Reviews for Under These Scars
Darkmiror chapter 30 . 3/24
Sorry! Just realized my review got posted as a guest review
OMG I CAN’T BELIEVE IT’S OVER!
This has been such an intense, crazy, heart breaking, funny and moving ride! Holy gods what the hell am I going to read now (this again obviously lol. Or book 5…)
Standing ovation to you, the authorYour writing is an ABSOLUTE joy to read (even if the content itself wasn’t always so happy lol). The intensity, the character depth, the characterizations, your writing style, your humor (LOVED your humor!), your range of emotions, your character interactions, your PLOT, your folding in of canon and non-canon, your storytelling….I could go on and expound on these, but the Cliff Notes version is; I loved this series and your writing This may now be my favorite fan fiction series ever. And I wasn’t even sure I was a ShikaNegi fan when I started lol. (Rest assured, I am now.)
Oh man, so many things to say and ask you now! And I know that stories don’t always end in neat bows, but there are a few questions scattered throughout the next few paragraphs that hopefully you can answer
First; I really liked that you made Sarutobi Hiruzen not a perfect person. The more I read the manga or watched the show, the more I realized he made a LOT of questionable decisions in his time. I mean seriously, in what universe was what he did to Naruto(just one example) ever a good idea? Where was the harm in telling the kid who his parents were or at least telling the villagers so they didn’t hate him? That was a HUGE risk he took in alienating such a powerful ninja. Or how he left orphan children to live alone without any adult assistance? Just a lot of things I wondered about, but still he was viewed in a positive light by many of the older shinobi and I liked that you showed both those views of him.
Second; PTSD. This has got to be a huge problem in a ninja village and I liked that you didn’t hide from this issue. You truly delved into the grit and gore and suffering of these amazing people who sacrifice so much but are then told to wrestle their resulting demons somewhere out of sight.
Third; Ino. Omgods I loved how you portrayed her here I was not a fan of her manga/anime version, but I loved her here! You gave her so much more depth! Made her an actual person, with relatable problems and feelings and issues, rather then just the designated pretty girl on Team 10. (Same with Tenten! Thank you!) I saw a lot of myself in your characterization of Ino and I just want to say thank you for writing her with such dedication and care. I didn’t think I’d end up liking her scenes but I did, and that’s all thanks to your writing. Because through your writing I was able to put myself in her shoes and connect with her in a way I was not expecting. Thank you
Fourth; what is Mizugomo’s story!? Holy crow I loved her character! And her interactions, Insights and humor with Genma and Kakashi were amazing
Fifth; very much a fan of how you tried to end and start a lot of your line breaks/changes in POV with the same words or concepts It was a neat trick that I got a fun kick out of every time I read it
Sixth; your understanding and use of the Japanese language in this story was lovely Are you fluent?
Seventh; I do not remember if this gets answered in the manga/anime, but how did Karibi die? I’m assuming she died before Naoki “died” at 19, since he knew she had died. Did they both die on the same mission? And if so, WTF NAOKI! You left your lover and teammate to deal with both your deaths on his own!? Knowing the type of person he was!? And even if they died on separate missions they couldn’t have been that far apart judging by their ages in Genma and Naoki’s memories! Like seriously, WTF NAOKI!? How bad of a fucking friend can you be pulling shit like that on your best friend/lover/ comrade/subordinate/partner! I’m surprised that with their deaths so close together, that Genma even made it to the Tanzaku incident.
Sorry I don’t mean to flame Naoki, I actually found him a very compelling character and liked how he seemed to impact and impart different things to different characters. This just really bugged me because he knew Genma- cared for and about him!- and that is not the kind of stab-in-the-back or flat-out- abandonment-in-a-time-of-need that any good friend, partner, commander, comrade or lover should do. Sorry, had to get that off my chest
Lastly; I LOVED how you had everything come full circle at the end It always impresses me when authors are able to reintegrate events or thoughts or points from the beginning of a story, into the end. And you did it masterfully️
THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING THIS AMAZING SERIES! Your hard work, time and dedication are EXTREMELY appreciated!️️
I hope things are going well for you and that you and yours are staying healthy I’m keeping an eye out for any books by T.A Rayne Hope your Original Works are going well!
And of course, I’m keeping an eye out for anymore of your fan fiction work (here and ao3)
All the best, and thank you again for giving us this fantastic story.
Guest chapter 30 . 3/24
OMG I CAN’T BELIEVE IT’S OVER!
This has been such an intense, crazy, heart breaking, funny and moving ride! Holy gods what the hell am I going to read now (this again obviously lol. Or book 5…)
Standing ovation to you, the authorYour writing is an ABSOLUTE joy to read (even if the content itself wasn’t always so happy lol). The intensity, the character depth, the characterizations, your writing style, your humor (LOVED your humor!), your range of emotions, your character interactions, your PLOT, your folding in of canon and non-canon, your storytelling….I could go on and expound on these, but the Cliff Notes version is; I loved this series and your writing This may now be my favorite fan fiction series ever. And I wasn’t even sure I was a ShikaNegi fan when I started lol. (Rest assured, I am now.)
Oh man, so many things to say and ask you now! And I know that stories don’t always end in neat bows, but there are a few questions scattered throughout the next few paragraphs that hopefully you can answer
First; I really liked that you made Sarutobi Hiruzen not a perfect person. The more I read the manga or watched the show, the more I realized he made a LOT of questionable decisions in his time. I mean seriously, in what universe was what he did to Naruto(just one example) ever a good idea? Where was the harm in telling the kid who his parents were or at least telling the villagers so they didn’t hate him? That was a HUGE risk he took in alienating such a powerful ninja. Or how he left orphan children to live alone without any adult assistance? Just a lot of things I wondered about, but still he was viewed in a positive light by many of the older shinobi and I liked that you showed both those views of him.
Second; PTSD. This has got to be a huge problem in a ninja village and I liked that you didn’t hide from this issue. You truly delved into the grit and gore and suffering of these amazing people who sacrifice so much but are then told to wrestle their resulting demons somewhere out of sight.
Third; Ino. Omgods I loved how you portrayed her here I was not a fan of her manga/anime version, but I loved her here! You gave her so much more depth! Made her an actual person, with relatable problems and feelings and issues, rather then just the designated pretty girl on Team 10. (Same with Tenten! Thank you!) I saw a lot of myself in your characterization of Ino and I just want to say thank you for writing her with such dedication and care. I didn’t think I’d end up liking her scenes but I did, and that’s all thanks to your writing. Because through your writing I was able to put myself in her shoes and connect with her in a way I was not expecting. Thank you
Fourth; what is Mizugomo’s story!? Holy crow I loved her character! And her interactions, Insights and humor with Genma and Kakashi were amazing
Fifth; very much a fan of how you tried to end and start a lot of your line breaks/changes in POV with the same words or concepts It was a neat trick that I got a fun kick out of every time I read it
Sixth; your understanding and use of the Japanese language in this story was lovely Are you fluent?
Seventh; I do not remember if this gets answered in the manga/anime, but how did Karibi die? I’m assuming she died before Naoki “died” at 19, since he knew she had died. Did they both die on the same mission? And if so, WTF NAOKI! You left your lover and teammate to deal with both your deaths on his own!? Knowing the type of person he was!? And even if they died on separate missions they couldn’t have been that far apart judging by their ages in Genma and Naoki’s memories! Like seriously, WTF NAOKI!? How bad of a fucking friend can you be pulling shit like that on your best friend/lover/ comrade/subordinate/partner! I’m surprised that with their deaths so close together, that Genma even made it to the Tanzaku incident.
Sorry I don’t mean to flame Naoki, I actually found him a very compelling character and liked how he seemed to impact and impart different things to different characters. This just really bugged me because he knew Genma- cared for and about him!- and that is not the kind of stab-in-the-back or flat-out- abandonment-in-a-time-of-need that any good friend, partner, commander, comrade or lover should do. Sorry, had to get that off my chest
Lastly; I LOVED how you had everything come full circle at the end It always impresses me when authors are able to reintegrate events or thoughts or points from the beginning of a story, into the end. And you did it masterfully️
THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING THIS AMAZING SERIES! Your hard work, time and dedication are EXTREMELY appreciated!️️
I hope things are going well for you and that you and yours are staying healthy I’m keeping an eye out for any books by T.A Rayne Hope your Original Works are going well!
And of course, I’m keeping an eye out for anymore of your fan fiction work (here and ao3)
All the best, and thank you again for giving us this fantastic story.
Orange chapter 30 . 12/5/2021
I love you
PaolytaCampusano chapter 1 . 8/16/2021
por fin estoy en la ultima entrega de esta maravillosa saga y solo digo que estoy un poco mas que fascinada en verdad e disfrutado tanto cada entrega tus parrafos tus narraciones decir que elevas la imagincion y ecxitas mi fascinacion queda corto . como describir el huracan de sensaciones y reacciones que e tenido desde que empece esta odisea . llevo meses leyendo lo que imagino debio costarte años escribir soy pesima con las palabra que quisiera mas que describirte de manera filosofica y lirica lo mucho que me a provocado tu escrito . pero no lo consiguiria solo te puedo agradecer por escribirlo . porque es fascinante , intrigante , ecxitante y entretienes una vaga que ama la lectura . que no habla ingles pero a aprendido muchas cosas gracias a esto . mis mejores deseos eres increible te as convertido en mi aut r favorito .
szurp chapter 13 . 6/29/2021
i've been suspecting SA was apart of what Shuken did to Shikamaru and it seems that might be ringing true... oddly the anxiety that this prospect gave me is starting to ease. I guess it's true we fear the unknown more than anything lol
Ohana15 chapter 30 . 6/10/2021
You really do have an amazing talent for writing! The detail you write with paints such vivid imagery it's impossible not to get lost in the world. I know I mentioned this before but the character development is simply fantastic as well! I'm just as in love watching the characters grow both internally and externally as much as I am in the wonderful twists and turns of your well conceived story line. You obviously put in so much time and effort and you ended up with two beautiful pieces of artBrilliantly done!
Herbe Rouge chapter 30 . 1/28/2021
This is the second time I read this series, and I still love it as much as the first time !
I will go and check out your original fictions now :)
Anon chapter 30 . 9/15/2020
I have no words, my love for this fic is endless, my heart hurts

I like to think that in the future, Hiashi makes good on his admission that there are three things/people he would die for, and gives his life protecting Hinata & Neji in the war bc jeeeeeesus the way Kishi handled Neji's death... so pointless, just to push naruhina closer
Anon chapter 29 . 9/15/2020
I can't even put into words how much i loved this chapter and how much on the whole that this fic means the absolute world to me
Anon chapter 28 . 9/14/2020
Godddddd wow Shikamaru's new skill & power in manipulating the shadows... sexy

Looooooove smiling & joking neji, god, this is his freedom

Raido

shikaneji

Kudos kudos kudos kudos kudos kudos kudos !
Anon chapter 27 . 9/14/2020
Three weeks later! Yay time-jumps

:( only 4 chapters left tho

Kiba/ino are so good! I love them!

Neji & the spicy curry
Wow i rly love happy neji who's comfortable w/ his friends
CUUUUUUUUTE he got giggly drunk w/ tenten & lee that's so sweet

God if this wasn't a shikaneji fic i would kill for this kind of camaraderie in a nejiten fic wow they're cute

LOVE Genma just. Coming and sleeping w/ kakashi and just keeping doing it.

Oh :( the memories of Asuma always hit hard. . .
Anon chapter 26 . 9/13/2020
Gai ! I love him
Neji actually eager to be with his friends and team mates ! I love that!

I'm glad Genma's being taken care of

Shikamaru & choji :)

Poor kakashi
"Sai was sitting tight-lipped beside him with his tiny appetizer, chewing a square of milk-white tofu with his poor, bloodless, anaemic, milk-white face tipped down and to the side," god this is so so so funny you capture each character's sense of humor so incredibly well, especially Kakashi, wow

"Kakashi wasn't having any of it. He made to turn away. His left foot, however, decided to get ahead of itself, while the right foot, hastening to catch up, overreached completely and crossed straight over his left leg in an awkward 'X'. To avoid looking like an idiot – though yes, that ship had sailed – he twisted his hips to complete an absurd pirouette, trying to smooth it over into a deliberate display; hands out to the side like a magician, as if he were exhibiting his phenomenal mastery of physics."

Jeeeeeesus oh my heart is full. I love Kakashi

Genma a little jealous?

The corset god "his horrible little dog" that's so funny but poor pakkun he trusted Ino

Yayyyyyyyy Genma laughing and being happy for a moment!

Oh i love love love love rock lee he loves his friends so much with so much youthful passion
Neji did it for the curry for Lee

Oh :(( Lee worried he offended Neji :(
But Neji actually talking abt his feelings w/ Lee ! Growth!

Lee is so good

Three weeks
Anon chapter 25 . 9/13/2020
Genma/naoki okay NOW i'm cryinh jeeeeeeeesus christ

Fucking christ dude holy shit

Oh i am so sad oh my god i was Not expecting to be just this Absolutely Gutted i hope that you're reading this and that you Know how emotional and effective ur writing is it's unbelievably strong

Thank god Sayuri's apologizing to Ino
And good girl Ino for not just swallowing a childhood of bitterness w/ one apology

Kiba/ino wow they are so sweet i love them

Oh Naruto :((( i love his tendency to throw tantrums that use up so much of his emotional
energy he just has to lay on the floor for a while after

Shikamaru and his parents :)))))) cuuuuuuuute

I feel like i'm gonna be so lost after i finish reading this fic, 've powered through it so steadily and with such a connection to it...
Anon chapter 24 . 9/13/2020
Shikaneji yessssssss yes yes yes Neji rly does need to make more bonds w/ people besides Shikamaru and i'm so so so happy that he Knows Shikamaru's right and Also that Shikamaru's not just. Pushing him away or asking Neji to walk away, he's just. He needs and wants and loves Neji and the "When you're done finding [your reasons], come find me" and "next time around" and Neji's bc maybe he thought shikamaru wanted neji to find more reasons and not come back but then shikamaru reassures him ... ugh i love this fic so so so so so so much

Kiba going to Kurenai to check up on her love his pack mentality
ALSO cute that he wants to talk to her abt Ino

Asuma :(((

Neji protecting Hanabi from Hitaro ! Yes!

Hinata ! Good girl! Love to see her standing up for herself and those she loves!

Hiashi protecting his kids and Neji ! God what a relief and whAt a rollercoaster, jesus

hiashi having neji bow at the same degree as hinata & hanabi... oh
And then dinner invite... "our family will eat together"

Naoki just out and referring to Neji as Shikamaru's lover... love that.

Shikaku apologizing to Shikamaru and giving him a hug

Ino & Naoki :(
Oh i'm so sad :((((
I'm gonna cry i haven't been this sad in a long time
Anon chapter 23 . 9/12/2020
SHIKANEJI! oh i was Not expecting Neji to get to Shikamaru as quickly and easily as he did! Even if things get harder again (and i hope they don't) so so so so so glad they're getting this moment to Communicate w/ each other for Once

God yes Neji holding onto Shikamaru and Shikamaru finally being able to let it all go, let it out. . . Oh that's good

Genma thinking ninja pirate like kakashi had... cute

Shikakuuuuuuu ! Hell yeah
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