Wtf?! Did I read that correctly? Did Naruto burned Shisui's eye & other sharingans?! Why? That seemed so foolish.

Isn't Susano'o a bit overkill?

This is the chp that had me wondering whether I should read it or not. Reviews left me conflicted, but I'm glad I chose to read it.
I think the reason why Naruto chose jot to reveal his dojutsu is cuz he wanted to test his taijutsu prowess. And also cuz he's probably planned to reveal it during final 1v1.

i think this is my 3rd time reading this story. I read it years , definitely more than 8 years old and its still my favourite story of from you. i know lot of people are complaining, ignore them. If you're rewriting the story to make it better great, if not it's ok

I gave this fic an honest try, because I liked th3 premise.

I had to drop it because it's borderline unreadable. The grammar ia terrible and the amount of words and sentences being repeated over ane over is a headache to read. The characters are boring, the fights are boring and the inconsistencies are annoying to navigate.

All in all, the premise has potential, but the fic is unreadable.

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I’m lost kinda… so itachi and kisame wouldn’t go after Naruto when he was with Jiraiya but in this Naruto is stronger then him by a lot yet he’s struggling with people that Jiraiya could easily defeat? The plot convenience is crazy for no reason. It makes it hard to read at times when you try to push Naruto to be like a younger Madara

Bro has 2 girls after him but he has the personality of a dead fish I mean damn even Sasuke (in this) has more personality even Madara in canon had more

Bro struggled worse then Sasuke in his canon fight against Orochimaru. Bro trained in what areas gang he just seems the same with the EMS now. It’s disappointing that you have him all this shit and you’re still making him weak so he isn’t OP. Idk what’s worse the fact he can use wood release and you didn’t have zetsu get scrolls about it (could have been made up) or that his fighting experience is shit so now he’ll struggle for a dumbass reason

7 chapters in and Naruto just showed his eye and is relying on them too much. Baki fucking Baki would give him a hard fight without his MS? I call tons of bullshit

Had a lot of promise early on… devolved into meaningless trash half way through and became a mess of forced plot lines and nonsensical arcs. I’m not surprised you abandoned this.

u know whats funny, this is how naruto really should have ended up like. THE fact that he stayed sane and didnt have any gruges against konoha is so unrealistic.

ugh this is where i stop

if this is what you're going to do every fight you shouldn't have give naruto mangekyou sharingan and wood release. heck he's even the jinchuriki

naruto could have just put orochimaru and kabuto in tsukuyomi. that's how op tsukuyomi.

now that he has ems, amaterasu strain should be gone.

I CALLED ITTTTTT MWAHAHAHAHAH