You overused angst as character growth in this story and most of it was way too predictable. Some interesting parts you brush over while boring parts you stretch, but overall it was a very good story.

Just one thing, The sister stuff was unnecessary, Ichigo doesn't actually need equilibrium to not soul suicide, he is a natural born hybrid. His Quincy side is not allergic to hollows unlike other quincy. I mean, in cannon Ichigo essentially dies when he gets his chain of fate broken and nothing happens, that is equivalent to diying as a human. Also, ywatch had no problem in general video bg quincy abilities to arrancar, so we know that shinigamihollowquincy is a stable combo by itself

To be honest I don't care much about Yuno's death, but I still think it was a bad move for one reason and one reason only: It was way too predictable. It was a female OC that liked Ichigo in some way, last time we had an "female OC that liked Ichigo in some way and was kinda tragic", you killed her for Ichigo character development, then with Yuno you do the same. It was essentially too predictable. You should have made Yuno either non tragic, male, not an OC or any combination of those.

She was, essentially, too similar to the burned face gal from the beginning and you used her for a similar reason. Since you introduced Yuno I smelled the fish, it was way too predictable. It would have been a much better twist for Ichigo to think that she dies, only to discover that she actually survived, but that all other kids died. This would have made Ichigo inner conflict much more interesting as one part of him would be glad that the student he cared about survived but that would only make him feel more guilty about the rest as he would feel guilty about his relief. The perfect moment would have been in the tomb scene, instead of Shunsui, it should have been Yuno, this would have elevated the inner conflict in Ichigo with what I described AND would have served as a twist for the readers compared to the previous "OC female tragic heroine".
On the other hand, you could have made this even more tragic by not killing a very predictable death flag OC and instead a character that is not an OC and would have made a greater impact. You could have prolonged the stay of the little noble girl in the living world a bit and have her and her guards be the ones to receive the stray attack instead of a random group of students. This would have been an unexpected twist for the readers who would have feel that those characters where now completely safe, and would have been much more personal for Ichigo as he had started to see the little girl as a little sister.

In essence, the story beat about Yuno did not affect me too much, and I am a bit disappointed because of that, it was soo predictable that she had a death flag that I never attached myself too much to her, making her the sole survivor would have been a good twist that would make me think more about my assumptions, on the other hand killing other characters would have been more impactful than Yunostudents. You could have killed the Noble girl, or even Ichigo's human friend, you could have killed Chad or Tatsuki and Orihime or Keigo. Those would completely devastate Ichigo and would have made this Hollow debacle more understandable.

You know what would have been a good twist and better way to handle Yuno? Make her secretly evil, make Ichigo hear about brothels still operating, only to start investigating, burst into the great boss office only to see that it is Yuno who was handling those new brothels, that would have been mighty unexpected and would also destroy Ichigo.

TLDR: Yuno's death flag was too predictable as you already did that with a tragic female OC who supported Ichigo. There were better ways to handle Yuno and better ways to make this event of collateral damage much more personal for Ichigo.

I am an avid fanfiction reader specificly Naruto and Bleach, I must have read hindreds if not thousands of fanfictions, but the number of truly good, attention catching stories that repreasent the writer's vision as well as maintaining some canon events as a guide are very few and this story is at the top of my bleach fanfiction list. You are truly good my friend, stay your course, I look forward to the next chapters.

It got boring real fast and not very far into the story. Fine idea but seemed you didn't have the writing skill to actually make it engaging without throwing endless amounts of pointless bullshit and annoying angst that isn't needed and no one cares for but you.

you canceled the story, then?

JEEZ

Ok bro, there’s a limit to everything. Ichigo is such a b!tch. Every little thing somehow scares him now. Also, why is he so dumb? Even a child has better critical thinking skills than him. I wouldn’t be surprised if this was actually an Ichigo bashing fic.

Why is Ichigo so dumb? No way a normal person can be this slow

ok that was just angsty bullshit! There was really no reason for students to be in the living world, let alone for Ichigo to kill them

God I love Aizen

Hey dude. How are you doing? I'm just writing this here review to let you know I still think about your story a lot. I've noticed you haven't been online as much, at least as far as I can tell, so I just wanted to share a little wordvomit in case you come by and see it. I honestly think this is one of the best Bleach fanfics in existence, and definitely my favourite on this website. I'm outraged that TvTropes doesn't have a page on it tbh, but I'm too lazy to write one up myself I guess. Anyway, I happened upon your Reddit profile, and saw your concerns about plotholes and rewriting earlier chapters. I know that to you I'm just some random dude on the internet, but for what it's worth I don't much care if it DOES have plotholes. they can't be that SoD breaking if I didn't notice them, and you can excuse a lot with Narrative Tension and Drama. The progression and characters in this thing are amazing, and few Bleach stories have as much, heh, soul put into them, if you'll pardon the pun, so I honestly wouldn't worry about it too much. I say write as you want! It's better and more internally consistent than most contemporary fantasy anyway, haha. I'd also like to mention that I really like that the Bleach metaphysics revolve around chains so much in your story (it makes so much SENSE) and that the Hell-Arc was absolutely fucking badass. It left me hyped to the gills for the next arc, and Ichigo's 'recovery' in Soul Society delivered on it pretty well. I'm still looking forward to his future shenanigans.

Anyway, I hope life's treating you well. I'll await your next chapter with a smile; Ichigo will have his little piece of Heaven yet, I just know it.

Bro did you have to kill kazumi I was shipping her and Ichigo so hard

You say it will make sense but nothing has made sense so far you keep retconning things you did in earlier chapters. That reiryoku domination ability was already done in another chapter and it was like he just forgot about it. He even trained in it for goodness sake when he was stuck in that prison. The sudden scene skips may feel artsy but in actuality they are just adding more frustration. I thought you were building to something but it just seems like you forgot what he already accomplished wasn't he getting better in kido and controlling his reiryoku out put. Does he still need the seals or is he past that. This constant gatekeeping of your character to extend the story is frustrating to me. It is even more frustrating when we are told the character is not ready for something when we have literally seen him not only do it before but practice it. Oh he is meeting with aizen when aizen could easily kill him how edgy! Please stop focusing on how "shocking" the story is and for once just think about making it entertaining. You can't just focus on building up some "shocking revalation" you need to give the reader a reason to stick around.

Angst doesn"t automatically make your story good. All of this angst has actually slowed it down.

Well it seems like you want to make him jn to a whiny brat.
It just seems you soend more time giving him trauma to push than you do him actually getting stronger