off Dumbledore's actions and perceived actions as crazy, malicious or negligent (or through bad writing on JK's part), whereas the answer for PS/SS's events unfolding as they do is more complex than that imo and I like how your Dumbledore reflects that.
For the negative, while I liked the political scenes and fleshing out existing events for the story, they were also the source of many times I felt the children acted far too intelligent and mature. Sometimes you noted they could be (like Nott) repeating their parents talking points, but other times they were sounding like teens or young adults. A lot of authors struggle with that and writing believable kids is hard; once they age a few years it will be a non-issue, it's just right now where it feels a bit off.
Harry and Hermione are also a mixed bag for me. I really like how you're "balancing" them and Snape says it best when he notes Hermione's intelligence (I think) but that Harry's instincts are better, however there are several moments where their reactions made me facepalm. The biggest offender being Harry's reaction to Mrs. Norris at Halloween and frankly I still don't see how a quarter of the school wasn't onto Harry immediately, if not for the right reasons. I can reason and explain many of the times away in my head, but I'd like if they were foreshadowed more or played up in importance and addressed. Granted they might be used later; I could see your Daphne remembering that incident and piecing the story together.
Overall a very enjoyable year and better written than the vast majority of authors have done, even if events didn't play out exactly how I wanted. _
Thank you for taking the time required to get this written for us! I'm looking forward to the rest of the story.

This has been a great lead-up to the beginning of first year! I've really enjoyed how you've written the Grangers and the little slice of life scenes covering the years. Initially I thought Harry would be stuck and Hermione's family would have to investigate their highly intelligent cat to uncover his identity and get it reversed, but I'm glad I was wrong.
This is looking very promising and I'm happy you've written so much for all of us!

You know it's written well when here I am sobbing at the end. Well done creating your own tasks. And cho aseer? I like it. Can't wait to read next story and find out who the weird sisters are