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Deck Divination chapter 1 . 11/27/2013
No offense, but you shouldn't pack dialogue between more than one speaker together. Read any printed book (such as Harry Potter) to see how it's done. (Normally I wouldn't even read something written this way because it's one of my biggest nits, but this was short.) You asked, so I hope this helps. :) Interesting idea; could have been developed into a larger story.